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redspark


24 year old Mexican music composer. Writes fanfics on the side. On hiatus.

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(THIS STORY IS UNDER RE-WRITING PROCESS. HIATUS IS ONLY BECAUSE ITS MOT BEING UPDATED)

Nimble Hoof, a journalist for the newspaper called "The Daily Hoof", is in problems. Her stories are not what her editor wants. He feels they are too slow and unnecessary. She seeks a way to make her stories better and don´t lose his job. When a friend of her mentions the low streets of Canterlot, a dangerous place full of thieves and outlaws, she has an idea. If she can have stories from those places, will she keep her job?

What she doesn´t know is that entering those places is a dead end with no return. When someone gets involved into the low society of Canterlot, there is no escape. Will her plan be as bright as she imagined it to be, or will she end up lost into a world she has never known of?

(ALL CHAPTERS WILL UNDERGO MAJOR CHANGES)

-hey! I'm searching for an editor. If anyone is interested please let me know.-

Chapters (31)
Comments ( 42 )

More please. That's all I have to say.:twilightblush:

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I´ll try to write the next chapters at a faster pace then :pinkiehappy:

Awesome story! Is interesting how do you described how does Canterlot works. Where did you got the idea?
I see there are plenty chapters... better keep reading, so far, so good.

4102023 Thanks! :pinkiehappy: I am really happy you liked it :raritystarry: I don´t know how I got it... Maybe it was unintentionally inspired in Assasin´s Creed? Not sure, but I got it. Jajaja, yeah... I´ve been writing it for quite a while now :twilightblush:

Yeah... I now see where you got this. Not bad.... good game, good story.
But parkour... interesting.
The images there kind of make the story more interesting and worthy to read, good job.

Wow... That was unexpected. The meant to kill... It gives the story a new...
Peculiar essence.
I mean, in "Fallout: Equestria" it is normal, but here... (in the "normal" world) ...Interesting.
:duck:

4121169 Yeah. One of the main purposes of this chapter was to show that Lower Canterlot is... Well, you know what I mean. :derpyderp1:

Kind of... sad. :fluttercry:
Who would expect the very first car accident in the story of the world?

Great! This is kind-of what I was looking for: The Pony Society!
Maybe everyone has their own way to describe it, but I liked yours. :twilightsmile:

(Astonishing Expression)

:pinkiegasp:

:derpyderp2:

To much things to process...

...Well...

First: Plot twist. :derpyderp1: Now everything gets coplicated, huh? :trixieshiftleft:

Second: I see what you did there with the boss and Serena... :duck: very suspecious. :trixieshiftright:

Third: Why do you hate Sun Seeker? What does she did!? :fluttercry:
(This comment is a joke)

So far... still so good.

4179597 jajaja, well, I'm glad its good till now. I hope you like how the story goes on.

God, I try to don´t comment a lot but... you just make it inevitable for me.

I don´t know why... or how, but I catch more feeling specificly in this story even after all your gramar, ortography and consisency mistakes. :duck:

:raritycry: You just play with my mental order and stability everytime someone tries to kill someone or everytime time something bad happens.

Example: This Chapter.

(Also, Plot Twist... (again???) new haracter and new place, I like that... changing everything from how it started)

4192188 jajaja, yeah, I'm pretty bad with checking my own work for those things. I'm searching for an editor to help me with those at the moment, if not, when the story's done, I'll check them myself.

eeyep, I just keep getting ideas as I write on the story, even if I already have the main plot decided. Hope your liking how it's turning.

4192194 Yes, though I still don't get to the part where it fits into the main plot. I did it in order to understand Nimble's past, also her feelings a little better. Some of the information on this chapter will play for minor or major parts in the story, only not just yet.

I knew there was something wrong with that mare!
And what happened there? A new antagonist? Does that mean that they did defeated the other one?
(Please, stop doing so many turns! I can't resist to comment :raritycry:)
(Just Kidding, PLEASE don't stop)

:rainbowderp::derpyderp2::derpyderp1:

Completely my favorite. Until this point of the story, this is the best that you have written.
You are good describing feelings and stuff.

I'm think YOU have won me to follow you...
...you are the first. (Probably because you are the only active writter who still writes the stories I like)
Congrats, Keep it up!

4199663 Jajaja, well... You'll see in later chapters (I'd normally use a face buuut on my phone I can't use those) =P

4199688 thanks!!! I'm honored for that XD

Wow, wow, wow...

Was that what I think it is?
A real... powder gun?
(Sorry for the spoilers... To whoever reads this comment before the chapter)
Man, you are completely changing the pony world... but that's ok, you are not the first, actually. (In the stories)

And... WHAT HAPPENED AT THE END??? (I will probably get it in a few minutes, but... BLARGH! To much things to process... D:)

Ok... Now I get it. (I was right)

4210654 jejeje (*evil grin*)

Hmm. . . The general idea was interesting although you really do need an editor. . . Unless Nimble is gender fluid, in that case rock on.

Silent Mane seems to talk too formally for a colt in the Lower Canterlot district. . . Adding some slang and more 'relaxed' language would fix that.

Otherwise, I have no more bones to pick with this story, but I probably won't continue reading it just because I have little interest in it if it's going to continue to have grammar problems and the sort from here on out.

Great! Another clue of the pony-society!
Also, I'm surprised you included someone from the real "canon", however, it was good.

I have seen your images... Truly, this is one my favorite, so... complex. How do you make them? You use the Pony creator, obviously. But how do you do the rest?

WHAAAT???

You... actually killed them?
(I don't know what does that surprise me, I mean, I finished Fallout: Equestria... You know how many deaths does that mean?)
I really thought guns would not last... I think I'm not getting it right. However, you have a peculiar way to describe fights... (not bad... just peculiar)

Ha Ha! Reached you... Finally!
Hope you will continue!
Interesting episode... Liked it!

Ha Ha! Reached you... Finally!
Hope you will continue!
Interesting episode... Liked it!

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4250006 glad you liked it!! I will take a little longer than I am used to in publishing nxt chapter because I am out of town for two weeks, but I'll try to get them done as soon as I can.

Awesome!!!

But kind off sad that this is the end... :applecry:

4463231 thanks! Yeah... It's sad... But it's not over yet XD

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So... When the next one?

Sorry for asking, it's just that I'll be out for some months and I want to see what it's going to happen before I leave, he he.

I strongly think to start reading the other story you wrote, the one about the German and the American in Equestria.

4524018 I'll try hard to get the story done for this week right before I begin exams, but I have a little problem when I sit down and write it. It's taking a little longer than normal... I'll try to have at least three chapters done by the end of Sunday.

If you want check out he story, I think it's going pretty well so far =D though it's different from the journalist.

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Even though that will be awesome, I personally think that forcing too much the ideas will only cause you to repent anything you write in a few days.

Keep it cool, you don't have to finish it before exams, do you? I mean, it's not like write its an obligation.

4524278 nah, writing it's a pleasure to me, but my mother is... *sigh* ... She is a pain about me doing anything that's not school-related, so I better do something while she's not here (she's on a trip) and also I like to write much, though I need the time.

4524278 Chapter 30 is finally out, if you want to check it. Sorry for the delay...

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Why are you apologizing?
However, its great to read something more of this one before I leave to a "little" trip that will take me a "few" one and a half months without any kind of internet conection. :pinkiesad2:.
By the way, awesome this chapter. But, seriously, you could do it better if you take some time to fix all your grammar mistakes, or well to find an editor to check them.
I could offer myself to do it, but I am normally to busy to edit stories. But, if you want, I know someone who can help you.

4619689 you know someone that can edit??

Good luck in your trip! I myself am going and win the able to connect for a month.

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Yes, plenty of people... but I am thinking of someone in special, Do you want me to see if he can help you?

And yeah, I saw what you posted, Good luck on your trip too.

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Thank you very much for the offer, but by now, I (SSworks) will take care of it. But maybe He (RedSpark) will need help after he returns in August.
Thank you very much again, have a happy summer.

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Oh, Ok, Fine.
Whenever you need help.
Happy Summer to you too.

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