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LuminoZero


Someone once said I was passive aggressive. I disagree. I am far too impatient for that. I prefer just being normal aggressive. Don't worry about 'maybe' upsetting me, you will know.

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Twilight is growing older. Shining Armor is rising through the ranks of the guard. Their paths will soon diverge, but Shining Armor cannot bear the idea of her wandering off alone. Thankfully, he has someone just as reliable to take over his job.

Cover Art by the incredibly talented HorusLV

This is part of a friendly contest between myself and Draconian Soul. The challenge being to write a Spike/Shining Armor brofic. He also was a major editing force of nature on my story, and his help was very much appreciated.

His story was A Shining Pair.

Special Thanks: Pretty much the entire 'Twilight's Library' Skype Chat: Flint Sparks, cooopercrisp, Einhander, Figments, Frission, Mook Massacre, JustAnotherTimeLord, YipYapper and anyone else I may have forgotten!

This story has been 100% approved by Twilight's Library!

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Comments ( 81 )

doesn't having your editor as your enemy challenger sound a bit redundant?

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Enemy is kind of silly. We're friends, we just both had an idea for a story with this pairing (independently, oddly enough) and helped each other out. We just made a 'contest' out of it for fun.

-Lumino

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I know, I meant enemy in the contest...

It's about damn time we see a Shining/Spike bro fic. Good job, man.

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Ah, thanks for reminding me. I have a few topics I need to shamelessly self promote in!

AWAY!

-Lumino

PS: Glad you enjoyed it.

Special Thanks: Pretty much the entire 'Twilight's Library' Skype Chat: Flint Sparks, cooopercrisp, Einhander, Figments, Frission, Mook Massacre, JustAnotherTimeLord, YipYapper and anyone else I may have forgotten!

...You left out the bastard who RUNS the damn thing.
Edit: You people. I'm JOKING.

~Skeeter The Lurker

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As I said in the last story Skeeter, I'm not your friend. :rainbowlaugh:

Sorry man, I guess I slipped up. Consider yourself too important to be listed with the names of all those other peons.

-Lumino

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And here I am, following you.

Jerk, hehe.

All in all, though, nice little story man. I like it a lot.

~Skeeter The Lurker

Bros? Bros.

Not many fics delve into the relationship between Shining and Spike, you did good with this

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I'm glad you think so! I had a lot of fun writing this, and it is my first ever story to get featured. I'm quite proud of it.

-Lumino

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You should be, Spike needs family and Shining has already shown himself to be an excellent brother

I liked this a lot, Lumi! :twilightsmile: Very immersive, I think. I found myself about 4 pages in before I even realized it. You captured the characters really well! :raritystarry:

Have a moustache! :moustache:

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And here is one for you in return!

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Glad you enjoyed it! Being immersive is probably one of the best compliments I can get.

-Lumino

That was magnificently done!

My heart...my aching heart.

Well done. All I can say.

It is... it is...
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No, i'm serious. I love that fanfic with a lots of introspection, characters IC and relationship. The style is good, it was well written, not hard but not naive... seriously, I don't know how praise more this work.

Very nice. Captures the flavor of big brotherhood in a very touching way.

3593540 Always happy to murder more fans from heart failure :twilightblush:

3593650, 3593882 I'm glad it meets all of those landmarks. And oddly enough, I am the youngest in my family, and I was never that close with my brother. Curious that this came out so natural.

Thanks for the reviews;
-Lumino

More like Twilight is Shining's protector.

Well done my friend. It's a wonder why it's taken so long to see a Shining Armorr/Spike bro fic. :eeyup:

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Brave Sir Spike fainted dead away.:twilightblush:
Excellent story with believable interactions, but Spike has a long way to go before he's ready for that kind of responsibility.

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Heh heh! He's still a kid. He can try to be strong (See: Dog and Pony Show when he was fighting the Diamond Dogs, not the daydream). But I don't blame Spike for fainting in the presence of an creature thought to be myth and folklore. :twilightsheepish:

Thanks for the review;
-Lumino

This was awesome. This was beautiful. I love this. Ideas are already swimming for me right now but all this... this was good. Nice job. Definitely deserved the featured part on the website.

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Imagine a real life crusading knight coming face to face with Satan.

That is what meeting Nightmare Moon was like.

The 'knighting' ceremony made me cry, liquid pride!

As you bring up how poor a weapon a sword is for a pony to use... Why do they use them?

"I relieve you"

holy shit I fucking cried.
Amazing story man :moustache:

Very heartwarming, but if shining ever knew what spike is going to do to twilight (if that is what you are insinuating) he might not be too keen on letting him get so close to her.

I love the bond those two have made here, and I wish they would explore this more in the show. Maybe give shining more of a background other then just twilight's brother.
Also 'spike combat' needs to be a thing more often have the sword play come up, with a mix of using his claws, that he no longer flattens but sharpens to a fine point... yeah

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Very heartwarming, but if shining ever knew what spike is going to do to twilight (if that is what you are insinuating) he might not be too keen on letting him get so close to her.

I'm not sure what you are seeing here. There was nothing implied, and if you are seeing SpiLight then you need to loosen the straps on your Shipping Goggles.

Never the less, thank you very much for your review. I am glad you enjoyed.
-Lumino

3597102 yeah they might be on too tight, but I don't think spike would use the word 'love' lightly unless he already knew.

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Read definition one.

Twilight says in the ending of Canterlot Wedding 'Love you too, B.B.B.F.F'. By your logic is she confessing her romantic feelings to her brother? It would be kind of rude to accuse someone of incest if they told their sister/mother/father/brother that they loved them.

-Lumino

3597102 Who the F*CK disliked this?

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That is awesome to hear! I really love it when I can invoke emotion in my readers. What other goal is there for a writer? :twilightblush:

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I'm a bit... blunt? I speak my mind on many of the groups here, so it would not surprise me if I had a few haters. No matter to me, it is clear I did well with this story. :raritywink:

Thanks for the revies;
-Lumino

3597627 IMA come to you for editing a chapter in my story, I NEED THESE FEELS

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Oh thank :trollestia:, I wasn't the only one!

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You do know it's possible to love someone in a non-romantic way?
Like between siblings?
Right?

I'd have to say, of all the stories on here, this one is most worthy of "perfect."
I seriously doubt this could be any better.

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Wow! High praise indeed, but I hope you are wrong! After all, if this is perfect than my writing is all down hill from here. :twilightsheepish:

Glad you enjoyed the story, and thanks for the review;
-Lumino

This is a beautiful story. Love the almost montage effect of the sequence of snippets. Very well done.

"I relieve you."

The way Spike said it it was wonderful and touching. I love this story very much and I thank you for writing this. :pinkiesmile:

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Thanks very much! I'm really glad so many people enjoyed this, it means a lot. :twilightsheepish:

-Lumino

What a heartwarming and lovely read! I nearly let out a d'aww at the 'I relieve you' scene. But I saw a minor mistake, which could be very easily fixed.

"Brother?", they said simultaneously.

"Brother?" they said simultaneously.

I saw this in a couple of places throughout the stories. Where you added a comma after a question marks and exclamation points. That's the only flaw I saw though. The story had a very steady flow, and I enjoyed seeing Spike and Shining Armor interact with one another. Great job! Consider having a new follower!:scootangel:

Wow. love it. Spike/Twilight/Shining is my favorites sibling along with Celestia/Luna and Rarity/Sweetie. this was perfect.

Wow. love it. Spike/Twilight/Shining is my favorites sibling along with Celestia/Luna and Rarity/Sweetie. this was perfect.

Hmmmmm... hmmmmmmmm..... hmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm...

... Well, we didn't actually see much time between the two just being brothers. It was either the first meeting, Shining teaching Spike, or him passing on the touch to being the protector... I mean, yeah, we have brotherly interactions, but the quickly went to something important. Not that its bad

The only other thing wrong with this is that it leaves me with a craving to see Spike becoming a knight story.

Sorry, constructive reviews aren't my forte...

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The only other thing wrong with this is that it leaves me with a craving to see Spike becoming a knight story.

Well, I DO have a story planned for that, unfortunately it might be a long ways off. Rest assured that the story is in my mind, I just need to catch my universe up to the part where I can write it.

Thanks for your review;
-Lumino

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