Chapter 4
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The moon steadily moved behind Canterlot castle in a slow crawl. The many ponies of the city slept in their beds with no knowledge of the events happening around them. Princess Luna stood questioningly on the balcony of the castle, worriedly looking over her citizens. She sighed.
“There, there Princess Woona...” slithered a voice through the night. Luna flinched in reaction. “What could ever be the problem?”
Luna turned to face the source of the voice, Discord. “What are you doing awake at this time Discord?” she said. Discord laughed and stepped into the moonlight.
“Why, I’m just awake in my favorite time of day. Is that a crime?” he said with a smug grin. Luna sighed and turned her head towards the city below again.
“I feel a disturbance. Like old memories being pulled from under me.”
Discord raised an eyebrow before laughing, “A disturbance? You sound like a character from a book!” Discord slithered closer. Luna glared at him.
“Sheesh! Fine, I got it. Leave the wall alone!” Discord noticed the look of concern still on Luna’s face. “Ugh. Friendship! Curse it all!”
“Listen, Lulu. If this ‘disturbance’ is bothering you so much, why don’t you go check it out.”
Luna turned to Discord, her face just a few inches from his. She glared then pushed her face closer.
“There are times when even a god should not interfere.” Luna turned from the flabbergasted Discord and walked towards the door. “Good night Discord.”
Discord stood there for a few more seconds before grinning. “A very good night indeed.” He teleported off.
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Nyx’s eyes opened to darkness. Well, not complete darkness, more like mostly darkness with a little light blue puff in the bottom of her vision. When Nyx’s eyes focused she noticed the predicament she was in. Through the ‘night’ somehow Snowdrop had rolled over onto Nyx and into a… cuddling position. Nyx’s body heat rose exponentially.
“How did we get like this?” Nyx thought. She slowly tried escaping the grasp of Snowdrop without awakening her. Luckily for Nyx, Snowdrop was a heavy sleeper. After she had escaped the unholy cuddle of Snowdrop, Nyx pulled out a book from her saddle bag and set it by Snowdrop’s body, ‘Nyx of the Night’. “Sleep tight, Snowdrop” she said before heading in the direction of the portal.
“What is this? Why do I feel like I got Parasprites in my stomach?” Nyx thought. An image of Snowdrop’s petite form flashed through Nyx’s mind. “Every time I think of her! What’s going on with me?” Nyx stopped in front of the swirling portal and turned back glancing towards the sleeping form of Snowdrop floating in the distance. “Let’s just hope I can get back here soon.”
Nyx jumped into the large portal.
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The swirling vortex did not appear this time to Nyx. Instead a quick flash and hardwood floor greeted her sight. The library was dark and quiet and Nyx was half expecting her mom to yell at her again.
“Dinnnggg Donnngggg!” the clock struck 1 A.M from the room above. Nyx turned to see Twilight still asleep in bed.
“An hour? It’s only been an hour? But last time it was—“. Nyx’s pondering was cut short by some mumbling from Twilight. Nyx slowly walked up the steps and slid carefully under the cover of her mother’s bed. A few silent moments pass by.
“Bed doesn't feel as nice as zero gravity cuddle.”
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The sun steadily rose over the Ponyville library. It was a Saturday so the prospect of waking early wasn’t exactly appealing to most fillies; unfortunately, Nyx didn’t really have a choice. She stood near the table looking through an old book with a red cover and dusty title she couldn’t read due to it being faded away
“The Elysian fields is said to hold the souls of those who live their life with harmony and kindness. Only the dead may enter–“
“And only the immortal may leave” said a voice that surprised Nyx. She turned to see her mother looking at her with a concerned expression, “I’ve read that book four times, Nyx. And I don’t think you should just yet.” Twilight levitated the book away from Nyx’s hooves.
“But–but–but.”
“No buts, young lady.” Twilight replied, “There are things in this book I’d rather you not read at your age.” Twilight placed the book on the highest shelf while Nyx watched the book being taken from her reach. “Nyx I want you to tell me where you went two nights ago.”
Nyx’s eyes grew wide as she realized she hadn’t made up an excuse to tell to Twilight. “I, Uh… I-I-I was at Twist’s!”
Twilight glared suspiciously at Nyx. “Then why didn’t you go to school?”
Sweat beaded down Nyx face as she laugh falsely. “I uh… didn’t want to see Diamond Tiara today?”
Twilight stared at Nyx again for a few more seconds. Nyx began to wonder if she wouldn’t believe her.
“Alright then,” she said. Nyx breathed a sigh of relief, “You’re still grounded for sneaking out and skipping school though.”
Nyx really didn’t care. “I was going to spend all week in the library anyways. I’m more concerned with helping my… friend, than missing some crusading” she thought. She faked a whine of sadness and continued her research.
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Twilight stood at the turn of the cellar stairs watching Nyx carefully. “What is she up to?” she thought eyeing Nyx carefully. Nyx had several books surrounding her, most of which Twilight could name by the sight of it. “Legends of Faust, Origin of Tesertillio, Necrophilia and You! No, wait, she put that last book back. Tartarus Breaker, and… Tails of the Immortal? What is Nyx reading into?”
“It is said Faust created 5 worlds. The first world became static and fell apart with time. The second world became what is Equus today. Tartarus and the Elysian Fields for those who did wrong and right. And finally a limbo that she decided was cruel and then destroyed it.” Nyx said quietly from the other room.
Twilight listened carefully. “Origin of the Land?” she thought. “Why is she-”
"Hey, Twilight!” somepony yelled from behind. Twilight jumped in surprise and accidentally started tumbling down the stairs with her mystery assailant. Right before she lost sight of Nyx, Twilight saw her still reading her book, not noticing the noise. After she finished tumbling, Twilight stood up, groaning in pain. Twilight turned to see her mystery attacker.
“Pinkie Pie‽” Twilight exclaimed. Pinkie was bouncing hysterically.
“Hey, Twilight! So listen. I was at Sugarcube Corner making treats when all of a sudden I had a twitchy tail, A floppy ear, an itchy knee and a eye flutter! So I realized that something bad was going to happen if I didn’t stop some spying! So I raced all around town looking for someone who was spying! I went to Rarity’s and Applejack’s and then I thought Rainbow Dash was doing it! But then I remembered she was at Cloudsdale for the week. But then I remembered you lost Nyx the other night, So I rushed here and saw you spying on Nyx so I came and surprised you to try to get to to stop! Then we tumbled down the stairs and you said ‘Pinkie Pie‽’ and I started to explain everything that happened and then. And then. Oh then we’re here!” Pinkie droned on and on while Twilight tried the wrap her head around what she was saying.
“Pinkie Sense”, she thought in conclusion, “If something warrants Pinkie to leave her job to warn me about it, then is has to be important.” Twilight raised her head to thank Pinkie but she had vanished. “Pinkie?”
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“These books are getting annoying!”, Nyx thought to herself, closing another book about Faust. “Twelve books on Faust making that– that– Tesertillion place. And not one book on what it is!” Nyx groaned in frustration. She walked over to the shelf to put the book back. Right before she did, however, Nyx stopped and noticed something in the shelf. “What’s this?” Nyx proceeded to pull a thin book that was wedged into a slot in the wall.
The Gates to the Fields and All In Between
By: Dread Sombra
“Sombra? Like King Sombra? Why does Mom have a book by him?” Nyx thought. The book was about a centimeter thick with a black leather cover. The material made Nyx cringe. Leather had been illegal in Equestria for almost a thousand years. The leather was cracked and hard as if it was damaged by water and dried. “Yup, definitely King Sombra.” Nyx thought. A small note was scribbled in the front.
To those who find this book
Do not open it if you value
your sanity…
“What could he have written to have this much warning to stop ponies from reading it?” Nyx wondered. “ I really shouldn't read it.” Images of Snowdrop flashed through Nyx’s mind. Images of her crying and molting followed. Nyx’s resolve was reenergized. “For Snowdrop.” she whispered. Nyx opened the book to the first page.
Tartarus- synonymous to ‘Hell’ - A place of pure torment and endless fire that only the darkest souls are banished to. Few immortals have braved the trek in and returned alive; Most of which returned mad and lost of spirit. Faust is said to have created the prison to store only the worst beings of pure evil. Despite the need for it’s existence faust always viewed it’s existence as cruel, a necessary evil.
“One page‽ You write one page for an the entire place‽” exclaimed Nyx disappointed in Sombra’s writing skills. “Let’s see if he writes better in the next entry.” She flipped the page.
The Elysian Fields- synonymous to ‘Heaven’ - A land of peace and harmony where those who have lived lives of balance and kindness reside. Neither living nor Immortal may enter this plane. They may only watch from secluded positions of glass. Here resides the home of Faust where it is said the seed for the Tree of Harmony originated. Faust watches her many children from here.
“ This book is probably a hundred pages! With The Fields and Tartarus already gone what’s left?” Nyx skipped to the middle of the book. There she saw the horrors the note described. Horrors so… horrible that they could not be recollected in a piece of literature. “Sweet Celestia!” Nyx exclaimed, dropping the book in fright causing it to flip to the front page again. Nyx fell back on her haunches. “Who would ever put that in a book‽” Nyx called in disgust. After a moment of nausea, Nyx stood back up and continued on to the third page hoping not to see some of the horrible content from earlier. She was in luck, it was an entry.
Tesertillio- synonymous to ‘Purgatory’ or ‘Limbo’ - When Faust had created The Fields and Tartarus she had intended them to be within close proximity with each other. However she separated them with a void. This void was to be used as a place for those who had done no good nor wrong. However she cast it off as cruel and stopped its use for eternity. It is said, though, that Spirits may still get lost there on their way to The Fields.
Nyx stared at the creepy picture provided. It was a creature Nyx had never seen before. She cast aside her fears and continued on reading, glad that Sombra had written more this time.
The souls of Tesertillio have escaped on many occasions. While it is rare the spirits may be liberated by the combined work of an immortal and a Fruit of Harmony.
“A Fruit of Harmony?” Nyx thought.
There are those few spirits who choose to wander the mortal world as apparitions. But most of the time when they are released, they leave at once and then pass on to their place in the afterlife.
“Pass on…” Nyx thought worryingly, “So if I save Snowdrop she’ll— pass on.” Nyx’s mind was racing again. Her few memories of Snowdrop rotated in her mind. Her encounters and her feelings—
“No. No, I can’t let my emotions get in the way of helping Snowdrop. I promised I’d always protect ponies and that’s exactly what I’ll do.” Nyx shut the book and placed it back into the sliver in the wall. She levitated the other books back and let her mind wander.
“Nyx… I mean could you uh… stay for the night?”
The memory of Snowdrop reared its head again. A blush spread across Nyx’s face. “Why? Why do I keep feeling this way…”
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Is Snowdrop a filly or a colt?
3745201 A filly... haven't you watched Snowdrop
3745213 Better than Double Rainboom in my opinion.
Couldn't Nyx be an immortal AND a fruit of harmony? Of course in some circles, Twilight could be, too.
3745492
Just think about a tree and fruit. Just think about that
3745690 He's thinking about fruit as a result of effort.
such as "the fruits of your labor"
3745742
Yeah but i wanna keep everyone in the dark
3745690
Just being metaphorical. I just saw the S4 ep 1&2 last night for the first time. The tree didn't look very...fruity, though. Heh.
3745894 you're going to need a smaller font for that
3745964 ok im going to lay it out simple
Spoiler Alert
A tree makes fruit
You take Fruit
You use fruit
The Elements are the fruit
This may come off as Mean but please dont take it so
3745455 I agree. Though I find it sad that she had to be dead in the end.
3749145 Thanks for listing the mistakes! i beleive i fixed it. At the end of past sins NYx fought the Star beast Lupus it's like an ursa minor. i also wanted to say Applebloom's and Sweetie Belle's to imply that Scootaloo lived at the orphanage which dont allow ponies to sleep over
Sombra wrote the book on all Domains? Huh.
Ok I love how this fic is coming along and I can't wait to see more. Just one thing if Nyx left Snowdrop her book 'Nyx of the Night' how is that going to comfort her if she can't read it? Also I wonder what Luna and Discord are up to? Can't wait for the next chapter, good work my friend.
3753806 Its just the prospect of something from the outside world and something so close to someone snowdrop likes
(i say as i realize that Snowdrop cant read)
Twilight stood at the turn of the cellar stairs watching Nyx carefully. “What is she doing?” she thought eyeing Nyx carefully. Nyx had several books surrounding her, most of which Twilight could name by the sight of it. “Legends of Faust, Origin of Tesertillio, Necrophilia and You! No, wait she put that last one back. Tartarus Breaker, and… Tails of the Immortal? What is Nyx reading into?”
First, I think there should be a comma after wait. There is a pause inferred there. But that is just me.
Second, I think you mean Tales, not Tails.
“It is said Faust created 5 worlds. The first world which fell static and fell apart with time. The second world which became what is Equus today. Tartarus and the Elysian Fields for those who did wrong and right. And finally a limbo for which she decided was cruel and then destroyed it.” Nyx said quietly from the other room.
First, I think 'which fell' is wrong. I think 'was' would fit better.
Second. the 'which' in the second sentence is unnecessary.
Third, the last sentence is... It's got a bad flow, and seems a bit confusing on top of it. Is the intent to say that Faust destroyed Limbo?
The Gates to the Fields and all In Between
All should be capitalized.
“Sombra? Like King Sombra? Why does Mommy have a book by him?” Nyx thought. The book about a centimeter thick with a black leather cover. The material made Nyx cringe. Leather has been Illegal in Equestria for almost a thousand years. The leather was cracked and hard as if it was damaged by water and dried. “Yup, definitely King Sombra.” Nyx thought. A small note was scribbled in the front.
Illegal shouldn't be capitalized.
“What could have he have written to have this much to stop ponies from reading it?” Nyx wondered. “I don’t think I should read it.” Images of Snowdrop flashed through Nyx’s mind. Images of her crying and molting followed. Nyx’s resolve was reenergized. “For Snowdrop.” she whispered. Nyx opened the book to the first page.
This sentence is vexing. What could have he have written to have this much to stop ponies from reading it?
I think if you dropped the 'have' between could and he, that would be a good start.
This much 'what'? This much work? This much magic? The sentence stops like a rock dropped in soft sand.
“One Page‽ You write one page for an the entire place‽” exclaimed Nyx disappointed in Sombra’s writing skills. “Let’s see if he writes better in the next entry.” She flipped the page.
No need to capitalize page.
Tesertillio- synonymous to ‘Purgatory’ or ‘Limbo’ - When Faust had created The Fields and Tartarus she had intended them to be within close proximity with each other. However she separated them with a void. This void was to be used as a place for those who had done no good nor wrong. However she cast it off as cruel and stopped it’s use for eternity. It is said, though, that Spirits may get lost there on there way to The Fields.
Their, not there.
its not it's
Hey, Twilight!” somepony yelled from behind. Twilight jumped in surprise and accidently started tumbling down the stairs with her mystery assailant. Right before she lost sight of Nyx, Twilight saw her still reading her book, not noticing the noise. After she finished tumbling, Twilight stood up, groaning in pain. Twilight turned to see her mystery attacker.
You're missing punctuation in the highlighted part of the sentence. "
The Elysian Fields- synonymous to ‘Heaven’ - A land of peace and harmony where those who have lived lives of balance and kindness reside. Nor living nor Immortal may enter this plane. Only they may watch from secluded position of glass. Here resides the home of Faust where it is said the seed for the Tree of Harmony originated. Faust watches her many children from here.
I think 'no' works better than 'nor'. Not as confusing.
3756279 Thanks for the look over believed i have fixed everything you pointed out. tails is meant to be a pun thou
“It is said Faust created 5 worlds. The first world that became static and fell apart with time. The second world that became what is Equus today. Tartarus and the Elysian Fields for those who did wrong and right. And finally a limbo that she decided was cruel and then destroyed it.” Nyx said quietly from the other room.
First, why are you insisting on that particular sentence style? Was works very well, and indicates that the world in question is no more. The first world was static and fell apart with time.
Second, that 'that' is excessive and jumbles up the sentence. The second world became what is Equus today.
The Elysian Fields- synonymous to ‘Heaven’ - A land of peace and harmony where those who have lived lives of balance and kindness reside. Nor living nor Immortal may enter this plane. Only they may watch from secluded position of glass. Here resides the home of Faust where it is said the seed for the Tree of Harmony originated. Faust watches her many children from here.
Explain your reason for keeping this part intact.
You might expand a little on 'living'.
First option, No living being nor Immortal may enter this plane.
Another option. Neither living nor Immortal may enter this plane.
I think I like the second option.
And you missed the " at the beginning of :
Hey, Twilight!” somepony yelled from behind. Twilight jumped in surprise and accidently started tumbling down the stairs with her mystery assailant. Right before she lost sight of Nyx, Twilight saw her still reading her book, not noticing the noise. After she finished tumbling, Twilight stood up, groaning in pain. Twilight turned to see her mystery attacker.
You also misspelled accidentally.
As for what Nyx found in the middle...
Some stories about Generation 3/3.5 MLP
Something similar to H.P. Lovecraft's works?
Something combining H.P. Lovecraft and Generation 3/3.5 MLP... I shudder to even fathom what that might be like.
3757116 Thank you again for your skills of proof reading! i was trying to keep a archaic form of speech but you're right it does seems a bit... weird. You're very close on what was in the book. i may tell later on. Or maybe not
3754582 True, I figured you meant that just the fact that it is Nyx book, something that is actually tangible that she can hold onto in that empty void. Nice work btw.
3758835 thanks!
that book sounds like the MLP version of the nycronomicon a book of the most evil dark magic ever written.
I say that because that book was bound in leather made from human flesh,
and ink made from human blood
I agree with nyx why would twilight have a book like that?
good story though keep it up
Luna turned to voice, Discord. “What are you doing awake at this time, Discord?”
WOO HOO NO MASSIVE FEELS ATTACK
3760806 Maybe the book's guided to those who have need of it.
I think Snowdrop and Luna may have had a history... and Nyx inherited Luna's feelings.
Can someone please tell me what she saw in the book?
G3
5042037 In that case, I be scared.