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I'm a brony from Mexico. Sorry for any grammar mistake you most likely will find.

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Marble and Limestone Pie work hard on their farm. They don't usually visit many places, neither do they speak much to other ponies aside from their family. But after a small trip, they heard about her big sister. This leads them to remember how much do they actually know about her.

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thats all i have to say... am excited to see where you take this. :pinkiehappy:

Funny thing actually it's been said that there will be a "Visiting Pie Sisters Episode" in Season 4. Not sure if it will be at all similar to this (probably won't but you never know), but I'm read it anyway. I can't wait to see what Marble and Limestone ecounter on their journey. :pinkiesmile:

3557023 Wait what?! They are actually making it into an episode?... To be honest I tried to stay away from spoilers so it takes me by surprise... awesome :pinkiehappy:

I've always liked Inkie and Blinkie myself, but the story is a good read nonetheless.

3557131 It's not been confirmed yet but there's information that seems to point towards it. I'm hoping it turns out good, if it does I might just have a new favorite episode.

There are quite a few so I'd recommend picking up an editor or prereader. Other then that pretty solid so far. :pinkiesmile:

3561799 yeah, I'm planing on edit it and tweek the mistakes. But its really hard working on a phone

That missed day is probably going to come back to bite Marble and Limestone in the butt. :twilightoops:

I see Gilda still hasn't learned her lesson. Well she'll be in trouble soon enough. :trixieshiftleft:

I can't wait to see Gilda get a Pie in the face!

You need to break up this wall of text, remember that for each new speaker you start a new paragraph. :eeyup:

Story wise not bad, of course when Marble and Limestone get to Ponyville and bump into Pinkie Pie they'll likely hear what Gilda didn't tell them.:trixieshiftleft:

3581216 Huh, I wanted to make my own style of writting, and a friend of mine suggested me this "continuous" conversation style. Now that I really think about it, it does look like just a wall of text. Thanks for the advice

3557159 Really? I really like them too, and I think they have pontential for good stories... how you've been liking the story so far?

well, I just read all six chapters back to back and the misspells and grammar mistakes aside, this is pretty good. I actually can't wait to see what happens when they get to ponyville.:pinkiesmile:

I have that book and to be honest it never outright states that the pony left on the rock farm during the concert is Pinkie's older sister. It's probably implied though. :eeyup:

3561993 well it did. In chapter five Pinkie greeted the family, and when she said "where's-?" Igneous interrupted her and said "You older sister is keeping an eye on the farm" =)

CCC

Marbled laughed as hard as she could

I believe that should be 'Marble', not 'Marbled'.

A reasonable first chapter. I shall read further.

CCC

Ah, that explains why the grammar and spelling took a dive on this chapter.

Definately fix it, at some point. It's distracting, and not in a good way.

BraeburnxMarble shipping? Very intresting. :eeyup:

I was expecting Dr. Whooves, but good reference though!

3601650 in some point I thought about adding him to the story, but I couldn't find how.

3601456 I regret nothing!

Appleloosa you mean.

Marble would be disappointed that Braeburn is already taken.

3603204 I don't think so. They seemed to like each other but I don't really see enough to suggest they're love partners. Plus interspecies romance betwen a pony and a buffalo would be very akward considering the uneasy peace treaty between the tribe and the settlers.

3603493 Darn it! That's part of the next chapter :twilightblush:

Long distance relationships never work out.

3609881 or do they?... Maybe not

Looks like the threat was a false alarm. For now. :pinkiecrazy:

The pies!

The Sparkle Family.

Probably the Pies. What have Igneous and Cloudy been doing while Marble and Limestone are on their journey? How will they react to knowing three of their daughters are heroines? :trixieshiftright:

The Pies of course.

3620073 Well, he is injured so he should be at home, shouldn't him?

3620486 Yes. But that doesn't mean he still hasn't heard the news.

That was quite the plot twist with the party. Pinkie Pie had it all planned from the beginning. :pinkiehappy:

3655720 I started the story with and ended mind, I believe it accomplish what I wanted :twilightsmile:

3656448 I knew you guys would like that twist. I thought about making Twist saying "what a twist!" When everything was explained, but I thought it would have been too much

Marble and Limestone? That's not how you spell Inkie and Blinkie. :pinkiegasp:

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Heh heh, sorry, I had to. :twilightblush:

Well, at least Pinkie`s dad can`t kill me with a pitchfork, first time I came, I almost died!:pinkiesick:

4337132 He tried to kill you because you shoot a cannon full of streamers at him.

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