Ditzy walks into "Ye Olde Muffen Shoppe" desiring a bit of lunch, she finds a bit more.
[Revisions pending. Could be a while, though.]
Chapters (4)
- Member Since 10th Jun, 2013
- offline last seen Aug 3rd, 2018
DismantledAccount
I am running from something I'm becoming, but becoming one means I'm running from all I am.
DismantledAccount
Joined 10th Jun, 2013 ·
Offline
Also LikedSimilarAuthor
- Blueninetails · 4.3k words · 62 4 · 2.2k views
- Butterscotch Cream · 9.4k words · 80 2 · 1.8k views
Featured In18
Shipping 💖11,660 stories ·9,733 members
- Dare to Derp!414 stories ·535 members
Derpy tales743 stories ·1,207 members
- Author Support4,365 stories ·2,069 members
- Project Derpy Hooves214 stories ·354 members
- Rookies on the Rise2,987 stories ·1,133 members
School for New Writers9,608 stories ·5,007 members
I Just Want a Comment15,686 stories ·3,667 members
Join our SubscribeStar to remove these adverts!
Join our SubscribeStar to remove these adverts!
Stats
Page generated in 0.173 seconds
Total duration
1,125 users online
2,131,472 hits today, 2,814,898 yesterday
FIMFiction
My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic Fanfiction
Designed and coded by knighty & Xaquseg - © 2011-2024
Follow & Support Us
Support us
SubStar
Chat!
Discord
Follow us
Twitter
MLP: Friendship is Magic® - © 2024 Hasbro Inc.®
Fimfiction is in no way affiliated with or endorsed by Hasbro Inc.®
I liked it just like this. I really enjoyed how you described the muffin, like a marvelous explosion of everything at once. I love muffins...
Aww, I really want to see more of this. It's so cute
.
I have something in common with derpy. My favorite sugary foods are muffins
great, now i want a muffin. thanks dude. THANKS! thankfully, i have some on hand, so you are good.
YAY!
I LOVE DERPY-SHIP!
I couldnt follow on the smmelling bit....cant smell
I like this story
MOAR
3619815
Thanks. I too love muffins.
3619967
perryviking.files.wordpress.com/2012/08/for-no-reason-share-this-picture-of-derpy.jpg
3619968
As you can see, I haven't yet decided, but thanks for your opinion.
3620060
Same! I love muffins.
3620192
My work here is done.
3620217
So do I, so do I...
3620531
That must suck, but at least you enjoyed the story.
A-A-Are you god of the cute stories!
3621260
I just can't help myself!
How can so much adorable be contained in so few words???? ARE YOU A WIZARD?!
3621484
You think that was adorable?
By chance, have you read one of my other stories?
And yes. I'm a wizard.
3622167
I don't want a Hnng-attack. I have to work tonight!
3622215
If you really want something adorable, you should read it.
You won't have a hnnng attack.
I promise.
3622270
YOU LIED! I HAD A HNNG-ATTACK! SEVERAL TIMES!!!
OMYGOSH OMYGOSH OHMYGOSH!!!!!
this was awesome!
3622278
I'm sorry...
3623497
Thank you.
3624261
It's ok. They were good Hnng attacks.
I'd really like to see this continued! Even if the second half of their argument seemed a little forced (I mean, Ditzy didn't even wait before jumping down his throat for staring a bit), I still enjoyed the premise. I wonder what his dad will say about giving away such an expensive treat for free!
Have a great day!
Continue this masterpiece now, good sir.
3624729
Oh, that's good. At least you died happy.
3624768
I tried to make it seem like he was just the final straw in a long line of insulters (or so she thought at first).
Sorry if it felt rushed.
But thanks for the input, and you too have a good day.
3625567
Masterpiece?
Why thank you.
Continue
3625667
I think I just might.
dawwwww
. this is so cute i just...mate..{/bleaggggh/}. yep there goes may dinner.
Yes yes yes yes yes!!!!!!So beautiful and well written and AWESOME! I don't honestly care if it goes in circles, or turns into a slice of life thing but MAN, your writing could make ANY plot sound awesome.
more please!
You get five kissy RDs
Can't wait to see more of my favorite muffin-loving mare~
Keep up the good work
this, right here, is my favorite part of this chapter. other than that, it's great to see that you decided to continue it, even if it might just last a total of 5 chapters. nothing wrong with that dude.
3648636
...Oh dear...
3649089
Thank you so much!
3650281
3651470
Thanks.
3655023
That paragraph...
Well, the random tag is on for a reason.
I think my heart just melted. God, I'm such a sucker for these.
Waking up to this really helps my hangover. Thank you for some (unofficial) hangover medicine.
3715356
You want a towel or something to help you clean that up?
Also: dat profile pic.
3715369
Yay helping!
This is cute!!!
dang, was really hoping that they would kiss by accident after that crash of theirs. oh well. mild headache and ditzy trotting away in a panic is good as well.
3715989
Thanks.
3725003
and 
Well, the final chapter should be welcomed because of
But don't tell anyone because of spoilers, okay?
oh God
"The hard wood" part completely thru me off. But its still cute 
Wait... next chapter is the last
3728365
It was supposed to ruin the scene. It ruined it for them too.
And yes, next chapter is last. I hope to post it soon.
.....oh me gosh....that was so fricking adorable
…over already?
Ok. I guess I can see that.
Hehe, I had a feeling that his father would have been okay with him giving away the muffin in the name of love. Making him a powerhouse just to emphasize the "appearance isn't everything" idea was a nice touch!
A sweet ending to this tale. I'm glad I stuck around for the ending, and maybe I'll hope to see more of Ditzy and Baked Bread in the future.
Have a great day!
Knead more Ditzy Bread! Bake more Ditzy Bread!!!!
3729905
Thanks.
3729910
I hope you still enjoyed it though.
3730077
Thank you! And a wonderful day to you as well, good sir.
3730558
...I found that funnier than I should have.
Yees, I Like
3733209
Thank you.
Baked´s dad is really cool. If that was my dad, he would flip he's shit. heck if my little brother took stuff/money from me, to impress a girl I would be... unpleasant
all that a side, I
LOVE 
this story
3730558
100% agree more Ditzy Bread
This is quite the read, ill need dome time to organize myself.
this chapter was really too adorable of a read-yes, somehow it was able to do that-and it's kind of a shame that the story is finished, but it was a story worth finding. all i can say is: HELL YEAH, THEY FINALLY FREAKING KISSED!....ahem, sorry about that. can't wait to see what you do in the future with these two characters. you might have gotten yourself a follow good sir.
Okay, Ive read the first 2 chapters, and this is what I have to say.
This is like the blind leading the deaf and confused, because I never read or seriously write romance... so yeah!
grammatically, its fine. I never had any real errors that stuck out for me, but Im a pretty chill guy when it comes to that stuff.
Pacing wise, I feel that some areas could be slowed down. it moved really fast at times, like in ch2 when the guy was waiting for derpy to show up. I understood that he was waiting for her, but if you took some time and really drew it out, it may convey how much he waited for her.
Other things were like the kiss in the first chapter, I suppose it was supposed to be fast, but if you wanted it to have more of an impact, you could have slowed everything down.
Other than that, the idea is somewhat original. Ive never seen anything like this before, and I like it that you aren't just writing a simple "Derr! Im Retarded and adorable!"
reply if you want me to read the rest for you.
3734313
Oh wow. "Love" in enlarged font and surrounded by hearts?
Something subtle is telling me you enjoyed this...
3736498
I might do something with them later. I do love a good Ditzy ship.
But they are so hard to find...
Also: their kiss
And: Yay! Possible follow!
3736502
It's all right if you don't know anything about writing romance; you are merely writing your thoughts about it.
Like for instance, I never suspected that the waiting scene in chapter two could be considered rushed. It doesn't seem rushed to me, but I'm not you.
Though, the kiss scene in chapter one isn't rushed. I designed it to be that way. I described it as "Light as a feather on the cheek". It's kind of hard to draw that out more than I did.
And yes, I would appreciate it if you read the entire story.
The last 2 were better than the first.
The dad was a good change of pace.
The spelling and grammar was good for me.
And thats really all I have to say. Sorry I couldn't add anything else.