Trixie Lulamoon had always dreamed and devoted her life to fame and fortune, following in her mothers foot steps. Having dropped out of school and run from a promising career in medicine for show-biz, things where looking grim. Alone, homeless and broke, she comes up with a risky idea. Using a simple forbidden ritual, she makes a crossroads deal. To bad she didn't listen to the cost. It's ten years later, her time is up and the hell hounds are on her trail. Now she must only rely on the help of a stranger known only as Siren to save her life.
Chapters (1)
You need more paragraphs. You also need to either indent them or put space between them. Nobody likes to read a wall of text.
Overall, the story seems interesting, if a bit short. I also happen to be a Supernatural fan, so there's that.
You could have benefitted from writing this with a program that has spellcheck and then pasting into the chapter.
Also: the mare put a hand on her hip
*sees anthro tag* Oh. Hmm. Still came as a surprise.
Overall, not too bad for a first story. Keep writing. You'll get better with practice.
3621678 Thank you I was really nervous about posting this, so thank you for the advice!
I really like the premise of this story, it is original and intriguing.
All to many times I see the same carbon copy of the exact same premise, uniqueness is difficult, keep up the good work. 
Thank You!
I'm working on making chapter 2 much longer than this one, but I've been having some difficulty. It should be up eventually