Dear Princess Twilight Sparkle
Hi! My name is Aurora and I am a filly from the town of Fillydel Baltimare. I am twelve years old. I am writing to you now because I have a problem with making friends and I was wondering if you could help me with that.
I learned about you in class at school today and it seems like you have a lot of friends (especially cause you had to use the elements of harmony all the time) so I was just wondering if maybe you had time you could help me out.
Sinserly, Aurora
PS: Sorry if this is not the right address. I looked it up in the textbook but I was not sure if it was right because it said (pending) and my mom said that means ponies aren’t sure about something yet.
Dear Aurora,
I’m sorry that I kept you waiting for a response. Usually all of my correspondence is routed through Spike, so I wasn’t prepared for a letter sent via Pegasus Express. I’ll have to keep a closer eye on my mailbox in the future. If your letter is any indication, it may start filling up sooner than I’d expected.
I’m very flattered, and perhaps more than a little surprised, that you thought it was worth writing to me for advice. And that you learned about me in class. I wasn’t aware that they’d already added me to the curriculum. The address you have is mostly correct, by the way. It’s Golden Oak Library, though—not Golden Oak Castle.
I’d have liked it if the textbook authors had asked me before printing (erroneous) contact information, but I guess it’s important for textbooks to keep comprehensive information on all subjects… even if I’m one of them now. I’ll have to write to them about the misprint.
Anyway, I’m not entirely sure if I’m the best pony to ask regarding your concerns. I mean, I am a princess, yes, but the coronation was only a few months ago and I don’t think I’m really qualified yet to give out official Royal Statements of Advisement (that is, advice). I don’t have any documented references collected on how I should word formal responses yet, or any experience in professional advice-giving, Royal or otherwise.
I’m sure neither of us would be very happy if I told you something and it ended up with an infestation of all-consuming parasprites, or sending everyone into a magical frenzy through improper use of the Want-It Need-It spell, or you devastating your house by summoning a giant octopus.
I may have been, to some small extent, involved with one or more of the above events before I became a princess, which should hopefully be ample proof that I still have a lot to learn before I can be considered a trustworthy source of advice, courses-of-action, and counsel.
You may want to ask your parents for help, or failing that, contact Princess Celestia. She taught me everything I know, more or less, and her advice has always led me down the right path. I’m sure she’d be more than happy to do the same for you.
Feel free to omit my title from any future letters you may send, seeing as this isn’t technically Royal Correspondence.
Sincerely, Twilight Sparkle
Dear Princess Twilight Sparkle,
I tried to send a letter to Princess Celestia when you told me to, but I got a letter back from her saying that I should talk to you instead. She told me that she isn’t the most qaulified princess to ask about friendship, but Princess Twilight would know enough to help me. I do not know if I am supposed to send her another letter or ask you again so I am asking you again. I hope that is okay.
I also thought about asking my parents but they have been very busy with their new jobs and making our house look nice, so I do not want to bother them.
Please help.
Sincerely, Aurora
PS: I am sorry if I am bothering you too. If I am please tell me and I will stop sending letters.
PSS: I am sorry too for still calling you princess, but my mom always says its very important that I always call royalty by their proper name. I think that is because I took a field trip to Canterlot last year and I acid acccidentally said Princess Luna should be called Princess Loudypants where she could hear because she shouts so much. I got grounded for a week so I do not want to make that mistake again.
Dear Aurora,
No, no, you’re not bothering me, per se. I just wasn’t prepared yet for letters like yours. If I’d known that new princesses started getting requests for assistance so soon after their coronation, I’d have bumped Princess-Subject Correspondence a bit higher on my list of study priorities.
It’s strange you got sent back to me, though. I could have sworn I’d explained to Princess Celestia that I’d explicitly directed you to her. Maybe Spike forgot to send the letter. He’s usually very efficient when it comes to that sort of thing, but it’s not absolutely impossible for him to make mistakes (at a rate of about 2034:1, if you count this one).
I guess it wouldn’t be fair to bounce you back to her for a miscommunication on my end. And if Princess Celestia told you it would be best to contact me. I’m not sure why she’d say that, exactly, but I did say to trust in her advice. It would be a little hypocritical of me to argue against that, wouldn’t it?
So... just tell me all the relevant details of your problem, and I’ll help you out to the best of my (limited) abilities. I’m still very new to being a princess, so it won’t officially be a Royal Statement of Advisement, but it might give you a little perspective on things. There’s an old Equestrian proverb about taking advice with a chunk of the salt lick, and I think that should apply here nicely.
Just try not to act on anything I tell you before thinking about it first. If you can do that much, then you’re already off to a good start. I can’t tell you how many times I wish I’d thought more about something before doing it—summoning a giant octopus in my own house being example number one. Please don’t ever do anything like that.
And, again, you really don’t have to call me Princess Twilight Sparkle if you don’t want to. I will admit, though, that it’s a slightly better title than Princess Loudypants. If only just slightly.
Sincerely, Twilight Sparkle
Dear Princess Twilight Sparkle,
Thank you for helping me out! It’s good that you like your title more than Princess Loudypants. I do not want to be grounded again.
My problem is that my family just moved to Baltimare from Fillydelphia and I do not have any friends anymore. I used to have some friends in Fillydelphia but we only talked mostly at school and I do not see them now that I live far away. Everything is all weird and new and the ponies in Baltimare do not seem very nice compared to Fillydelphia and I am scared to talk to all of the ponies in my class… I answer the teacher’s questions a lot whenever she asks them but all the popular ponies like Ruby Red call me a teachers pet and say I’m weird for reading books like Daring Do all the time, so I am not sure they want to talk to me much either…
I don’t want to stop reading, but I also don’t want to have to be alone forever if we stay in Baltimare. Could you please tell me what I should do to make more friends, like you have?
Sincerely, Aurora
Dear Aurora,
That… does sound like a tough problem. I may have to think a little more about that one. And about your continued use of my title. In the interest of punctuality, though, here are some preliminary thoughts:
I remember being in a situation like yours, once. When I attended Princess Celestia’s School for Gifted Unicorns, I was the class studybug. Granted, I was never really interested in making friends in the first place, but it wasn’t uncommon for the other ‘gifted unicorns’ to call me things like nerd, egghead, and Miss Knows-it-all-a-lot [sic].
To be honest, I never actually learned how to deal with that. I didn’t pay much attention to what the other students were doing, and only discovered the magic of friendship after I’d already moved to Ponyville—which I’m given to understand isn’t much like Baltimare.
The ponies here were all nice enough that they took to me fairly quickly, so I’ll need to do some background research before I can outline a complete solution to your particular problem… Not that it would be an official princess-recommended plan or anything, but your problem’s piqued my interest as a student of friendship, so I’d be more than happy to theorize an unofficial course of action for you. Particularly in regards to this ‘Ruby Red’ pony.
That said, don’t ever stop reading if that’s what you enjoy, no matter what anypony says. It’s great that you have a passion for reading at such a young age, and there’s no reason for us the young fillies of Equestria to be treated so horribly for an appreciation of the written word. Don’t hide who you are because you think it’ll make you more popular with your friends. I made that mistake once, and while I’m sure it won’t end with an Ursa Minor rampaging through your town like it did for me, I don’t think you’ll end up any happier for it.
Daring Do’s an excellent choice, by the way. Keep an eye out for the next one! A. K. Yearling’s said it should be out within the next month or so, barring another delay.
Sincerely, Twilight Sparkle
Dear Princess Twilight Sparkle,
Okay I will do that then. Thank you for the advice!
Sincerely, Aurora
Dear Aurora,
I, um, haven’t actually given you any advice yet. Still working on that. I hope you didn’t read my letter as a recommendation to move to Ponyville. I’d really rather not have to explain that one to your parents.
Just try to hold on until I can compile something more concrete for your problem. Spike’s helping me go through my old reports on friendship. I’m sure there’s something useful in here that can be applied to your situation.
Sincerely, Twilight Sparkle
P.S. I just remembered that postage costs can be hard on a filly’s allowance, especially when you’re trying to balance them with book purchases. I haven’t had to worry about paying postage since Spike grew old enough to start sending my letters for me, so with his (tacit) approval I’ve enclosed a sheet of enchanted stamps. Attaching one of these to your letters will route it straight through him—for free. And much faster than Pegasus Express, I ought to add. This should make it a little easier for us to carry out our correspondence.
Dear Princess Twilight Sparkle,
Sorry. I meant the advice about how I shouldn’t stop reading just because Ruby Red calls me names. I do not think my parents would want to move to Ponyville anyway. They still get mad sometimes when I say I wish we could go back to Fillydelphia.
I will wait.
Sincerely, Aurora
PS: Who is Spike?
Dear Aurora,
Oh! I guess I’ve mentioned Spike a few times without actually telling you who he is. Spike’s a dragon, and he’s been my assistant since I was about your age. Since we’re sending letters through him now, he’d like me to inform you that he’s also ‘extremely cool and tough.’
His words, not mine.
Enclosed is another sheet of enchanted stamps (this time with Spike’s explicit permission). I have a feeling you may end up running through them pretty quickly.
Almost done with that report. Putting the finishing touches on it now, actually, and I think it looks promising. I should have it ready by the time your next letter arrives… Maybe just a few minutes later, if it’s as fast as your last one was.
Sincerely, Twilight Sparkle
Dear Princess Twilight Sparkle,
Is Spike the little purple dragon on the window at Canterlot castle? I saw that on my field trip there! You should tell him he is very cute and adorable. He does not look very tough, but I think that is better because if he were a tough dragon that would make him look scarier.
Do the other princesses have dragon assistants like him? I didn’t see any others on my field trip there but maybe they were all out sick that day.
Sincerely, Aurora
Dear Aurora,
Well, congratulations—you’ve given Spike the biggest blush I’ve ever seen. Which is actually rather fascinating, given that he’s a dragon. You’d think the reptilian ancestry would prevent that, but then dragon biology is still something of an underexplored subject.
And no, he’s not my assistant in any official capacity, or because I’m a princess. Spike and I have been together since long before I had to worry about any of that. I guess, technically, he’d qualify as a royal advisor now that I’m a princess, but I don’t like to think of him that way. He’s always just been Spike to me, and I don’t think that will change anytime soon.
Anyway! I’ve finally completed a rough outline of a plan for you, which I’ve enclosed in this letter. It uses a statistical analysis of all my experiences and observations regarding friendship to plot out the optimal course of action for your future social needs. Hope it’s not too confusing. I tried to get Spike to look over it and make fixes where the jargon got too technical.
I’m really excited about this report, to be honest. I’ve calculated every bit of wisdom it contains to 95% accuracy, and I’m fairly confident it will work for you—given that they worked pretty well for me. I wonder if this is why Princess Celestia directed you back to me, actually. She’s probably a little too busy with her other duties to apply this sort of scientific rigor to her recommendations.
Hope this helps. If you have any questions concerning the report, feel free to ask.
Sincerely, Twilight Sparkle
Dear Princess Twilight Sparkle,
Okay, I will! Thank you very much Princess Twilight! I will start reading it right away.
Sincerely, Aurora
Dear Princess Twilight Sparkle,
Sorry but I have a question to ask. Do you live in a castle like the other princesses do? We learned about you in class again today and when the teacher said your address I told her that it was wrong in the textbook and that you lived in Golden Oaks Library like you told me.
Only the teacher said that princesses are supposed to live in castles so Golden Oaks can’t be a library. Then Ruby Red laughed and said how would a bookworm like me even know if the textbook was wrong? I told her that was because you told me your address but she said I was lying and the teacher had to give us a timeout because we were being disruptif in class.
If you do live in a castle can you send me a picture of it so I can show Ruby Red she was wrong and I do know you? I hope it’s really big and great like Canterlot castle.
Sincerely, Aurora
Dear Aurora,
Well, I’d specified that any questions were specifically to be about the report I’d sent you, but that’s not a bad question to ask. Anything to ensure the curriculum is as correct as it can be, I guess.
I do not live in a castle. I, uh, actually live in a tree. Golden Oaks Library is a tree. Please be sure to correct Ruby Red about that—try not to rub it in her face, though, as specified in page 42 of the report. Even the worst of enemies can become the best of friends, after all.
But yes, Golden Oaks Library is a tree, and always has been. I really ought to check with the textbook publishers about that mistake on my address. You’d think they’d respond a bit faster when it’s something as important as correcting typographical error. It’s not like they’ve listed Princess Cadance as living in the Crystal Gymnasium….
Sincerely, Twilight Sparkle
Dear Princess Twilight Sparkle,
Oh.
Well is it a big castley tree with fairy servants like in the filly tales?
Sincerely, Aurora
Dear Aurora,
Not as such, no. It’s just a hollowed-out oak tree currently in service as a library. It’s not that big or that great, but it does have a nice selection of books and cultural artifacts from Ponyville’s history.
In fact, I’m enclosing some annotated pictures of those to share with any new friends you might have. Perhaps Ruby Red might like to see these too? I believe the report does recommend finding subjects of shared interest as a point for friendship. Check the annotations for the horsehead bust in particular. It was carved in commemoration of the Ponyville Derby War, and I think some of that could appeal to the Daring Do fan in you.
Sincerely, Twilight Sparkle
Dear Princess Twilight Sparkle,
Oh. Okay. I guess trees are not the worst places for a princess to live.
These are really cool pictures by the way! Thank you!
Sincerely, Aurora
Dear Princess Twilight Sparkle,
Ruby Red was not very interested.
What should I do?
Sincerely, Aurora
Dear Princess Twilight Sparkle,
Please help. I do not know what to do to make Ruby Red friends with me. I tried everything your report said but it still isn’t working. She called me a nerd when I tried to talk to her about the anot annotated pictures and said she was busy. I don’t think she likes me very much even though I am trying to be nice to her like your report said I should. It says you are not supposed to judge a book by its cover but she does not seem like a very good book and none of her friends seem very friendly either.
I am not sure what else to do.
Sincerely, Aurora
Dear Princess Twilight Sparkle,
Help???
Sincerely, Aurora
Dear Aurora,
I’m really sorry to hear that Ruby Red doesn’t want to talk to you. I was sure that I’d calculated everything in my report to 95% accuracy, even accounting for some differences in our respective situations, but maybe that was a little generous…
I’ll have to recheck the math. I might have added something incorrectly, or maybe Spike smudged a variable again. Something must’ve been wrong there. I’m sure the analysis was correct. There must be some reason the report isn’t working.
I will follow up on this as quickly as I can. I promise.
Sincerely, Twilight Sparkle
Dear Aurora,
Enclosed is a revised report, complete with updated calculations as to how you might go about making friends with ponies like Ruby Red. Hopefully this one should be more comprehensive, including data I’ve compiled on Baltimare and the general temperament of the ponies living there.
Try talking to her about how the things she’s said are hurtful to you—maybe she simply doesn’t realize that it hurts to be called a nerd and a bookworm. A truce, at least, could still be possible, and from there you might be able to find some common ground with her. It’s worth a shot, if nothing else. Detailed calculations on odds for success can be found in the report.
Sincerely, Twilight Sparkle
Dear Princess Twilight Sparkle,
Thank you Princess Twilight! I will try really hard to follow all your advice.
Sincerely, Aurora
Dear Aurora,
Great! Please be sure to write back about how it goes. I’m really interested in seeing how well these calculations can be applied to different situations.
You know, it’s kind of funny. I hadn’t actually read any of my old friendship reports for the longest time before I wrote these recommendations. I used to read them more often, for a refresher, but that sort of falls by the wayside when you become a princess and there are royal functions to attend and princessly responsibilities to learn about. Maybe, once I’ve finalized all my calculations, I should go back to them and give them all a good, nonscholarly readthrough.
I hardly even remembered how Rainbow Dash reacted to Daring Do when I first introduced her to the series. She’s such an unabashed nut for it now that you’d never believe how hard she worked to hide it at first. I may have to tell you sometime about how she broke into a hospital to get that book back without anyone noticing. That’d be a fun story to tell. Maybe, if you hit the 90% odds for reconciliation with Ruby Red, you’ll be able to look back and tell me one just like it. Who knows? If she ever gets around to reading it, she might prove a fan.
Don’t mind any of the above—just a little open musing. Good luck making friends with Ruby Red! I’m 90% sure you’ll do great.
Sincerely, Twilight Sparkle
Dear Princess Twilight Sparkle,
I’m really sorry I don’t know what I did wrong this time, but Ruby Red didn’t want to talk to me. She said that if I got any closer to her some of my nerdyness might rub off on her and she did not want to catch my weird book diseese.
I think that was because I was holding a Daring Do book while I was talking to her but I just wanted to show it to her because maybe she’d like it and want to borrow it to read herself like you said I should. Only she didn’t and she said I should never get near her again.
Do you have any more advice that might help? I’m sorry if I did your advice wrong but I am not sure what else to do to make friends with her.
Dear Aurora,
What? She actually said that?
Well then, listen here, and listen good. You go up to that snooty little brat and you tell her
Dear Aurora,
Sorry. Please disregard that last message, if you got it. Spike may have accidentally sneezed while dusting around my desk.
If you don’t know what I’m talking about, don’t worry about it.
Anyway, I don’t know what else to say, really. I’ve gone over all the numbers, and I’ve checked every friendship report I’ve ever written, but none of them account for somepony like Ruby Red. I’ve known a couple ponies who come close, but even then… Well, it’s just not a matter I have much experience with, yet. Maybe there are just some ponies out there with whom you can’t make friends. It’s not your fault. Don’t blame yourself—if anyone, blame me.
I’m sorry. I tried to help you out as best I could, but I’m really not qualified yet to give out the sort of advice you need. I still have a lot to learn about being a princess, and providing quality recommendations is clearly one of those things I’m still learning. I think I may have been way overzealous when I assured you of my report’s accuracy, even as I tried to avoid giving you false hope. I hope you can forgive me for that someday.
I think it may be best if we cut off correspondence right here. I’ve added a couple Pegasus Express stamps you can use to send another letter to Princess Celestia and ask her again for advice. It’s clear that I’m not cut out for providing any sort of recommendation, even in an unofficial capacity. I hope she’ll see that now, after this.
Thanks for sticking with me this far. Perhaps I’ll be better situated for corresponding with subjects in a few years, and if anypony is half as willing to put up with my shenanigans as you are, I’m optimistic about my chances to do better in the future.
And if you’re as patient with other ponies as you have been with me, I have great confidence that you’ll find plenty of friends in Baltimare someday, with or without a princess’ help.
Sincerely, Twilight Sparkle
Dear Princess Twilight Sparkle,
You don’t have to say sorry. Some ponies like Ruby Red are just meanies and if I can’t make friends with them because of that it isn’t your fault either. I am very greatful that you did so much to help me make friends in Baltimare. I am sure that your reports are still very good too so I will save them and remember what you said in them when I meet some ponies who aren’t mean like Ruby Red.
Don’t worry! You are the nicest princess I have ever talked to. If anypony like me sends you a letter like I did again I think you will do great.
Sincerely, Aurora
PS: I hope you do not mind if I call you my first friend I have in Baltimare now, cause after all of the help you gave me I think you deserve that title a lot more than Ruby Red or any other pony.
PSS: Good luck!
Dear Aurora,
I would be honored to be your friend. Be sure to write again, whenever you have the time. I may not have any more advice for you, but I’m glad you think we should stay in touch. In fact, I’ll send you another sheet of enchanted stamps, to hold you over for the next month or so. Keep an eye out—you may have some good news to report to me in the near future.
And thank you for that letter. I may not have had much to teach you, but I’ll be sure to remember everything you taught me.
Sincerely, Twilight Sparkle
By Royal Decree:
Let it be known that the filly known as “Ruby Red,” currently in attendance at the Baltimare School for Aspiring Young Foals, is hereby barred from the unprovoked teasing, tormenting, and/or bullying of the filly known as “Aurora,” under penalty of extended detention without appeal. May she ignore this decree and continue to dub Aurora such things as ‘nerd,’ ‘egghead,’ or ‘Miss Knows-it-all-a-lot’ at her own peril.
Signed, Princess Twilight Sparkle
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How wounded I am by your barbed remarks.
Also, Incomplete story. The rest coming to a store near you someday.
Nice exchange of letters here.
It was quite, well, relaxing to read, really.
~Skeeter The Lurker
pls2godie kthxbai
sarcasm and joke fonts needed
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I feel like you two are being insulting to this man-person's story. It is a short and sweet one-shot; I say one shot because it can't really be continued after this chapter
Obselescence writes an incomplete story? Well this is surprising
Very nice. Somehow you manage to write something that reads like something that would happen in the show. Good work.
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It does happen sometimes. After a lot of angst, prodding, and tears.
The best way to learn is to teach, and the best way to get experience is to actually do something. A lovely exchange of letters between adorkable nerds. I look forward to more.
Also, Loudypants is best princess.
It's great, Obs. Favorited and liked!
New from Hasbro! Princess Loudypants! With dual speakers hidden in her flanks, she's the loudest toy you will ever own. (That is, until Vinyl Scratch gets her own flank-speaker doll.) Now with ten different phrases.
I like this, so it gets an upvote. (Note: I hit the upvote button once and the number went from eight to twenty-four. How in blue blazes did that happen?)
That's ONE way to stop a bully.
This is so cute. It takes a skilled writer to write below his level.
As well, did you mean to se this story as incomplete?
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3691803 let's be nice and offer constructive criticism instead, yes?
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I assume picking on Luna this way is what got you your downvotes.
I'm dying!!!!!!
Really good stuff here, eager for more.
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I don't understand what was so terrible about the story. It seemed sweet, in-character, and was a fun and simple read that made me smile. I'm assuming he's borrowing the names of some OCs from a terrible story or something, and that's the problem, but honestly I can't find anything insult-worthy in this whole story.
(EDIT: Except for the grammar, i suppose. Also, I decided to see what some of you people wrote, and foun out that some of you who commented are open about going around insulting stories to test authors ability to handle negative criticism, and I can kind of see logic in that, but this is an author who wrote many stories before this, and this story is a fairly good story, so I don't think you guys are really justified here.)
As for an actual comment on the story; it was sweet, fun, and made me smile. Giving it a like and a favorite.
3691811 LISTEN HERE, BUCKO
I'LL WRECK YOU
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Woah woah I never saw this side of you
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Folks, please. I'm all for good fun, but can we try not to derail the comments too badly? :(
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I liked the story, but you already knew that. Good show, and so on.
*claps*
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*Rewards with treat*
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Okay, I've had my fun. 'Twas a very good story, in all honesty, so I'd really like to see more.
I like this, but I feel twilight is a bit out of character. It feels here almost like she has high functioning Asbergers What with how she has to calculate out To an obsessive amount how to do simple social interactions. Still, a cute story.
3692119 well for OC names borrowed I only saw aurora from rainbow factory
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I think it's partly natural Twilightness in wanting to calculate and categorize, and partly due to the stress of being in the position of a princess giving advice. In my mind, Twilight'd be less confident in her own wisdom, but a bit more comfortable relaying advice derived from research and careful calculation.
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The names were taken pretty much entirely from thin air, so if anything lines up with a name in another fic, it's totally by accident. :V
It was pretty nice.
One way to keep me from falling asleep at 11:30... Wait... it's 11:30? :
Whatever! Nice job, Obs!
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I find her to be the same old Twilight. She's humble enough to think that she's not deserving of the princess title and obsessed with trying to apply statistics to a friendship report, forgetting that she didn't gain her friends by forcing them to like her, but quite the opposite: by being herself.
Until she got to Ponyville (and even after), she probably also avoided ponies with bullying tendencies like Ruby Red. Twilight hasn't had to deal with Diamond Tiara and Silver Spoon in the show, or even most fanfiction, so it doesn't surprise me that she isn't handling this as well as she'd like.
That said, the friendship blossoming between Twilight and Aurora is adorkable, and I look forward to more.
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I think the reason why people dislike this is because, while accurate and quite charming to those with a more refined literary pallet, to the average reader, this story can seem somewhat bland and dry. It is most likely the non-descriptive, factual, letter like format. While I commend you for truly capturing the essence of letter correspondence, reading such a format is like eating a plain slice of bread simply for the sake of consuming the bread. Call me French, but I like bread (translate this to "Call me dry and overly analytic [no offense to the French, this simply makes the metaphor work], but I enjoy this letter format)! I suggest having the next sender write in a very descriptive type of language and possibly throw in some popular literary devices like irony and sarcasm for comedic effect. The contrast for such vibrant, attractive writing against Twilight's heartfelt, but rather orderly, strict, dry, and factual writing will create an even bigger appeal for your story. That is all. Please note that this work was excellent. It simply didn't go over well with the masses. Continue writing well and excellence will eventually draw SOME fans to your doorstep. In fact, at this point in time, it already has. Congratulations on your spot on the featured list. I look forward to your next work.
Aurora is the cutest filly I've ever not seen.
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Um. Right then. Carry on.
~Skeeter The Lurker
Maybe it's just me, but I found the entire exchange rather charming, and Twi's "solution" at the end has BACKFIRE written all over it, so there's Chapter Two et seq.
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69nth like here, now to find out what is going on with those two... never mind I'll let them keep making noise in the closet. also Good story.
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One second I'm finishing the chapter, the next I see a wave of hate comments. I just don't know what went wrong.
that people took me seriously makes me laugh.
seriously, though. good story, obs
I... Wow, that was really good! Kinda shocked that it's incomplete with how it ended, but that just makes me even more eager to read more! Letter format is hard to pull off, but it read quite smoothly, so props for that!
This was all very cute and whatnot, and I thought it was a great story. But, and it is a big but; i thought the whole point of season 1,2 and 3 was for twilight to learn that life and friendship was more than just calculations and study.
All in all though, you have done quite well to keep the flow of the story intact, despite the difficulty presented by correspondence narratives. I had difficulty finding much evidence of world building however, but this is inevitable sometimes with this writing style.
overall: 7.5/10