(Humanized.)
Thunderstorm was happy and lovable, until something weird happens. He walks into Ponyville but he doesn't seem friendly, Pinkie (as always) throws him a party, everyone comes, but he wasn't happy. He throws a big scene breaking Pinkies heart and angering the town, but she's determined to change him.
I write better if it's humanized, just to clarify. Thanks for reading, I spent all my time on this, so if you have any constructive criticism, you can, just be nice about it.
Chapters (5)
Hmm...
This story has potential, but it needs some more realism in it.
Oh changeling names are such a joy to come up with!
Jackass.
Don't you do it motherfucker!
Bwahahaha!
You probably meant, "The man scoffed."
Overall,I really did enjoy the story. It's refreshing from he overdone, 'changeling in Ponyville,' sort of thing that I've taken part in myself. But there's one thing that I find it difficult to understand. Did the changelings tear all of the love out of thunderstorm and the. Possess him, or was it the other way around? And how did he get mixed up with changelings in the first place, or did they just kidnap him of something?
3606417 Soon, my friend, soon, I will have all the answers as I progress along the story. Thank you for your words, I'll fix that word soon.
3605802 *Shrugs*
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Love dat avatar by the way.
3609567 Thank you, I love it.
Yeah, people from holland are generally assholes, SCOTTISH PRIDE!
3633232 I have no idea what that meant but that was the randomest thing I ever heard.
3633238holland is sometimes referred to ats the, "Netherlands," and I was born in Scottland so, yeah.
3633257 Oh, how are you liking the story so far?
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I think it's brilliant. Fantastic idea and great execution. Some minor grammar mistakes, but nothing terrible.
3633281 Sweet.
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mustaches out of ten
As of right now I give it
3633315 Okay, thanks.
I pocked this evening to catch up on my reading and I picked this fic first, and I'm not regretting it one bit. Keep up the good work friend.
Suck it you terrorist dick bag.
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Confised what? Confused stutter, Confused Voice, Confised frenzy?!
(first time quoting hope it goes well...)
Just a question is it ponies with fingers or people with wings and horns?