Rainbow Dash has everything, five awesome friends and a job as a Wonderbolt. When she meets a pale blue stallion she starts to have doubts about whether she has everything.
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Well, I'm not going to lie, your grammar is pretty bad.
However, I don't think the story was bad.
It had bad grammar and it was a bit rushed at times, but if you find a good editor he/she could help you with that.
I am liking this story so far, but I encountered quite a few errors in the story. They're mostly just minor spelling errors, and grammar mistakes, but I got past them, over all, so far so good.
I'll motion with this, the fic lacks that little bit to make it perfect, I would suggest going to an editing group - e.g looking for editors group and seeing what you can come up with, this is a nice cute romance Fic and I think a lot of editors would lend a helping hoof to this
anyways liking the fic so far as I do with every wonderbolt fic nice job
~Alex~Shadowblades
Great job on your first fanfic!! This story is a bit rushed, don't ya think?
3511204 thanks. So so sorry about the mistakes. Hope everything else was well.
Can you write more please? I have a question, are you a female or a male?
3637874 Of course I can write more, hope you liked it. I am also female. :)
3640433 I didn't like it, I loved it!! You are so awesome
!!
Moar!!!
Love the story so far
I can see a few mistakes but I figured out what they were ment to say so it was cool
3511204 I found the mistakes aswell
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By the way I like your name (though with my culture we are meant to hate the name but what he did was terrible but great though
More peweese
