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arcum42


Admin for various groups, occasional vectorer of screenshots, and writes stories like Cubic Zirconia, among other things.

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The woods are lovely, dark, deep... and dangerous. But Dinky wasn't planning on going anywhere near them. Her mommy told her not to, and she always listened to her mommy...

Thanks to Elric of Melnipony for letting me bug him and offering a number of suggestions that improved things.

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Comments ( 33 )

Dark and creepy.

I loved it... But... Poor Sparkler...

~Skeeter The Lurker

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Thanks. I don't usually write things without a happy ending, really, but this just worked, and it fits right in with the type of story I was trying to write.

--arcum42

Not bad at all! I liked the way you were able to approximate a storyteller's voice and the way you paced it was nice. Overall, I enjoyed it. Not bad!

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Thanks. It's a bit away from what I usually write, but I think it came out well. I was nervous about publishing it, because it's the type of story that'd be really easy to mess up.

Of course, I expect a certain amount of hate from people that like Dinky... (Though I do actually like her as well.)

--arcum42

That was really screwed up...

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Yes it was, which was a bit out of my comfort zone when writing.

There's at least one scene it that I'm still thinking about. Poor Dinky.

--arcum42

I can't recall folk music and folk tales being used too often on this site. (I'm not knocking anyone. I'm just saying.) This gets an upvote and a watch from me.

Congratulations! This story has officially been deemed a Ruby by The Gem Hunters!

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Thanks! I appreciate that.

--arcum42

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Thanks! And for what it's worth, I happened to look at the profile of JumpingShinyFrogs, who commented right below you, and I saw a story that's a collection of Irish folktales on their profile. Haven't read it, though...

I don't think I should read this but I will....
After: at least it wasn't what I expected.. But I shouldn't of read it still I kinda expected slender

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Nope, going for older sources of horror than that. This is more inspired by stories like "Mr. Fox" (which I linked to in the author's note), or the older, unsanitized versions of Little Red Riding Hood. (which this story has a bit in common with, actually)

3735335 still, slender seemed appropriate until I was done. Watch the movie on YouTube

>story name is Dark and Deep
>no comedy tag
>no romance tag
>no sex tag

Bro, you're wasting an incredible story name telling an actually good story. Why can't you just make it a bunch of sex puns like the rest of us? :trixieshiftright:

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You're quite right. I should have left it with my original work-in-progress name, "Autumn Hunting", which I turned into a subtitle because I still like the obscure reference, and written a sex comedy. Or possibly turned it into a rape/foalcon/vore thing. :applecry:

I might have gotten featured that way, even...

Oh, and thanks, I think.

--arcum42

*shudder*

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That pretty much was the reaction I was aiming for. I honestly think if I'd spelled out what happened at the end, it'd be a much poorer story, too. As it stands, I left enough things around to let your mind fill in things far better then I could have...

--arcum42

Is it bad if I laughed at this in my head and smiled?

Reminds me of my copy of the Brothers Grim complete edition, which was for the most part even darker before the brothers grimmified it.

Old fairy tales were always deliciously macabre.

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That's pretty much exactly the feel I was going for. I'd been listening to songs like "Reynardine", "Mr. Foxes Garden", and "Little Sir Hugh", the type of thing that's pretty much old fairy tales in song, and I wanted to try my hand at writing something similar.

There's at least one scene that was directly inspired by some of what happens in one version of Little Red Riding Hood, in fact. And I did mention the story of Mr. Fox, come to think of it.

Glad you liked it, in any case. I'm rather proud of it despite having less than 250 views...

--arcum42

Very scary. I liked the way you wrote the parts of the story leading up to the ending.

Dinky. :applecry:

I was thinking that he would rape her, at first, what with him nudging her flank with his head, sniffing under her tail and then watching her how she scrubs herself between the legs, but this fate isn't any better. :applecry:
And I knew the style reminded me on something while reading this fic, now I know what. You captured the fairytale spirit greatly; dark and creepy, yet with a very childish undertone in the writing. Faved.

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I was thinking that he would rape her, at first, what with him nudging her flank with his head, sniffing under her tail and then watching her how she scrubs herself between the legs, but this fate isn't any better. :applecry:

I could easily see that. I knew some of the signals he was sending could be interpreted as sexual, but they also worked pretty well for conveying what I was after. I was trying very much to make sure he was creepy, but I also wanted to make sure he seemed like a predator and not quite human... or pony, as it were. That's part of why we never get a full description or a name for him.

The sniff under the tail was something I could see from a dog... or wolf or fox.

And I knew the style reminded me on something while reading this fic, now I know what. You captured the fairytale spirit greatly; dark and creepy, yet with a very childish undertone in the writing. Faved.

Thanks. I was trying, I've always been interested in old fairy tales, and I know several influenced it. The ones I usually mention are "Mister Fox", "Mister Fox's Garden", and Red Riding Hood, though, actually, I wouldn't be surprised if Into the Woods "Hello Little Girl" was influencing it too. (It would have been the broadway version, though [Which was taped, and has been shown on pbs and netflix and such.]. The movie version wasn't out when I wrote this.)

The funny thing is I think this story is the closest that I've written to an on-screen death. (Though, again, the ending would have been weakened if I'd actually described what happened.) I like my characters! I like how this story turned out, though.

--arcum42

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I like my characters!

I know what you mean. Sometimes, we write things we don't understand. I don't know how common that is, but it definitely happens.
I wrote a fic where Scootaloo dies at the end last year and I'm still beating myself up for it, because I love her the most. It even got two readings recently, the first readings I have ever gotten for my fics.....
And even though I was proud and happy about this, I still was thinking "Why this fic?", so I know exactly what you meant when you said "Sometimes you do bad things to characters you like...".
At least for my fic I can find sollace in that I always sort of imagined it as just a dark dream by Scoots..... It still hurts to think of that fic, though, because when I was writing it, I considered it as real.

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I know what you mean. Sometimes, we write things we don't understand. I don't know how common that is, but it definitely happens.

I wrote a fic where Scootaloo dies at the end last year and I'm still beating myself up for it, because I love her the most. It even got two readings recently, the first readings I have ever gotten for my fics.....

And even though I was proud and happy about this, I still was thinking "Why this fic?", so I know exactly what you meant when you said "Sometimes you do bad things to characters you like...".

With this one, I think it helped that I started out planning that it'd be a fairy tale with a bad end, so I ultimately had the end in mind before I started. I even knew when he locked the door that that was it.

Still, I'm not sure I could have done it to one of the crusaders. Dinky, at least, isn't very well defined in canon.

I do end up doing bad things to my characters, though. In Cubic Zirconia, I should feel bad about what a bad time I've given Diamond Tiara, and there are sections I can't really read again without it getting to me. But I know that ultimately she is growing, and becoming better, at least.

The majority of dead characters I write about were already dead, though. Scootaloo's parents, in Just Winging It, for example. Oddest thing there, really, was that I had Scootaloo's parents as dead and her living with her aunt (Vinyl) before the story started...

At least for my fic I can find sollace in that I always sort of imagined it as just a dark dream by Scoots..... It still hurts to think of that fic, though, because when I was writing it, I considered it as real.

I do know how you feel. This one, I do tend to feel is separate from any of my other universes, and I tend to think of more as a pony fairy tale, as it were. I'd have a lot of trouble trying to expand this universe out as a real mlp one...

--arcum42

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Still, I'm not sure I could have done it to one of the crusaders.

Rubbing it in here. :applecry:
I would have never though I could do that as well. The only explanation I have for it is, that my mind sort of interpreted it as compliment to Scoots to give her that important role in the fic due to my love for her, because she was the first one who jumped into my mind when typing it down, yet at the same time, it was contradicting my love for her to do that. That's what I feel guilty for.
But after that second reading I got for it yesterday, I have also decided to add another chapter to that fic (it was supposed to be a one-shot originally) that puts things into a different perspective, because with those two readings, the guilt has grown too big to bear it.
I can hopefully write it soon.

What's the pic at the start supposed to be? It seems to have been deleted.

Is he a pedophile , a cannibal , or both, and he gets his rocks off by eating children instead of raeping them ?

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Extremely creepy!

Great work with the atmosphere.

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