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The Anthro tag refers specifically to humanized characters.
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Anthro tag refers to anthropomorphed characters, NOT humanized. Human tag is for humanized characters.
Author, you get right to your point with that title don't you?
I did some editing on this story ^_^
Mercury approved!
3517368 Well, do I feel silly now. Thank you for the clarification.
After reading: for its title and description, this fic was surprisingly well-developed. Your characterization of Applejack, how she indulged her curiosity but kept true to herself, was really unexpected: a nice surprise for these sort of (usually) shameless, character-less fics.
I felt that everything here was entirely believable when it came to character interactions. Curiosity is a major theme here, played out even in the end. The way you addressed it and quashed it, while disappointing to readers who expected what I thought would happen, was skillful to say the least. A story about understanding yourself, testing waters and discovering your limits.
Author, you disguised something very well written as something stupid by that title. Rarely do I ever compliment fics (even popular beloved stories tend to get shredded in my comments much to fanboy's chagrin) but this one is definitely a diamond in a quartz mine. The good here, development and execution, outweighs the bad, forced events and lack of proof reading.
All in all, did not expect this. Pleasantly surprised, Author.
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As I understand it, Anthro means "human...ish." It's in the murky depths of Anthro that we see EQG with its impossible skin colours, or humanesque characters with horns, hooves, or wings.
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Oh, but proofreading there was! And rewriting, then proofing again and other proofers too 
'Forced events'? Yeah, okay I can see that, but I'd be enlightened for a bit more stuff on this point.
Lack of proofreading?
Truly, I write subtle, vicious little errors.
Otherwise, glad you liked the development. Suppose the story is something of a bait and switch, but I shan't regret doing it.
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The way I would define a forced progression is if it feels as though the author is deciding what happens next, rather than the characters. My bar for that criteria is very high. Few stories satisfy me. I tend to get nitpicky about realistic reactions from the characters.
Although I think this story is interesting in that it presents a side of human nature you rarely see in fiction. Practical, rational, composed, sensible people. Too often, characters will have 'hair triggers' and have little explosions of emotions. That certainly makes them active and interesting, which is really what separates stories from boring real life. You could easily ruin a story by making your characters behave rationally, but it's fun sometimes to see it flipped on its head. Rather than having explosive characters situated in a mundane and relatable environment, this story has mundane and relatable characters in an explosive situation.
Although right at the end, there is an exception to this. The "climax" of the story, if you will, where one of the characters switches into the role of a typical clop story character. I actually found that fun. it reminded me of what the entire story could have been, if it was typical clop. It was a good contrast.
So how long until Applejack gets a hard cock inside her?
Please?
I don't think I'm terribly good at critical analysis of anyone's stories, but I can tell you how I feel: I was very pleasantly surprised by this story, and enjoyed it as I do any well-crafted, cleverly-written story. It was sexy, intriguing, fun and funny, the language and discourse was clever and felt real, and some of the images you created were downright hilarious! Overall, I thought the sense of exploration, expectation, and... illumination? were all handled extremely well.
The obvious bait and switch was actually also a pleasant surprise. I admit that I was a little disappointed in the obvious sense of the path your characters chose, yet you really made up for that with everything else.
Not to be confused with criticism, here are a few small, nearly inconsequential distractions I found. If you decide to correct them, I'll go ahead and erase this part:
Hee hee. Cadence is horny.
Lul.
Dam Cady you got to chill your tits there. Oh wait you kind of just did.
I know getting the short and curlys caught in the zipper hurts for a guy, I could not even think of how it feels for a woman
3517347 No, it refers to Anthro characters. Big difference.
I would've loved to be in apple jacks position especially with a horny cadence
gosh those apples look pretty ♥_♥.....
I really liked this story. It's sexy, and it's true to itself - Applejack is pretty sure she's straight, and it turns out she's right. I'd started thinking of possible sequels where Shining Armor shows up to visit, but the end of the story turns away from that nicely.
I love the whole story, but
made me laugh.
Well, now I wanna see a multi-chapter AppleDance fic.