Princess Twilight Sparkle of Equestria went into the human world to get her crown back, but it was a confused human Twilight Sparkle who returned to Equestria. Now the former human is stuck as a blank flank unicorn, and the element of magic is in the human world for the next thirty moons.
Can you say, Equestria is doomed?
Based on Equestria Girls but you DON'T need to have seen the movie to understand what's going on. Also I started to write this story just after the first movie, hence why this in an alternate universe and has differences with canon in later Equestria Girls movies. And is not like the premise of the story, that the way the mirror works is different, is not an AU to start with.
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I can't wait!
Woah wait a minute. I like the story but 2 and 1/2 years? I thought 30 moons was like a month
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Thirty moons is thirty months...
3568823 Ah ok makes sense. I don't know why I thought it was a month. I was assuming 30 night time moons not 30 full moons. My bad
I haven't even started reading, and yet I can already tell
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And interesting setup. Though it's odd you have that one moment in the middle that shifts from first person perspective to third.
The perfect image IMO.
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Tara should learn how to "float things". Every adult unicorn can perform basic telekinesis.
Or at least how to magically grab things with "hooves" / use freaky alien suction cups
And you know, Tara's reaction is pretty much spot on with how most people from earth would react to such a strange scenario.
Yea I'll follow since it show's some promise.
*Reads Desc...*
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I cant WAIT to see where THIS idea goes!
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Anyone's guess! Apparently, the Apple Family reunion is every 100 moons, but there's been two in 3 seasons, and it's only been a year! Not to mention, who even knows if Equestria has moon phases like ours?!
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The BIG family reunion is every 100 moons, there are other family reunions, but is usually for those that don't live that far away. The 100 moons is especial because EVERY family member goes.
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First off, that's your headcanon, we still have no idea what Equestrian moons actually are, and second, if that's the case, why were Applejack and Granny Smith so surprised to have so many ponies at the second onscreen Apple Family Reunion?
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See the one in the first episode, is only like haft of the ponies we see in the second reunion. That means the first one was just for the Summer Sun Celebration. And if they are surprised is probably because everypony went to the reunion, since it was probably the first reunion is many years that everypony could go.
And yes is cannon that the one in episode one was just for the Summer Sun Celebration.
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Alright. I looked it up, and they said as much in Applebuck Season.
Still, my point still stands, Equestrian moons aren't very well-explained in canon.
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They might have different sized months, I'll give you that. But the month was originally created in many cultures to represent the period of time associated with the full moon cycle. So, objectively, 100 moons still equates to 100 months, even if their moon phases are different.
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Moon usually refers to a lunar month, that is a full cycle of the moon from new through full and back to new, which on Earth takes twenty-eight days, or four weeks. Most people are presuming that the thirty moons thing refers to thirty months, which works out about two and a half years, but for the lunar months it's more like 840 days, which is slightly over 2.3 years, or around 25-28 months somewhere.
3568823 Actually the lunar and Gregorian calendars don't quite match up, there are thirteen moons to a calender year. So it's more like 28 months. Hence the reason the author wrote 'almost' a year and a half in the first chapter.
not bad, my good sir.
Say, are we going to get a look on the other side of the portal?
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If you want spoilers about the story see my blog posts, that's all.
Interesting...
Nice!
Ugh. Luna's behaviour is despicable, for no particular reason. I'm out...
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Lets see:
Good
A) She is wasting her time to make sure Tara doesn't have Nightmares and giving her affection.
B) She is willing to teach Tara about magic and be her friend.
C) She was willing to apologize for what she did.
On the other hoof
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D) She is using magic in Tara without even asking for permission,
E) She may be using Tara because she feels lonely, and can't connect to anypony but her sister.
The reason why Luna is doing things both good and bad by Tara point of view is because otherwise, Tara evil side won't have any reasons Tara would listen to.
This story does have the alternate universe tag for a reason, plus Luna admitted that she is a bit behind the times, so she may be acting in a way that was acceptable a thousand years ago in Equestria but is not acceptable in modern times.
A) True, she's spending her time on this. Except that making sure first contact goes well is something she should be doing, and the dream work is literally her job!
B) Friend? She's using mind control for no reason!
C) Her apology was a joke to her, and she then said she was going to continue to do the despicable action she didn't apologise for! That's not any sort of apology.
I don't think your view of Luna's actions can be supported by what you've actually written. Luna could have just discussed the good reasons for PT's absence to be secret and ways to accomplish this, such as using a disguise and/or pretending to be PT. Instead she discusses nothing, uses mind control, and then further traumatises her. Despicable.
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C) Her apology was a joke to her, and she then said she was going to continue to do the despicable action she didn't apologise for! That's not any sort of apology.
And thats one of the reasons why Tara doesn't like the situation she is in.
I don't think your view of Luna's actions can be supported by what you've actually written. Luna could have just discussed the good reasons for PT's absence to be secret and ways to accomplish this, such as using a disguise and/or pretending to be PT. Instead she discusses nothing, uses mind control, and then further traumatises her. Despicable.
That's what Celestia would have done. Luna was sealed away for a thousand years, and even back then she was never a social pony, now she is way behind the times, for her, might is right, and the power of a monarch is absolute save when facing another monarch. Luna is dealing with the situation because Celestia doesn't want to, and she is doing it her own way because so far no pony else has show Interest in Tara.
Also, Luna sees herself in Tara, and may be trying to push Tara buttons to see what she does. Is made clear in the story than what Luna is doing isn't something Tara likes, and that that while Luna may justify her actions thinking she is doing the right thing, the way she is doing it is wrong.
And yes, I do plan Celestia to find out about Luna mind controling Tara, this story is an alternate universe, and here the reason Luna was sealed away was more than just ponies not liking her night.
So stop saying this isn't the way Luna would do things because this isn't the same Luna than in the show.
I found something you may want to edit.
That should be "Rainboom".
Well. This is interesting.
The responses I would've made:
L: "I would gladly be your friend and your mentor."
T: "Why not just mind control me into being your friend? Seems to be your thing."
L: "Tara, trust is something you must earn"
T: "Yeah. Trust IS something you must earn. You should try earning someone's trust some day. Someone else's trust. Because Princess? This here? This situation right here? This is you burning down the Trust Bridge and pissing on the ashes."
I look forward to Nightmare Tara taking Luna to school.
4177879 Well, I'm glad you're thinking about it. (Was concerned when your points A-C didn't hold water; some authors don't actually realise that they're writing evil characters.) Here's hoping that Luna gets some justice for this...
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Oh yes, actions have consequences.
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Tara would have been more honest and rude, but as she said, Luna is holding the full deck.
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Luna does. I hope Tera figures out how to cheat her way to victory in this little game Lulu is playing.
And I'm just more of a smart ass than Tera.
Hm, poor Tara got a lot to learn about her new equine form, doesn't she
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I noticed that chapter 3 is in a different tense than chapter 1&2, okay, that's gonna take some editing. Chapter 4 is gonna be delayed since I wanna post it right after I fix chapter 3 so all chapters are in the same tense.
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I just posted Chapter 4 anyway, can fix stuff later.
It's really more of a body control spell than a mind control spell.
god I hate English
I was hoping for more snark. Hopefully Luna screws up badly enough for her to take NMM's offer.
I'd post my "shot through the heart" comment, but it might be considered in poor taste. In other news, I haven't read this long enough to not be sure what the hell Luna did that constituted as mind control. Either way, this'll be an interesting development.
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See Chapter 3 for the mind control.
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Tara is Genre Savvy enough to avoid going to the dark side if she can, she explained why in this same chapter.
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I am not a English native speaker, so please explain to me my mistake.
4606917 To stoop is to lower oneself. To stop is to halt your actions.
In both those cases it should be stopped.
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stooped -> stopped
stooped is when you bend over at the waist to pick something up off the ground.
stopped is when you stop.
stoped isn't anything, and you can't use it. The pp in stopped is mandatory.
there is an obscure grammar rule that says if you see "vowel, consonant, e" then the verb is pronounced the way its letter literally sounds. so "cape" has the literal "a" sound in it, but "cap" has the weird flat "a" sound in it. the "e" at the end changes the sound of the "a".
a less obscure grammar rule is that you add -ed to a verb to make it past tense. Except when you don't. but -ed has an "e" in it! if a verb ends in "vowel, consonant," then adding -ed at the end makes "vowel, consonant, e" which changes the sound of the vowel. -ed isn't supposed to change the sound of the vowel, since it's the same verb, only past tense.
since for those words there's no way to handle adding "-ed" without changing the sound of the vowel, they arbitrarily throw in a double consonant. that way it's "vowel, consonant, consonant, ed" and nobody confuses the "e" in "-ed" for the "e" that changes the vowel sound.
for example, you call Batman "the caped crusader," because of his cape, and pronounce "a" exactly like it's spelled. when you close your soft drink bottle you say "I capped the bottle." You can't spell "capped" as "caped" because "caped" is already taken, and has a different "a" sound. so cap -> capp -> capped. any verb that ends in "vowel, consonant," when you make it past tense you can't just add -ed, but you also have to double the consonant.
the reason for this is people are dumbasses and made English just randomly out of bits and pieces. generations later someone realized "Oh no I can't tell the difference between closing the top of a bottle (cap), and wearing a cape (cape) in past tense! Instead of fixing the language, I'll just patch it temporarily with a new grammar rule." generations later we're treating that temporary patch like it was holy writ.
English is a patchwork language, so there are more patches and hacks to it than there are general rules.
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Being Genre Savvy could actually give her an advantage over the Nightmare, especially given the Nightmare's distinct lack of subtlety and stealth. Indeed, Tara could milk the Nightmare for an actual education and possibly other boons prior to any sort of merger.
And perhaps I'm a pessimist, but I predict more pain in Tara's future. Possibly since Luna is almost certainly going to fuck up again, what with the "Punishment? But, but... she is not even a real pony! She is not one of our subjects!" deal. That kind of thinking takes awhile to change.
Though, given the Slice of Life tag, we might have seen the nadir come and go. Which makes me sad.
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I don't think Tara has enough confidence in herself to trick a bad guy, not at this point in time at least.
And yes, Luna will most likely mess up again, she is not only 1000 years behind culturally, Tara was not born and raised as a pony, so things won't be easy.
Remember, in Tara's world, there is no FriendShip is Magic cartoon. She is not an OC that has watched the show and knows everything, she is a human version of Twilight Sparkle raised on version of Earth very close to our own.
Tara is trying to make the best she can with what she knows, and is reading about the world she is in to learn more . But is gonna take a while until Tara has a clear idea of what the hell is going on.
The only reason the Nightmare is trying to take over Tara is because as an alternate version of Twilight Sparkle, she could easily break everyone hearts and demoralize Equestria,
The good thing is that Tara is not a little kid who can be easily fooled, she is a teenager of Earth that knows better that to trust strange beings offering her power and revenge. Also the fact that Luna was punished and is trying to really make up to Tara helps.
There might be a switch from the Slice of Life, format later in the story, when Tara is allowed to leave the castle and meet Twilight friends.
Oh dear Lord, the Nightmare. Damn bitch...
I don't know how i didn't find this on here. seriously, i read the first two chapters on fanfiction.net, but when i tried to find it here it would never come up with anything. but i saw it mentioned in the feed and whooped, especially when i found two new chapters.
this chapter was interesting, though why tara doesn't tell luna i don't know. plus, it's a worry. i have a feeling it's nightmare's essence, what's left of it, anyway. this could go very badly
definitely some grammar errors here, but i still enjoyed the chapter, none the less.
damn, celestia. i think that's a little bit harsh. then again, after nightmare night and sleepless in ponyville, luna should have known better, i suppose