twilights big D move...

Sheesh, wish you'd have gone with C. I know this isn't labeled as a comedy, but up until that point it was fairly funny. I can't say I'll be reading the sequel. This and the previous chapter just hit me wrong, and the memory wipe spell was just a little too convenient, and Twilight being able and willing to just let things go like that were unbelievable. Well written, but not my cup of tea.

quickly charge $5.00 for that spell, so many bronies wanting to forget that will make you rich

or was that your plan all along

Wait this was all a set-up by pinkie pie to learn her friends fetish and the rest doesn't remember theirs? Wow... pinkie pie is more evil than I thought she was

That alt ending should be legit

I'm sorry but fluttershy needs punishment for hurting SPIKEY WIKEY!

Pinkie giggled. “I just found out what I’m doing for all of your birthdays!”

Twilight, Rarity, Rainbow Dash, Applejack, and Fluttershy Will have interesting "presents" for their birthdays.

I what to see what happens on their birthdays. (Idea for the sequel. )

Yeah, bit disappointing really. Memory wipe? Really? Oh well. I did come up with a way that everything could be okay again, without memory erasure, but it would have been about five times longer than this chapter I reckon. Still I would like to see the alternate ending, perhaps it will have elements of my idea of how things hould have gone.

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I agree with you BRD that would make a very interesting sequel

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You are right, in some way Flutterhy should be punished for raping Spike.

Yeaaaah, C would have been a better choice.

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Right?! it's just like.. at least ignore her for a month! AT THE VERY LEAST! or better yet treat her like she did spike?

3580362 Agreed.
Alternate ending, please.

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That would be OK, ignore her or treat her like she did Spike.
Or a public humilliation in front of all Ponyville, or tell princess Celestia and let her decide Fluttershy's destiny.
It's sounds evil and diabolic, but if I were Twilight I would do the same if Fluttershy did that to Spike.

Fluttershy should not be punished. She's still our cute flutters <3 would have preferred c or d but this works too.

Alternate ending please and also, damn, Pinkie is a genius.

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Heck yes, actually seeing how Twilight is basically Spike's mother/sister - seeing as she raised him AND hatched him - I'd act even WORSE, I'd probably freak and welp.. magic isn't only used for good ya know!

Would have loved to have seen D myself.

Well, Twi's reaction was pretty damn good. Looks like I won't have to assassinate you after all.

Jokes aside, this was pretty enjoyable. I liked your takes on each of their ridiculous fantasies. Although, I don't think Twilight would have gone through with Rarity's plan. I sure as hell wouldn't have, were I in her position.

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Rape is one of the most horrible acts someone can commit and raping a child makes it so much worse.

I honestly thought it was unfair, sure what she did was bad but she was peer pressured into telling it, and only she was attacked :P Think of that poor fish story that Fluttershy had to sit through.

Am I the only one who initially thought that Twilight was going to see the letter she was starting to write after performing the memory wiping spell?

And boom goes the retcon bomb.

Should of just kept it as water sports, the whole memory wipe thing was just far too convenient and kinda ruined the story

3580850 Twilight cried into the letter, so the ink would be ineligible.

I loved this fanfiction until the last two chapters. I would love to see C and maybe D too because the whole last two chapters felt way different than the previous ones, and I'm not too sure why.

Idk, but I hope you make an alternate ending with C being Fluttershy's fetish.

I was fun to read up to the 6th chapter but wow what a trainwreck ending. Rape, resetting the story, and Pinkie Pie manipulating her friends emotions for birthday ideas? Jeez... I feel like I've been trolled.

Magic may have been powerful, but it certainly wasn’t stoppable.

Should be "unstoppable."

can't wait for the alternate ending i wanna see twilight bring the smackdown on that child raping psycho

I don't think Twilight would have reacted quite that badly. It's not like her to attack her friend, especially since she was crying. But it's believable, yet farfetched. GREAT JOB, MUCH CLOPPINESS

hey no problem man I loved it so I had to give it a like and favorite

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...Blatant and extremely abusive rape of a minor? One that Twilight grew up with and really cares for? Yes Twilight was vengeful, and it doesn't make it right, but I think the emotions are totally understandable.

If I caught someone being raped? Well, it would be a lot more extreme and probably more final.

Although I'd make sure to at least attempt proper care if they survived the onslaught.

3581385 I see your point, I guess I didn't really look at it that way. You make a very valid point, but how old is spike? I mean he was hatched by twilight, and Twi was like 6-9 years old when she did. If he's still a minor, then that would make Twi less than 20 years of age, and it don't make much sense. Twi and the girls seem to be at least old enough for Spike to be around 18. So is he really a minor, or is it just the fact that he's a "baby" dragon?

Egh.... I dunno, so far I was having fun reading the story, but the last two chapters kinda ruined it. Fluttershy practically raping Spike was the first red flag. I would have definitely kept it at C alone, because that just ruined it. Also, the memory wipe spell? It just feels too damn convenient for this kind of story. I know it's pinkie's thing to find just what's necessary for the moment, but I think that with the rather dark turn you took with Flutters, it just doesn't quite fit

Also, Spike looking at vore? That would have been a fun ending to see xD

Ok 3 things:
1.Flutters Was a bit to dark.
2.a mind wipe spell sounds believable if convienient.
3 and MOST important, before the mind wipe spell, no one deemed it important to get SPIKE's opinion on the situation!?!?
yeah lets just forget everything and leave the one person who maybe truly traumatized by the experience to fend against his emotions and to not have any say about retribution or (Celestia forbid) forgiveness for Fluttershy!?!? Luna so help me, that needs to be an addressed issue if there is an alternate ending.

3581547 would've liked spike to be at least average sized, but pathetic...

3581619 thats a little off topic of my rant. Here I am, complaining about the moral dilemma of the story, and I get replied about the size of spikes genitalia? have a Pinkie Pie because you be randomz yo

3581640 AW, I try

3581645 ??????

Wait, so in the alternate ending, when Twilight attacks Fluttershy, will she still tell the Princess, or is a fucking beating all she gets?

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Me too.

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Its so painful anything else is deleted from my mind. problem solved.

I'd like to read the alternate ending. For that, Fluttershy deserves to have the absolute hell beaten out of her.

and in the end... this thing was all just a huge ruse so Pinkie could get them birthday gifts... I buy it.
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3581766 I know, even if it's fluttershy :fluttershyyay:

I'd have lef- *checks tags* oh. Not tagged comedy.

Huh.

Well, uh. In my defense it seemed comedy to me. Anyway, I have mixed feelings about this. It's played a bit straight - which is fine I guess - but it feels like a major tone shift. Fluttershy seems needlessly stupid and confused as to why her friends are angry at her and Twilight's reaction seems a bit too aggressively violent (I would think she'd just lock Flutters down or something and run to check up on Spike). I can see how to play it for laughs (have Spike be entirely cool with it, even if it's not exactly what would happen in real life - 'hey, I got laid before you did Twilit Sparks-le') and I'm a bit sad you didn't go that route to ease off the tension. Memory wiping, well.

It falls a bit flat for me. Sorry man. And my suggested fetishes (though I think they're really uninspired for the most part):

: Food fits though if she was into 'natural fudge' that'd be hilarious. A baker that doesn't wash her hooves after play time. Ew.
: Dressing like a lady ... or dressing like a stallion. Make her into futa. Really, I don't see AJ having a fetish all that much. She's really vanilla to me.
: Autoerotic asphyxiation. Nothing is too extreme for Dash!
: She's a librarian. Traditionally, they're kinky dom-types. She's a Princess. Traditionally, they're subs. Twilight is a switch. A bit common I suppose.
: Filth. Sorry Rare's, I can totally see you into the most filthy mud and nasty mix ever. A bit traditional though.
: Animals have been done, vanilla has been done, Domshy has been OVER done ... no, Flutters is into animal scatological sex. What? You have to clean that filth up all the time!

Overall, it was a silly read and I'm glad I read it.

A.) Having Twilight's fetish be futa, and having her cast a spell on a mare to give her a stallionhood.
B.) Have Rarity's fetish be tentacles. Hell, I changed it at last minute, and was halfway through the chapter when I made it fish on impulse.
C.) Fluttershy's chapter was going to completely revolve around watersports, and have a random oc as a partner.
E.) Rainbow's chapter was originally going to be her with her father, but instead, I decided to have a random oc.
G.) In the beginning, I originally planned on having a couple ponies be dared to kiss.

WHY?! Why did you say this?!!
Do you realize how BADLY I want to see the alternative chapters now?!
Why torture us with ideas we won't see? WHY?!

I didn't think it was bad.

I didn't like the ending, but Fluttershy's story wasn't bad at all, I don't think. I do want to know however, does Fluttershy have any remorse for what she did? I would like to hear her talk about it regretfully, at least that way she wouldn't be considered a rapist psychopath.

THIS STORY IS ****ING AWESOME, and thank you for making it.