I might use a semicolon properly from time to time... That's about the most you can expect from me.
Ponyville's resident glassblower always was a little strange.
Four years ago, a changeling infiltrator found himself alone, and with no signs of backup. He followed the emergency protocol, stuck to the rules, and weathered the storm. With the proper application of patience, discipline, and heavy drinking, the years practically flew. Now the end is in sight, and it's safe to say that there's hardly any story left to tell, right?
Yeah, I thought so too...
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It's a good start. Tenitive watch. Can't wait to see where it goes
3563029 Thanks for the support, it really helps a new author like myself; i'll try not to disappoint!
Good flow, no glaringly obvious errors and rather entertaining. You're off to a good start. :-)
3567083 I'm really glad that you like it so far. The reception of this story has been amazing, and i'm really looking foward to building on this! Thanks so much for the feedback, I hope you continue to enjoy the story.
You stay classy, fine reader.
So a Changeling walks into a bar... and he does it well enough for me to wonder what will he order! Some berry-flavored punch, perhaps?
It's definitely a good start, so far the story lives up to its tags (well, not talking about Romance, but it's naturally much too early to say anything about it) - it actually entertained me enough to stay for another round. Overall, good job!
3569845 I suppose the chapter lived up to it's name! Thanks so much for the feedback and support, I'm going to be taking this rather slowly to try to keep this as original and entertaining as possible. I know I'm kinda starting to repeat myself here, but I hope you continue to enjoy reading this story, it goes a long way towards my plans of WORLD DOMINATION!
Cheers, and ask that changeling to grab some punch for me will ya
This is so good! The story is very well put together and you differently put time and effort into it before publishing. I give you my gratitude and can't wait to read the next chapter! One thing I will say is that though I love the funny and amazingly well placed pun's make sure not to over do it because if you do there is always some'ling there to jump on you. One last thing I GIVE YOU MUSTACHES!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
I can't make more ......... sad face.
3584770 WHERE DO I PUT ALL OF THESE MOSTACHES, THERE'S NO MORE ROOM! Seriously though, i'm really glad that you've enjoyed this story so far, I was almost certain that this would get bombed into oblivion and then burned and buried beneath a volcano. Also, on the topic of puns/comedy in this story; I'll try my absolute hardest to keep it well timed, and geniune within the context of the scene. I do plan on writing some scenes with a more serious atmosphere, seeing as i'll be touching on Diflex's alcoholism later in the story. I guess you could say he needs to reflect on his life, am I right guys?
...I'll just escort myself out...
3670007 Between you and me, that line took SO much longer than it should've...seriously, I just couldn't find a way to end this chapter.
MY COMEDIC GENIUS WINS AGAIN MWAHAHAHAH
This is good like and fave!
3811823 Thank you, Sir Secret Stallion! I'm very glad to see that you like this so far!
Also, between you and me..Luna is best princess. (You didn't hear it from me.)
Been awhile since I've commented on something. Anyway this is really good, sad it doesn't update often though. Like and a fave for ya!cdn.derpiboo.ru/media/BAhbBlsHOgZmSSJGMjAxMi8xMC8xMy8xMl8xNl8wNV84ODlfMTIxMzA2X19VTk9QVF9fc2FmZV9xdWVlbl9jaHJ5c2FsaXNfbWFjcm8GOgZFVA/121306__safe_queen-chrysalis_macro.jpg
3815024 But I heard you say it .
4010159 I've been a slow writer, haven't I
I'll be releasing a new chapter soon, it just needs some final edits and we're golden. Thanks for your support, i'll try my best to make each chapter worth the wait!
4011607 You heard nothing...
4012821 Y-yessir pleasedonthitme!
Why was I uninformed of the update?
Ninja update
4051531 We all tried to hide it from you, obviously I didn't bribe someone well enough though, and they went and told you anyways.
I am very disappoint.
and he becomes a changeling and the string him up and live happily ever after, the end
Coolio, senor pantelones de guapo
4180893 You forgot about the part when they burn him at the stake for the one true Lord and Savior, Sunbutt.
Praise be to Sunbutt.
4180919 Yes, and felice navi da to you as well.
No stringing please!
4180893 Bad! Don't give him idea's like that!
4181032 I'll make a whole chapter about it, with a clever pun for a title and everything!
Oh, the details are going to be excruciating.
Unrelated note: So the Secret Stallion decided to stick around, eh?
We'll have to make you regret that, now won't we...
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That poem was a nice touch, it sounds familar, but the name escapes me.
4314053" The Cookie Thief" by Valerie Cox.
I heard it once and for some reason it had to go in this story somewhere
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This is what I was thinking of. Though the artist probably got inspired by the cookie poem.
4316665 What is it with Trixie and crackers?
Well, its totally not a conversation if its a transmission. I do believe that you forgot your English rules.
that's some seriously quick glassblowing. I would totally make a glass knife for CQC with dem skills. Or just heat up their eyes.
4563808 Hm, i'll keep that in mind. Thanks for the heads-up, I tend to forget that English has rules a lot...
Hyper fast CQC glassblowing is awesome.
More now!
4652931 I can only think of puntastic titles for each chapter once every month or two!
...Unless I switch into MAXIMUM OVERDRIVE.
4654168 * Squints his eyes* Fine.
kek
5282645 Y'know for a 'comedic' story, i'm pretty sure that's the only joke I've actually written...
I'm confuzeled. Why would Diflex consider himself a 'good guy' if the demographics of Changelings were put into bad lighting by Equestrians?
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As cute and fluffy as the Equestrians may be, their moral system is by no means perfect. They don't like Changelings, therefore they are 'evil'. From Diflex's point of view, he is the 'good guy' living amonst villians. I figured it wouldn't make sense to have a character willingly accept himself as the 'bad guy', or at least, it would be difficult to work around
Knew chaptur wen? Davai! Blyat!
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Dunno cheeki breeki fukboi.
We wait and see.
Well that happened.
6521884 Didn't it, though?
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Dont spoil it, I haven't read the chapter yet!
The day you uploaded this chapter is the same day I began writing my story. Coincidence? I THINK NOT!
I decided to give this a read 'cause you know, trying to be nice and shit. Didn't think I'd like it. Ended up actually liking it. You should finish this. You can't leave people on a cliffhanger like this.
I have a question I ask myself when I get stuck: "Where am I leading my readers?"
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I'd like to finish it one day. Feels hypocritical to proofread other stories when I can't even finish my own. I'd like to give some kind of closure at least.
Thanks for the kind words, they're much appreciated.
7703301 I wouldn't worry. Mark Twain took seven years to write The Adventures of Huckleberry Finn due to losing interest and nearly pigeonholing the book.
I myself looked forward to hammering out my own story over the summer. I only wrote a few paragraphs.
I don't know if I could prove it but the longer I live the more I'm convinced that these struggles make the best art. I wouldn't worry at all.
I have to say, originally I wasn't going to bother reading this story when it appeared in my recommendations , due to it being not only incomplete but also apparently abandoned for several years (I don't really like to get attached to stories with that condition, it hurts to see them like that), but after trying the first chapter, I'm glad I gave it a chance.
You created one of the most interesting and charismatic OC Changelings I have read, personality-wise; and not only that, you paired him with Berry Punch of all the possible characters and built an interesting and promising narrative with them.
If at some point you come back and decide to continue it, that would be good.