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Celestia uncovers a small journal entry about the tree and the person who helped it grow. While it does not contain much information, it helps Twilight understand her self a little bit better, as well as her destiny.
A/N: If you haven't seen S4 yet, then don't read this right away.
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Now that is rather epic, I must say. What baffles me, is that right after S4E1-2, people in this fandom just LAUNCHED themselves forward with their inspiration... heh, looks like I'm not only watching the show for fun, anymore... but for similar inspiration...
Nevertheless, what you did here is a REALLY potential theory of what happened in Equestria's past. I quite enjoyed it!
First one-shot? Need criticism? My apologize, but I cannot give you any at the moment. And anyways, I have no complaints to be honest, so I don't think listing what I liked in this short story is important. It was great overall!
Have a wonderful day!
~Adam
Feels like an artificial divide between pegasi and...other ponies? Earth ponies? And so, where are the unicorns listed?
If anything, I would have went with
Which would have had the same effect.
Hope this helps.
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I replaced that line with yours and found it to be more easy to read and like you said, doesn't divide the citizens. Thanks for the help!
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You spoil me, Adam 
but tanks, man! I already received a PM about making another one-shot or a continuation of this. As of now, I', just gonna see where it goes. 
It's epic?
Why do I get the feeling you copied the title after Linkin Park's Hybrid Theory album...
Remember One Step Closer *hint-hint*
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I didn't intend for that at all! 
Now that I think about it, I think it sort of fits well with the story.
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Yeah, I think it should.
Maybe you should put it in the chapter and see what the buzz and reaction you'll get for it.
I'm a little sorry, but I couldn't help it.
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No problem, I'm glad you at least checked out my story. 
3535968 No spoiling, I'm merely expressing earnestly myself. It was good, believe me. And good luck with your future products!
This is an interesting setup for a story, and as a backstory fan I appreciated that. On the downside, it's very slow to get going, and the verse doesn't scan well. So mixed feelings: a good idea, but one that could do with a little polishing.