A writer. I try to write at least... Video games are REALLY distracting though...and work...and life...Eh. Well if you have time go ahead and give my stuff a chance ^~^ I'm a pretty nice person
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Feelings tend to grow when you spend time together.
But sometimes you feel like those feelings are nothing but a kind of burden.
But sometimes fate doesn't care about what you think and does what it wants anyway. Even if it does have help.
EQ G Universe.
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This is an interesting fic but I found it really hard to get into. I found it confusing as to the ages and relationships of the characters. If Cheerilee was a teacher or a volunteer, how old Trixie actually was. As well as the idea of a student and teacher romantic relationship. It's just a dynamic that makes me really uncomfortable.
As well as typos (callises should be calluses) I just couldn't finish this. Sorry but thumbs down.
Nice.
4198073 What? Cheerilee was a Librarian. Trixie was a junior in the school. I don't understand what was hard to follow about that.
Also the typos aren't fully on me. That was my spell checkers fucking up over and over again. They are buggy as hell for me. I did fix the ones I could find though
Thanks for telling me why though.
It wasn't bad, but Cheerilee's general clueless-ness made it hard to really get into the story.
4198083 i like this story, great job (oh and i think matching is suppose to be marching)
This was a cute story. The part with Octavia entering was a bit sudden, but it was good!
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Yeah. I tried to play that she was more so far into denile that she just wouldn't let herself believe it.
This story was sitting on my desktop for like six months so I'm surprised it's even doing as well as it is for being half written before and half recently.
The story was cute.
The notion that everyone (especially the principal) is just "yeah, whatevs" about teacher-student relations was a bit of a stretch IMHO (and working that whole "forbidden love" angle could have been interesting), and Cheerilee had a mild case of idiot ball towards the end, but overall it was cute enough.
Most of all, do the story a favor and get an editor. Your tenses are all over the place, some paragraphs are virtually unintelligible due to missing punctuation and stuff, and it's generally quite messy.
4201618
Ouch. not too ouch but yeah. I know.
But I can never seem to get one.
Reasons that my grammer and such is crap.
My english teacher literally didn't teach us ANY of it. And now I just can't retain how most punctuation works. I have no clue why and it bugs the hell outta me.
My tenses are messed up because the story is wrote in a six month strech. I wrote half then and half recently. and I didn't go over it too hard before putting it out. I was too excited to get it off my desktop after so long.
I wrote the second half on my phone. No spell check on that.
My word has a broken spell check and none of my browsers seem to like to check it right away.
None of those are any good at catching grammar issues.
Anyway. Thanks I guess. It just came of a tiny bit harsh to me for some reason. Maybe because I actually enjoyed writing it and now it's getting hit harder than most of the stories that I had written before.
Huh. It seems like the stories I actually really enjoy writing always seem to get disliked the most. Weird.
Anyway. Don't take this wrong. I am glad you enjoyed it and I thank you for your comment. I suppose I'm just cranky and tired. I'll look into getting an editor right away. Though seeing all the spots I fucked up won't be very fun I'd rather have you guys have a good story to read than save myself some time.
4201746
Well played.
4201746
Sorry for coming across harsh, I guess I derped my wording. I didn't mean to go all tearing into you - after all, I did enjoy the story despite my nagging.
So, um. Have a Rainbow Dash for more stories
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Oh, lemme be. I haven't slept for two days.
4202837 ...you should probably fix that.
edit: "That" being your lack of sleep.
4203642 I know...But it's my days off work. I usually work night so I miss when everyone is online and stores are actually open.
Vinyl...You should have gone with 'Tavi-Tabby', that would have been 20% sexier.
Anyways, good story. I've seemed to obtained a liking for 'TrixiLee'.
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^3^
Can we get a sequel taking place after the Friendship Games?
7360032 Doubtful. I haven't been writing much in a long time
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7647380 aw now that's just sad. I mean others that like this ship could
Write too. ;_; i dun want the ship to sink
7647405 There's only one remedy to save the
SS TrixLiee.
YOU MUST WRITE A ROMANCE FIC FOR THEM TO MEND TE RIFT AND STOP THE SHIP FROM SINKING!! 
I take it this was before the EqG tags came out?