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ThatBlueScreenGuy


Whether or not you do what you do well, always do it boldly.

T

My day had been so normal.
Now there's a draconequus in my room, and he's talking about protecting all of reality or something.
I'm more concerned about why he had to punch me in the face to start the conversation.
Yeah, I need to sit down and think about this one.

Oh boy! Another HiE story! But you have to admit, you don't see many of this kind.
First attempt at a fic, so criticism is appreciated.
Takes place near the end of season 2

Chapters (18)
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Comments ( 218 )

Huh. Not a bad start. I'd like to see where this goes.:rainbowdetermined2:

Great concept, but you're in dire need of an editor.

I'll admit, it is a little rough around the edges. Couple'a spelling mistakes, use of the wrong homophones, and the like. But it is good.

The way you portrayed Connor as the kind of guy who just took this all in stride, while just a little strange, works with what you've given of his character so far.

The plot looks to be very interesting, if nothing else. While I don't exactly like the 'Human takes up mantle of a god-like being' plot, I have this strange feeling that this will work.

3534989 Yeah, the whole mantle of power thing will be a little OP, but I plan to try and level it out wth a set of rules. Give him a set of laws that he just can't break. Hopefully that will be able to even out the playing field a little.

3536431
The story loves me?
Should I be scared?

OOH YES BANANA PANCAKES!
MOER!

3537339 I'm more of a Blueberry Muffin kind of guy. Never really had Banana Pancakes. Or are you just saying that to be gratuitous?

Hm, the power influences the wielder, huh? That's interesting... *begins scribbling furiously in a notebook*
....Well?
Hm?
You gonna say anything else?
Does a chicken cross a road without being questioned as to why? *continues scribbling*
You're insufferable at times.
I know. It's one of my many talents.

FUCK. YES. You, sir, just might become my new favorite author. I haven't been this eager for a story to update since Kaidan wrote "Shattered Prism". And the fact you use AC/DC is a DEFINITE plus.

3552441 Well, my friend, I love your enthusiasm! I hope you love the rest of the story (the parts that have yet to be written) just as much!

~ThatBlueScreenGuy

3552465 Dang it, I had a joke planned out for this response, but I don't know how to make a 'less-than-or-equal-to' sign on the keyboard.

Comment posted by boothnat deleted Nov 29th, 2013

“How did you guess something like that.”
Should end in a question mark.
“And just how did you get all this information.”
This too

This story is really amazing. Though, the fact that Connor is already experiencing changes to his personality when he's only had Discord's power for less than a day worries me...

he should turn himself into other creatures just to mess with them

3561030
I was hoping for something like this.
They use the elements of harmony on him.(has no effect because he is not THAT evil)
He turns into a potato to screw with them.
They put him in the garden.
:derpytongue2:

3562037 A... potato... I like the idea of having the Element used on him in some way, but a potato? Where in the holy hell did that come from?

If this story were as person I'd hug them so hard

Hmmm, needs more randomness. Chaos is one step away from randomness, what you really need is...

A platypus

randomanous comments - being random since yesterday...

But in all seriousness, this is an epic story. I was disappointed when I got to the end. Update soon please...

3564013 Only because you asked, I'll update in the next two-three days.

Only for you.

Thanks, I really like the story

BTW: How do you get pony emoticons?

3565201 They should be right next to where you write your comment.
At least, that's how it is on PC. I looked on my iPhone, and didn't find them.

Oh, I am using my iPod to go on this site. As my laptop internet is soooooooo slow.

But thanks for trying!

i think you should call the club {club chimara} because as a chimara is a mix of animals the club is a mix of all music types as well tell me what you think.

3570753 Hmm... An interesting idea. I might look into that...

A fine chapter! Keep it up!:eeyup:

Let's see....

1. They Might Be Giants check
2. TryHardNinja check
3. Story is entertaining enough to make me read even when I'm not in a reading mood check
4. Story entertains even when not in said mood check
5. Is the secret to immortality
6. Is actually the Holy Grail in literary form
7. Monty Python
8. Epic Rap Battles of History
9. Cinema Sins
10. Ozzy Osbourne

You're making amazing progress on my "OMG WTF This is the best story ever" checklist.

Anyway, for the club name, how about something like "Harmony and Dizchord". 'Harmony' is actually a musical term in addition to how it's used in-show, and Dizchord is just kind of a cool word that happens to reference both Discord and the fact that the club (chaotically) plays all genres of music.

3571951 It's funny because I can actually do most of those unchecked things...

Thanks, for another awesome chapter!!!

:applejackconfused: Wow... Wasn't expecting you to actually take my suggestion...
Oh, don't be so hard on yourself.
...I wasn't. I was merely stating my surprise that he took my suggestion. :trixieshiftleft: Do you think I have low self-esteem Pit?
No! Of course not!
Good. Because, if anything, I have a superiority complex.

I have a suggestion for future shenanigans! Connor ends up getting his own train, and he drives it across Equestria while playing Ozzy Osbourne's "Crazy Train".

Well, guess that's it for this comm-
BOOM!
What the hell?!
Oh God, oh Christ, oh sweet Mary mother of FUCK!
Red?! What the hell are you doing here?!
Fuck fuck fuck fuck... Sere! Are we safe here?! Is this place barricaded?!
Red, what the hell is going on?!
Sere, it escaped. Not only did it escape, it's fucking replicating!
What escaped?
Jesus Christ in Heaven, it was horrifying. They tore apart 682. THEY TORE APART 682! HOW DO YOU DO THAT TO THE UNKILLABLE LIZARD?!
...Mother of God. I'm sorry, BSG, but I gotta go take care of this. I thought I'd edited their genes so they could never reproduce... C'mon Red! If we're lucky, then enough of the reptile's spine will be left over that it can regenerate!

3585773 Yeah, no problem. The suggested name was better than anything I could have come up with...

The Crazy Train idea is noted, though mentioning an unkillable lizard gives me ideas... So many ideas...

3585815 Well, he's not really unkillable, it's just that his body adapts very quickly to resist or counter pretty much anything.

Yay, an update, and the plot thickens...

The time travelly stuff was good. Sounds like something I'd say when I'm in an ultra-hyperactive mood...

3587613 Yeah, I had to spend the few days prior thinking of ways that I could make my explanation of time different than the norm. Those were good times.

So let me get this straight.... guardians were created to stop baddies who were created to destroy everything...

Only a Supreme Troll God would create entities to destroy everything just so they could then create a slew of other gods to protect everything.

Oh... that's right. I did do that, didn't I? Well, seemed like a good idea at the time. :trollestia::trollestia::trollestia::trollestia::trollestia::trollestia::trollestia::trollestia:

Assassin's Creed freerunning? Hell yes! This story, in all honesty, just keeps getting better and better!

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