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Jay David

Just a guy who likes FiM


Sweetie Belle has a secret, but one that her sister soon figures out. It seems that the young filly has a crush on a certain drake, and the elder sister is more than happy to try and help things along, enlisting the help of Twilight to do so.

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Comments ( 34 )

This wasn't a bad fic even if I'm a Spilight fan but...what the f*** is with people down voting your stories? This started to become an annoyance :ajbemused: I like your writing style, it's simple yet sweet...too bad you don't write Spilight romances :twilightsmile:

Cute story so far, and Sweetie Belle is way better for spike anyway. But mostly because i hate rarity with a burning intensity.

Never say 'what could possibly go wrong?' or anything that's related because it always go wrong.

Told you so.

How's this for a sequel?
The Mane 6 went back to Golden Oaks Library for their usual meeting when they saw Spike and Sweetie Belle making out which leads to a explanation story for the lovebirds.

This a nice simple story. It is a nice change of pace.:twilightsmile: Though I wonder what is up with all the down votes.:unsuresweetie:

good story in all loved it but thier was one thibng nagging me and its was spike calling twilight mom and mother. in the show spike said that shes not his mom but she did hacth him thier more of a sibling thing really brother and sister well adopted brother.

3590157 True, but in a previous fic, I had it established that Spike now thinks of Twilight as his mother, and she thinks of him as a son. So with this fic set afterwards, I kind of had it so that Twilight would have unofficially adopted him in-between stories.

That was a cute little story :twilightsmile:

I'm also glad you didn't try to pad it for the sake of dragging things out. You got right to point, and it was effective.

I'm not really a fan of Rarity x Spike myself, given that Spike's crush seems rather superficial in nature, which is a disservice to both him and Rarity. Maybe if he fell for someone else, preferably closer to his own age, he might notice more than just her looks.

3590157 In all fairness, Spike was half asleep when he said that, so while it's true, I wouldn't put TOO much stock in it :pinkiesmile:

I'm not a fan of the "speech has its own line"-style of writing... and it honestly threw me off that after EVERY SINGLE UTTERANCE OF VOCAL SPEECH there had to be some form of descriptive line... I ended up just skipping them and enjoying the story

this story is real heart warming. though i don't like it when spike is referred to as twilight's son. she isn't nearly old enough to be a mom. if anything, she is more of a big sister/ best friend. but your story, you can call him whatever

:rainbowkiss: This story is really good so far.
:yay: Also, i am one of THE BIGGEST FANS of Spike X Belle shipping
:facehoof: BTW, you never ever say "What could possibly go wrong?" or anything of that nature unless you want to tempt fate.

:rainbowlaugh: Oh Rarity, did you really think your sister was THAT naive?
:scootangel: Time to put on an act!

3601000 I also adore spike bell shipping it is one of my favourite:twilightsmile::derpyderp2::derpytongue2::derpytongue2::derpytongue2::derpytongue2::derpytongue2:

uh oh........... after sweetie talk to rarity

I loved this story sooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooomuch! I finally found a good spike belle story thankyou:pinkiehappy:

3748681 if you want a really great spike belle story you should read the sweetest gem by The Rarispy http://www.fimfiction.net/story/34381/the-sweetest-gem
it my favorite story of the pairing

Why would twilight consider spike her son when all she does is treat him like her bitch

Why would twilight consider spike her son when all she does is treat him like her bitch

this story was awsome good work :rainbowkiss:

Why would rarity think of thinking that nothing could go wrong it's just as bad as saying it out laud

Hilarious ending. Much great chapter. Wow.

I highly enjoyed this. Most excellent. :twilightsmile:

I really REALLY liked this fic, but I have to say that one thing bothered me. A lot. The relationship between Spike and Twilight is like that of a son and mother, BUT, she only ever calls him spike or number one assistant. Not son. And same thing with Twily. That was quite distracting, and not in a good way. Other than that, I really liked the story.
Have a moustache :moustache:

3590907 The adorabetes strikes again. :moustache::heart::unsuresweetie:

What could possibly go wrong?

Everything. Absolutely. EVERYTHING.

3592890 Well, he did later call her "sister" in the same episode, when he was more awake, sooo...

What could possibly go wrong? Famous last words if ever I heard them! :twilightsmile:

This is unbelievably cute!

Uh oh... she suspects!!!! :unsuresweetie: :raritydespair:

Such a cute resolution! Also, I love the punch line ending. :twilightsmile:

Well, I think its more of a sister brother relationship.

Remove the "I think" because it was confirmed in the series that it’s a brother and sister relationship.

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