Sunset Shimmer has lived the life of a normal teenage highschooler since the incedent with Twilight. She's spent life going to school and learning friendship from the human versions of Applejack, Pinkie Pie, Rarity, Fluttershy, and Rainbow Dash. However, that's all about to change when someone reveals the truth behind a lie that had fooled everypony.
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There seems to be more negative feed back than positive. It'd be great to get some constructive criticism if that's okay with every one.
Problems as of chapter 3:
- this story is dull, painfully so, with short chapters that nothing really happens in. It's like watching filler episodes in a show, sometimes you find a gem but most of the time you're shouting "GET ON WITH IT!" at the screen.
- your villain's true purpose was painfully obvious from the moment he said his name. Regicide? seriously? you may as well have called him "trick you into murdering Celestia man".
-the story at least up to this point, if it's going where I think it's going, only makes sense if 'tyrant' is the interpertation of choice for celestia's motivations. ...only, that's the least popular version of her. most people prefer to see her as either a troll or a pervert hiding behind a noble mask, a bit behind them is 'canon Celestia', then 'ancient sad Celestia', and dead last is 'tyrant celestia'.
hey friend
30 moons= 819 days because one moon = one new moon
Oh well. You win some, you lose some. If I decide to write another one I'll make sure to use you advice Sketch Scribbles. Thanks.
i liked it ,but it wasn't the best
i would like to see more elements to make me want to read more
Nice job so far, I love it all- this like was my favorite, however:
A big "Thank You" to all of the people who have read this! It means a lot to me, likes or dislikes.
Now that is a little harsh, yes, the packing isn't great, and maybe this revolution could been built better, but this story isn't hopeless. He just needs someone to co-write, and boom, instant hit
Yeah, is would like more story, more inner conflict with sunset to even consider likening but, fair try
cool
interesting. . .
LOVE IT!
Co-writing had been a thought for future stories. Thanks for all of the support everyone!
It must be hard to live hundreds of years with a name such as Regicide x).
That's why he goes by Reggie.
Ohh! That must have hurt
500 views?! Never in my life did I think that many people would looked at, let alone read, my work. Thanks to everyone who has read, supported, and given feed back. You guys and gals are the best! /)