'Sometimes, the safest place you have to go to in order find those that understand you, is home.'
When Twilight calls it a day and heads off to bed, Luna appears uninvited in her room and requests the mare tell her a bedtime story. Deciding it would at least not be much harm, she comes up with a story of her own and shortly gives the princess of the night a relaxing story.
(Not much of a big summary, but the story will promise you at least something warm and nice. Not a sequel to my story Life, which I myself got confused in nearly mixing this up. Anyway, I hope you enjoy the story and have a relaxing year. By the way, like many images, I borrowed this from Google Images. I do not own it in any other way.)
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I like the idea. Luna asking for a bedtime story.
It's a nice story. But I feel like it could easily be improved by giving more reaction to Luna (to not just read a story, but be able to identify with one of the characters).
On the other hand, I don't know if it was a good thing or not to make the story be that direct of a reference.
I think that this sentence is too much there, because Twilight represents the narrator (having narrated 80% of the story). therefore, as a reader, I felt you were telling me (well, the narrator was telling me) that it was an analogy. Which is obvious as can be:
At that point, there is no doubt possible.
The story was nice, and the interpretation of Luna's banishment is a very cute touch. I think it's the part I appreciated the most in Twilight's story.
3505801 Oh trust me, this story literally was actually one of the first short stories in my life to have me struggling in finding ways to make it good. I eventually gave up and started listening to Sigur Ros Valtari and began working on it again. I decided to rewrite it and go with the flow of music and my heart.
Thank you for your pointed critique, it is greatly appreciated.
3505606>>3505554 I am glad you liked it. Thank you very much.
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I trust you, it's not an easy story to tell.
You're welcome.
ps: how did I not see that the first time?
Yay for french.