I write to write, and will try to help those that are having life troubles. My IRL friends labeled me the male Princess Luna because of my night owl status. I am King Artermis of the Moon.
Osiris finds an injured filly Fluttershy on his way home from his military college. He takes her to his home and fixes her up, and decides that it would be better for her to stay with him while she grows into a mare, but in this twist on the "My Little Dashie" fan fiction, Osiris, doesn't have any clue what Mlp is until he takes Fluttershy home.
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This is going to be a great story god ive read too many fanfics lol
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There is no such thing as too many fan fics my fair reader.
3495726 true enough so good luck on your writing and know i will be reading it lol
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Keep it up!
heavy always gets hungry after hes impressed so i will say dis...*nom*
WHERE DA NEXT CHAPTER????
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To answer your question, yes that Osiris.
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In the works good readah
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Thanks for being the first to notice.
Nice story Celestia no matter what story.you put here in is an ass lol
Now, if any of you who wish to give me critisism, please say so before you rant on me or face the previous conciquenses.
its wonderful. I enjoyed the original MLD and I like this twist you've put on it with Flutters. but it seems a bit rushed. you progress through the scenes to fast. the problem is solved almost as soon as it comes up. I understand there may not be much that happens in a scene physically, but you should still beef it up with details emotionally. Don't be afraid to ramble a bit on how the character feels, it's what makes the story so meaningful. Consider the five senses. vision's blurry from tears, can't smell from congestion due to crying, sounds of twigs snapping as "you" run through the forest, stuff like that. You have a great idea but it feels more like this is just the skeleton of the story. Give more details to make it more interesting, otherwise it's too dry.
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Thanks for the imput my friend. I will work on that, as the last chapter, will be the longest. Muhahahahahahaaaa.
its a bit rushed yes but apart from that pretty good
NOW THOU SHALL GRANT US THY NEXT CHAPTER, I THINK THEE WON'T DISSAPOINT
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Watch thy tone of voice subject or face the wrath of the most powerful alicorn to be unascended!
All joking aside I am still in the process of writing the last chapter good reader.
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I can't give you a accurate answer but a plethora of them since MLD was such a masterpiece as it still is. It is inevitable.
sorry not tryin 2 be a spoiler
3522282 GREAT NOW I'LL PROCEED TO READ THEE OTHER FICS I HAVE FAREWELL GOOD WRITER
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It'a alright, for it is fairly predictable.
Very nice chapter you are doing a very good job so far i await further chapters
It's not better than My Little Dashie, no way. But it's still pretty good. I'll give it a 6 out of ten or maybe a 7... Depends if there's a next chapter. This is my opinion, so ... Yeah...
I mean....if you can
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, I guess the next one is.
Yes there is a next chapter, though I did say this was the last
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3600109 Yummy
3600123 how do I update my story?
Will anypony tell me HOW TO UPDATE MY FRIEKING STORY?!?!??!
Adding chapters is how you update
wow amazing well done to you
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, but I still need to redo some of it, but that will wait until I can get my other mane stories finished.
Thank you for saying so
3973957 Sorry for being so late to reply, but to update your story you simply add another chapter, but if you mean submit your story, then please go to the faq tab on the home bar, as that will answer most of your questions.