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General Spritz #1 · Feb 28th, 2015 · · ·

You got most. You repeated "sensations."

Sipioc

Sipioc #2 · Jan 2nd, 2016 · · ·

You don't often see a Bon Bon fic with a stallion, I like it. Well done!

Mr Tech

Mr Tech #3 · May 20th, 2016 · · ·

It's nice, hope you will make a sequel tho...

Texus

Texus #4 · Sep 26th, 2016 · · ·

“I-I’m sorry. I just…I don’t know.” She looked away with a saddened expression thinking she had done something wrong. “I’m more in control then this but I…”

Not sure what she means right there.

This was quite nice, I liked his personality and well what happened was really good, or more how it happened.

As usually I would like to see more.

McBehrer

McBehrer #5 · Jun 4th, 2017 · · ·

"She giggled in his mouth, knowing all to where what said object was."
into* his mouth

Also, I think you mean "all too well?" "All to where" is complete gibberish.

featherduster #6 · Jun 5th, 2017 · · ·

Aside from a slew of grammatical errors and frequently switching between 1st,2nd, and 3rd person, it was rather nice.

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