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Winners eat sand


This is the story of a lost soul, endlessly doing what she does best. She has faced many hardships, many dark times, but that's behind her, this is the now, and right now there is fixing to be done. There is harmony in the worlds, in all of the worlds, but when the tune is mangled it needs to be fixed. Told from the perspective of the one's in pain, she helps them deal with the tragedy that happened exactly a year ago. The tragedy is not the same for all of the victims, but the victims are connected, they all have similar, but very different problems; yet the help is all the same.

Chapters (8)
Comments ( 22 )

wow, not one comment, not sure if this is good. it could mean that either its not bad enough to be dissed on, or its not good enough to be praised, actually thats probably exactly it. its somewhere in the middle right? yeah, go mediocrity!:yay:

Well, English is not my first language, so I'm don't dare say anything about writing skill :eeyup:
But absolutely adore:raritystarry: the concept and such a great OC.

thank you! but the writing skill isn't great, but i plan on fixing that, in a totally weird and original way, if you saw my blog post, i had an idea, which i should probably expand upon once i put the idea into motion. i am so excited about my idea, i hope it works and isn't too confusing!

Oh, dang that was really good. Like ridiculously good. You should consider putting this in more groups so that it can more easily be heard about, because this is ridiculously good.

This was really good. I'm very impressed to be honest. Question, do you by any chance have an editor? There are very few mistakes, but there are a couple here and there that I noticed.

First off, thank you. I made lot more than a few mistakes though, like the new character speaking new paragraph rule, and Ihavent expanded upon my character that much yet, but by the end i hope to have the true fullness of her be seen. And sadly, no, I have no editor.:twilightsheepish:

I dont know whatgroups id put this in. But if you want suggest some I might look into that.

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I'm so sorry I didn't reply sooner, my notifications never informed me. Anyway if you would like an editor I'd be happy to help as I must say this is a very brilliant story. In regards to groups, there are only a few I can think of such as the 'Sad' group and perhaps 'The Writers Group' as well, perhaps a few more. If you'd like, I can add you stories to those groups in the right folders since I'm already a part of those groups. :twilightsmile:

Also, in regards to this chapter, wow, wow, that was good, just ridiculously good (yeah took me a while to read, forgive me! :fluttershbad: ) Also, I think I know what you're doing here in terms of the story as an overall plot, and I must say it's brilliant. Kudos. :yay:

Thank you, even if it is against the correct form in the guide, I like this form a lot. I do like how the story is going, but it will take while to actually finish. Cause im doing those other stories as interlude sequel thing.

Also I'll think about editors and pre-readers and stuff, ill let you know on what I decide!

So did you want me to add it to those groups? Also, personally I like this style of writing.

Sounds good. I'm usually available most days for editing if I'm needed.

Um, no, not yet. I need some time to think

Sorry it took me so long to getting around to reading this. I forget sometimes how much I love this story. It's really beautiful and heartwarming, despite the initial dreariness. :pinkiesmile: I only noticed a few mistakes here and there in terms of grammar and spelling, if you'd like I could help you proofread your chapters before you post them. Anyway, great chapter as always, I look forward to reading more! :twilightsmile:

Thanks. I know I can be a bit stubborn, and I would just do it myself, but it takes so long for me to actually get time to write it that it would take lonfer to proofread it. I dont really like relying on others a lot, i would rather facing things alone. But some thinkjng has shown me some things. Someone Like me, with a personality like mine needs other people to help them. I'd rather not become some tragic tale of mistake and heartbreak.
I guess what im trying to say is, I would love some help. I really need to learn how to not be really dramatic about things. Even if it does mean more to me, im just accepting help. I gotta always look for that deeper meaning in things, obscure details that show a persons true nature. And here I am rambling here...:facehoof:

It's perfectly fine, I have a friend who's a lot like that as well. I'd be more than happy to help you with editing. :pinkiesmile: I'll PM you.

Ok, im actually working on the next chapter right now.

That was a very nice ending! :twilightsmile: I look forward to see any possible sequel if you do choose to make one. While it was a bit confusing at times, overall the plot was complex and fairly original; things which always make for an excellent read. I wish you the best of luck in all of your future writing endeavors!

I do have a sequel planned, I'm just not sure when it'll happen. I have a bunch of other stories I'm working on and I don't want to overwhelm myself.

Take your time, you don't want to rush something great like this. In the meantime, I'll probably go ahead and check out some of your other stories.

This was pretty good for a first story. The biggest problem i found is that you dont go to a new paragraph each time the speaker in a conversation changes. Also a small note, the word y'all is plural not singular, it is used to address a group of people as its a conjuction of "you" and "all".

Yeah, I've since figured out proper format, and grammar. But thank you anyways, it's nice to know people are willing to help.

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