Look twice before you walk, look once before you leap,
Be careful to whom you speak for lies can reveal
falsehoods as well as secrets attempted to keep.
~A Changeling Proverb
Ponyville is the last place that this Changeling expected to end up, but here she is. Double-Take lives a life under the guise of a pony named "Starlight Silver," a pony the she befriended years ago. It was Starlight who gave Double-Take a chance to hide as a normal pony and live a semi-normal life: an act of kindness that Double-Take cherishes every day that she wakes up to go to work.
But all things have an end, sooner or later. There is something looming on the horizon and it involves the Changelings... including the so-called "Abandoned" that have rejected Queen Chrysalis.
Can Double-Take overcome the challenges that lie ahead? Or will she be reveled to Equestria and be forced to flee from her past once again?
Edited by hunt3rdud396.
Hey everypony, this is my first MLP fan fiction. I want to thank everypony who's decided to read and I hope that you all keep following the story. A word of warning, though; updates will usually be slow-going. On another note, I accept and encourage constructive criticism and corrections about spelling, grammar, continuity (because I am flawed and I rewrite constantly) whenever they appear (so long as ponies are polite about it). Okay, I'll stop with the "pony" thing. No use in overusing it. Anyway, I hope you all enjoy it. Or hate it. Whatever you want, really. This is just for fun, anyway.
EDIT: I need a story artist for the cover.
I liked it you should make more and stuff.
I love this kind of story wen ponys have dark secrets that they have to keep especialy when they whant to share it but fear for the consequences
This is a good story and i cant wait to see more.
what about you Big McIntosh?
Eyuuup
Nick.........................................................................................................................................So.................................................................................................................................................amazing. I haven't even gotten passed the first couple of paragraphs, and I'm already grinning from ear to ear. You did a great job on describing the two ponies. there was a grammar mistake but it was pretty small. you wrote "have he'll" instead of "he'll have".
other than that, amazing work.
"Timber Wolf dancing on its hind legs and balancing a ball on its nose!” my question is: how did he manage to get a timber wolf to a) get in to his house, and b) not eat him alive?
Um nick? we go to the same school. I can easily be your editor, if not your spell-checker. Anyways, very good chapter and once again very good descriptions, especially those Sweetbark Delights (yum).
Anyways, stay pony my friend
Very good work, I like how you've added a depth to the Changelings beyond simply mindless slaves of Chrisalys as shown in the show. Well done, can't wait for the next installment. DFTBA
Once again, I am impressed. Don't sell yourself short about the fight scene though, it was a little one-sided in Double-Take's favor, but that was explained with her former rank and come on, the hero always has an advantage over henchmen, no matter what the situation. Seriously, the best example of this is Stormtroopers: Crappy armor, crappy shots. Good job, looking forward to the next chapter, DFTBA.
This chapter was a wall of exposition.
I liked it. And having something like this as the prologue is really a style choice, so it's really not a bad or good thing to have it here. Personally, I like having exposition later on in the story as part of a flashback or something because it gets readers hooked into the story and by the time you explain it, they're already invested. Good job as always, DFTBA.
I lack the words to say how incredibly good this was.
3695295 Hunter,
I know I've answered this I.R.L. already, but I have, as of today (months after telling you at school), decided that really should get into the habit of answering questions like these and interacting with my audience. So, to reiterate both for you and for the benefit of all those that may also be curious, it's more a noodle incident than anything. Silver Anvil is essentially a smith Braeburn/Pinkie hybrid, but in Canterlot.
So... yeah. I wanted to include him, but the story's taken a massive change in direction.