Princess Celestia has kept more secrets than any other pony and from those around her, even from her faithful student. Some of them kept for personal reasons, and others, for the greater good. Some small, and others… well you get the idea.
One secret, though, a human whom Celestia brought to Equestria, has suddenly appeared. And right on the doorstep of the Crystal Empire, where a newly crowned Princess Twilight Sparkle is resting.
Just what is this human after and what of Celestia’s secrets does he know? More importantly, how will this affect Twilight and her friends?
Disclaimer: I don't own MLP: FIM. It belongs to Hasbro and Lauren Faust, not me!
Chapters (4)
I promised I would read your Story and so I will do. (first)
Ok. that was a unexpected start for the first Chapter.
But I must say the follow thing:
Definitively worth to continue to write (for you) and read (for me).
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Just going to say that i'm tracking this.
you might need to edit your description, because the way it reads on the front page I thought a human version of Celestia had shown up when I clicked the link
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Alright, done! Thanks for that.
more please
more
IMO, this chapter revealed a bit too little. I don't see a real attention hook anywhere.
3995504 How did it reveal to much exactly?
3996209 It didn't. I said it revealed too LITTLE.
3996223 Alright, I get what you're saying but it's only chapter 1. There are still more chapters I'm going to write (if I get to them at all that is)and you'll see more.
-W.S.
Shining seems like a bit too much of a penis, but he does in about 80% of HiE's so don't worry about it.
3996296 TOO MUCH CLIFF HANGER other than that it was fine and when I say fine I mean awesome
Well, you came back after all this time. That's a cool start.
I'll be waiting to see if this is more than just Armor being an overprotective big brother.
Yeah, this is a nice chapter but it doesn't really tell us anything, and that's fine since it's quite short but if it will be months/years before we get the next chapter then maybe it would be better to release a few chapters together as something more substantive. Don't want to seem like I'm bashing on you or the story, I want to see how it develops. Anyway best of luck, hope you keep it up.
The premise sounds familiar. Is this based off of another story?
7018755 No, I don't think so.
7018686 You're right about that, but I have so many other stories in and outside of MLP that I often switch on which on I'm writing. That and also I've been juggling between fics and real life for the past few years now. Still, I'll try to be more consistent and not do just one chapter every few or so years .
7018523 Yeah, I'm trying to see if I could do that.
-W.S.
Godspeed, brother. Best of luck in any future endeavors.
7467592 Same from me.