• Member Since 15th Jun, 2012
  • offline last seen January 17th

Warren Hutch


Living with LUS.

E
Source

Over a thousand years ago, two royal siblings fought for the sky and were exiled, one by her sister's hoof, and one in penance for what she had done.

In the present Republic of Equestria, no one remembers them as anything more than legends and old pony tales. Save for one shy filly who fell from the sky one fine summer's day.

An Alternate Universe "What If" tale, reconstructing the beginning from a different angle.

Chapters (11)
Join our Patreon to remove these adverts!
Comments ( 636 )

An Alternate Universe where Fluttershy fills the role of Celestia's student? Celestia is in self-exile out of guilt? Twilight is a researcher obsessed with myths? Written by Warren Hutch?

You had my curiosity. Now, you have my attention.

An alternate universe fic by Warren? It's like Christmas getting early to me! :pinkiehappy:

Setup looks very interesting and offers tons of different possibilities from the usual. Celestia as a hermit shrouded in myth and working in the shadows instead of the royal mentor figure, with a pony democracy instead of the immortal monarchy? Now this is the sort of alternate Equestria that I'd like to explore! :twilightsmile:

Now we just need to have Rarity and Pinkie versions and I think we'll have a whole set. ^_^

Celestia is using the old tongue, eh? I didn't even have to read this to figure out I was gonna love it.

It had your name on it. :ajsmug:

3586447
Yeah! And somepony should do a Twilight Sparkle one as well! :derpytongue2:

Oh... wait...

:facehoof:

I really, really like where this looks to be going.
It'll be interesting to see how much everything has hanged without Celestia around- from the sound of it, even the landscape is different.
You have my attention.

3586459 I'll second that. Anything with Warren Hutch's name is automatically faved and thumbs up for me.

There are forces at work that we can't begin to understand, and won't as long as ponies just keep their snouts in the grass and never look beyond the next mouthful."

This? This right here? This is why I love your stories so much, man. You make up these euphemisms and sayings that perfectly flesh out a world of ponies. That was one of my favorite bits about Earth & Sky, the way you made an entire vernacular for the pegasi. Hell, I even stole the phrase "loopty-loopin'" for one of my stories. Uh, yeah, sorry about that. :twilightblush:

But for real, you are one of the best world-builders out there, brother. I can not WAIT to see where you take this one. I'm also finally glad to be able to be along for the ride from the beginning this time. :ajsmug:

Nomnomnom worldbuilding :twistnerd: from Celestia's archaic language to the terms to the understated fact that Ponyville doesn't appear to exist and neither do other towns in the interior in this world. And on top of that, the Fluttershy/Celestia scenes are sweet and Twilight's adventures with skunks are bucking funny :rainbowlaugh:

For who better to heal the broken heart of a goddess than the Element of Kindness herself?

Warren, if this is anywhere near as good as 'Earth and Sky' and 'The Book of Days' then this is going to be compulsive reading. I know that I'm hooked already! :pinkiehappy:

Poor Twilight! She's like a one-pony disaster zone sometimes!

This is a very interesting and very different Fluttershy and Twilight. Fluttershy, who has been taught and virtually raised through her teen years to adulthood by the Goddess of the Sun is far more self-confident and knowledgeable. This is a Fluttershy whose talents have been gently encouraged and nurtured by a loving teacher. On the other hand, Twilight Sparkle in this universe is a Fox Mulder-like character, fascinated by the unknowable and the mysterious (as in the canon timeline) but, lacking a good teacher, stymied at every turn and laughed at as a crackpot.

And Celestia knows that Luna will be soon coming home, so she has gathered the Elements. Something tells me that things will be very different this time.

please don't make Twilight a liar in this

Now I know how Twilight felt finding the ancient library!

(Ok, so I already knew that feel, it was called Ciruss' first trip to Hay-on-Wye, but I digress)

This is already looking ever so good. :twilightsmile:

That story is not about Screwball :fluttershysad:

Interesting indeed.

I've never seen Celestia done in the style of the Fair Folk, but this just works beautifully.

Warren is one of only two authors so far who I've got on automatic favorite before reading the first word. The only complaint I have is that this'll probably slow down the Dawn Heart epic. :-)

*breathes heavily*

ASDFGHJKL THIS IS WONDERFUL

There are four reasons why I decided to read this story:

1) The idea that Fluttershy is Celestia's student, really haven't seen that before, and I can see how it has helped her come out of her shell.
2) The word "Reconstruction" in the summary, that gave me hope that this won't be a craptasitc world that is usually described when the Sisters don't rule, or for that matter a world that is much, much better because of it. It is still the same, Flutters is still shy, and Twi still hunts for the truth
3) Celestia herself, while I don't neccessarly agree that she would have left like that, I do understand the reasons. Also she still watches over Equestria and guide the Sun and Moon on their journey
4) You wrote it, that alone would make me give this a second look.

I look forward to seeing where you will take this and what the aftermath of Nightmare Moon's return will be.

I'm mortaging my house to buy more attention to pay to this. Brilliant concept, and what seems like it's going to be copious amounts of worldbuilding.

2 chapters in, and epic already. Eagerly awaiting the next chapter.

You have grabbed my attention like a matador grabbing the horns on a minotaur's head.

New Warren Hutch story! It's like Christmas in Decem --- wait.

3586481

Well apparently no Ponyville without Celestia to give Applejack's ancestors the land grant for Sweet Apple Acres.

Oh this is absolutely fascinating :pinkiehappy:

I am really liking this so far. Excellent work! The "more assertive but still very gentle Fluttershy" feels completely right. :twilightsmile:

3586447
There's an Applejack one? I haven't seen that.

3587836
It's called Seeds and it's authored by SaintAbsol.

:pinkiehappy:
I have a new story to follow and read.
Have like and fav for your hard work.

3587565

...So you're going to die very soon? That's terrible...

This seems like an interesting story, and I intend on reading it.
Your description gave me some problems, however. This...

were exiled, one by

should be a semi-colon.

Can't wait for the next chapter.:pinkiehappy:

Very interesting and unique premise! :pinkiesmile: You sir are a genius! :rainbowkiss:

Oooh. This was a really, really fine opening; your characterization of Fluttershy and Celestia was a real treat. Time to follow!

3588037 LOL... hopefully not.

So, which of the Mane Six is Fluttershy's ranger friend? Applejack would be an obvious choice... but so would be Rainbow Dash. Almost certainly neither Pinkie Pie nor Rarity... unless this world is more different than it seemed at first.

I liked Twilight Sparkle's new cutie mark, too! :twilightsmile:

Gah, I really want to read this, but I value the relationship between Twilight and Celestia so much that it actually hurts to read about a world in which it doesn't exist in any form. :raritydespair:

is equestria a republic in your story?
It's Twilight Copernicus, asking why the moon rises and falls.

Based on your previous work I have to favourite this straight away. Helps that I'm a sucket for alternate universes. :twilightsmile:

I love everything about this so far. The main concept is just... It seems so straightforward, conceptually, yet the power and gravity of it in practice are undeniable. It's darker and more mysterious than the canon universe, yet still feels unquestionably familar. More to the point, I can see all the hints of the worldbuilding you've done, and that sort of thing reels me in like nothing else.

I also like the smaller-scale alterations that you've made, especially with regards to the characters. Twilight, Fluttershy, and Celestia all feel true to their canon selves, but they've been hardened by the world they've been raised in (or created with their actions, in Celestia's case). With the younger ponies, they're more mature from having to live in a world without a benevolent power watching over them, at least directly, but they still feel wonderfully limited and inexperienced. Can't wait to see what you've done with the rest of the Six.

And if you're taking this where you seem to be taking it... Ohohohohoho, I am excited. :pinkiehappy: I don't think I've favourited an in-progress story quite so fast before, and certainly not so early on its run. Eagerly following this now, sir, and waiting with bated breath for the next chapter.

This is gorgeously written! I wish I had your talent with description.

This is a really amazing set-up with an interesting premise and wonderfully written. The characters are spot-on and I've never seen Fluttershy's talent and her personality explained better. Thanks for the tip of the hat. This is going to be a really fun read!

This was a really funny and really heartwarming chapter with Twilight. Not many can do both in the same chapter and hit the mark, but you pulled it off. I can't wait to see how things progress!

This is good! Fave and like coming your way!

3587198
If you look at my story list, you'll find that roughly three fourths of them share this condition. :duck:

3586962
She seems a bit more concerned with finding the truth than telling lies, don't you think? :ajsmug:

3588442
Well, seeing as they call it the "Republic of Equestria", as I mentioned in the description, either they are a republic or somepony misread the dictionary when they made the national stationery. :pinkiesmile:

3588037
I'd say more like about to get the purple nurple of his life. Y'don't wanna grab the horns of something with big, beefy, Macho Man Randy Savage style arms. :twilightoops:

Good start on the story, can't wait to see more! :pinkiehappy:

Login or register to comment
Join our Patreon to remove these adverts!