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I am running from something I'm becoming, but becoming one means I'm running from all I am.


Ditzy walks into "Ye Olde Muffen Shoppe" desiring a bit of lunch, she finds a bit more.

[Revisions pending. Could be a while, though.]

Chapters (4)
Comments ( 100 )

I liked it just like this. I really enjoyed how you described the muffin, like a marvelous explosion of everything at once. I love muffins...

Aww, I really want to see more of this. It's so cute:rainbowkiss:.

I have something in common with derpy. My favorite sugary foods are muffins

great, now i want a muffin. thanks dude. THANKS! thankfully, i have some on hand, so you are good.



I couldnt follow on the smmelling bit....cant smell:twilightoops:

I like this story


Thanks. I too love muffins.
As you can see, I haven't yet decided, but thanks for your opinion. :pinkiesmile:
Same! I love muffins.
My work here is done.
So do I, so do I...
That must suck, but at least you enjoyed the story. :pinkiesmile:

A-A-Are you god of the cute stories!:pinkiegasp:

How can so much adorable be contained in so few words???? ARE YOU A WIZARD?!

You think that was adorable?
By chance, have you read one of my other stories?
And yes. I'm a wizard.

I don't want a Hnng-attack. I have to work tonight!

If you really want something adorable, you should read it.
You won't have a hnnng attack.
I promise.



OMYGOSH OMYGOSH OHMYGOSH!!!!!:rainbowkiss: this was awesome!

It's ok. They were good Hnng attacks.

I'd really like to see this continued! Even if the second half of their argument seemed a little forced (I mean, Ditzy didn't even wait before jumping down his throat for staring a bit), I still enjoyed the premise. I wonder what his dad will say about giving away such an expensive treat for free!

Have a great day! :twilightsmile:

Continue this masterpiece now, good sir.

Oh, that's good. At least you died happy.
I tried to make it seem like he was just the final straw in a long line of insulters (or so she thought at first).
Sorry if it felt rushed.:ajsleepy:
But thanks for the input, and you too have a good day.
Why thank you. :moustache:

dawwwww:heart:. this is so cute i just...mate..{/bleaggggh/}. yep there goes may dinner.

Yes yes yes yes yes!!!!!!So beautiful and well written and AWESOME! I don't honestly care if it goes in circles, or turns into a slice of life thing but MAN, your writing could make ANY plot sound awesome.:pinkiehappy:more please!


You get five kissy RDs

Can't wait to see more of my favorite muffin-loving mare~
Keep up the good work

A thousand lesser beings made of muffin flesh from an alternate dimension cried out in agony as their god among gods was slowly wounded, bleeding crumbs and a holy smell that could promote peace across the land as the evil knife tore a chunk out of The Muffin’s very being.

this, right here, is my favorite part of this chapter. other than that, it's great to see that you decided to continue it, even if it might just last a total of 5 chapters. nothing wrong with that dude.

...Oh dear...
Thank you so much! :pinkiehappy:
That paragraph... :twilightblush:
Well, the random tag is on for a reason. :rainbowwild:

I think my heart just melted. God, I'm such a sucker for these.:pinkiecrazy::twilightblush:

Waking up to this really helps my hangover. Thank you for some (unofficial) hangover medicine.

You want a towel or something to help you clean that up?
Also: dat profile pic. :rainbowlaugh:

Yay helping!

dang, was really hoping that they would kiss by accident after that crash of theirs. oh well. mild headache and ditzy trotting away in a panic is good as well.


Well, the final chapter should be welcomed because of :trollestia::trollestia::trollestia::trollestia::trollestia: and :trollestia::trollestia::trollestia::trollestia:
But don't tell anyone because of spoilers, okay?

oh God :rainbowlaugh: "The hard wood" part completely thru me off. But its still cute :heart:

Wait... next chapter is the last :fluttercry:

It was supposed to ruin the scene. It ruined it for them too.
And yes, next chapter is last. I hope to post it soon.

.....oh me gosh....that was so fricking adorable:rainbowkiss:

…over already?
Ok. I guess I can see that.

Hehe, I had a feeling that his father would have been okay with him giving away the muffin in the name of love. Making him a powerhouse just to emphasize the "appearance isn't everything" idea was a nice touch! :ajsmug:

A sweet ending to this tale. I'm glad I stuck around for the ending, and maybe I'll hope to see more of Ditzy and Baked Bread in the future.

Have a great day! :twilightsmile:

Knead more Ditzy Bread! Bake more Ditzy Bread!!!!

Thanks. :twilightsmile:

I hope you still enjoyed it though.

Thank you! And a wonderful day to you as well, good sir.:moustache:


...I found that funnier than I should have.

Baked´s dad is really cool. If that was my dad, he would flip he's shit. heck if my little brother took stuff/money from me, to impress a girl I would be... unpleasant :twilightangry2:

all that a side, I :heart: LOVE :heart: this story

100% agree more Ditzy Bread :derpytongue2:

This is quite the read, ill need dome time to organize myself.

this chapter was really too adorable of a read-yes, somehow it was able to do that-and it's kind of a shame that the story is finished, but it was a story worth finding. all i can say is: HELL YEAH, THEY FINALLY FREAKING KISSED!....ahem, sorry about that. can't wait to see what you do in the future with these two characters. you might have gotten yourself a follow good sir.

Okay, Ive read the first 2 chapters, and this is what I have to say.

This is like the blind leading the deaf and confused, because I never read or seriously write romance... so yeah!

grammatically, its fine. I never had any real errors that stuck out for me, but Im a pretty chill guy when it comes to that stuff.

Pacing wise, I feel that some areas could be slowed down. it moved really fast at times, like in ch2 when the guy was waiting for derpy to show up. I understood that he was waiting for her, but if you took some time and really drew it out, it may convey how much he waited for her.
Other things were like the kiss in the first chapter, I suppose it was supposed to be fast, but if you wanted it to have more of an impact, you could have slowed everything down.

Other than that, the idea is somewhat original. Ive never seen anything like this before, and I like it that you aren't just writing a simple "Derr! Im Retarded and adorable!"

reply if you want me to read the rest for you.

Oh wow. "Love" in enlarged font and surrounded by hearts?
Something subtle is telling me you enjoyed this...

I might do something with them later. I do love a good Ditzy ship.:derpytongue2::heart:
But they are so hard to find...:ajsleepy:
Also: their kiss :rainbowkiss:
And: Yay! Possible follow!

It's all right if you don't know anything about writing romance; you are merely writing your thoughts about it.

Like for instance, I never suspected that the waiting scene in chapter two could be considered rushed. It doesn't seem rushed to me, but I'm not you.

Though, the kiss scene in chapter one isn't rushed. I designed it to be that way. I described it as "Light as a feather on the cheek". It's kind of hard to draw that out more than I did.

And yes, I would appreciate it if you read the entire story.

The last 2 were better than the first.

The dad was a good change of pace.

The spelling and grammar was good for me.

And thats really all I have to say. Sorry I couldn't add anything else.

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