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yw also since im confused who is the main char getting with, if anypony? pm me if you dnot want to reveal it to everyone else dont have to if you dont want to, im just curious...another annoyance from my condition SWEET UNKNOWING FIRST!!!
FUCK ALL THE CAMERA'S
Miles is all like no flash photograhpy baby!
449585 Main is Miles. I switch perspectives to show different events happening that Miles would usually not see.
as in who is miles gonna be getting lovey dovey with, cant blame you since i am slightly hard to understand like pinkie pie
449606 OH That I will allow the story to tell
nvm i just read the next chapter, i have an idea who it is now
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I got 50 on Luna.
449673 same here, though i have to wonder if he has other ideas, looking back on miles's past and who he's met...
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Pah, Luna's cuter than anyone in his past!(Insert Luna emote here)
449707 lol, im beginning to think of celestia, maybe luna is just a cover before the real relationship is revealed?
449721 Oh the things to come forth... I cant wait
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I'd likely be very disappointed if that were the case.
Unless Celestia doesn't realize who Miles really is....and has a resurgence of emotion when she finds out...
Dun dun duh!!!
Can't wait for the next chapter. Two in one day again. You sir are a machine.
Wow two chapters in a day dam.
AGH! Leave my Luna alone! She's my OC's!!! LOL!
450106 Let's just have them fight it out to see who get's her then
449880 hey its a story, im making one right now, and im involving my favourite mare Twilight but ill also throw in some other romances just for the lol's
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Twould be an interesting fight, although in my story she's already agreed to marry him. Fight over, his cause is invalid... Lol, jking.
450823 Damn... I can't one up you without giving stuff away.... oh well
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You could PM me? Lol, I keep mouth zipped nice and tight?
I like this so far. Keep up the good work.
451222 i am now interested... MUST KNOW RELATIONSHIP!!! (miles only) PM please also i have 50 internets on luna.
*smacks lips for awhile* so why does this one have a light and this one doesnt?
449673 I'll see you 50 and raise you ten
449586 LIKE A BAWS
and no one knows what happened to the cat
Miles might have a mild case of DUMB. Just heal him, for the love of something.
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449721 its all a conspiracy, man! The writer holds back the truth, man!
771979 I feel like I should know that reference...
Now then, onward my trusty steed! Too the next chapter!!!!
If he could just turn the body to ash why did he even bother fucking around and fighting the minotaur with his sword?
Why does did he even fuck around when he was fighting in the war in the first few chapters? He was able to blow hydras to chunks easily enough.
Seems like you are just making him fight things the hard way to not seem overpowered and to add a challenge, but then at the same time it is conflicting because he doesn't fight with his full power, which is stupid.
3280075but doesn't it hurt him by going full power???
3280075. Wow have you even been reading the story at all? Or just skimming through it. He loses his soul when he uses too much magic on unknown things. Hydras are unknown to him, his enemy the unknown, was probably unknown, and he probably doesn't know much about those half bull half human hybrids... however you spell it lol. Anyways I believe him using less magic in fighting unknown beings relates to the story perfectly. I would agree with you but you are overlooking the facts.
2853889. I shall follow you into an other dimension as well. TO THE NEXT CHAPTER! Yes this is book is real life in a different dimension... I REFUSE IT TO BE IMAGINATION! With that said I'm going to plan my welcome party with pinkie.
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Not only that, but apparently his people haven't attacked in a long time. They stay to the defensive. It would make sense for an elite soldier of any nation to use as little force as possible to win, even more so from a nation that primarily stays defensive.
"Deverto pulvis et salutant mortuus" means "turn to dust and salute the dead." And Luna should know Latin. You know, Vivas Noctis and all...
5280580 Indeed.
Where the fuck is this coming from? He could hardly even say he knows her. He lost it last time, is he so stupid he would forget so soon?
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That is beyond ridiculous, she's a bit over 3000 years old, she's acting like she's in 5th grade. She should just use a sleeping spell and take a cold shower. I don't mind ships, of any kind, as long as smart effort is put into it, but this? I might either tap out soon or realize this story was never meant to be taken seriously. You can use your imagination for a lot of things, but some things take experience to flesh out. Not saying you haven't been in a relationship, but it doesn't feel like it.
And for someone who's supposed to be militaristic, and a second time envoy for humans, the military information here seems like the combination of games and a few misleading wiki searches while his behavior for someone as important as himself and who's for all intents and purposes run the gauntlet leaves much to be desired.
You are really scraping for pity points for Miles. The mane 6 alignment with his original group of friends was cringe worthy at best and his 'tragic past' doing nothing to his character besides apparently drafting him at 8, giving him both something to tell people so they apparently feel sorry for him, and something to potentially be depressed about.
And while everything he knew might be gone, the knowledge, while pointing towards his people's extinction, is inconclusive and the first thing he should do, as a human missing his people and a soldier who cares, should be to try to regroup while garnering as little attention to himself as possible. And it is well within his abilities. You're not there for friends, even if he did get drafted, as misleading as it's been thus far in story. Country first and foremost, Good to make friends, good to have friends, look after them well, but if they have each and every one of your family and friends and make you choose between them and your homelands, well you can kill yourself later.
He holds back in his fights, but as he was attempting to hide his… powers, alright I see it, but that doesn't explain why his sword didn't have as many enchantments as possible, they were fighting for survival, why would you ever hold back unless it was a lead up to something more effective?
Edit: Apparently his sword does have enchantments, although, given how he burnt the body, he could've sniped him while remaining anonymous. Sigh. He needs imagination.
Which leads to me noticing him apparently not having earth shattering powers when the flood killing his and him came to attack, what the hell? Still has his power reduction arm bands on too, and given what we know know, how was this guy not trained to take point at full capacity asap? It might've been dangerous to have that, but there could have been an emergency protocol where he may remove them and give an after action report, because it seems they trusted him enough to believe it.
Not to forget the plethora of typos called on that have gone unchecked.
But the worst of them would have to be "Oorah/Ooh Rah" as it's spelling is constantly changed, and yet I don't believe ever correct, as well as actually being a term of significance to some. But honestly, if this legitimately hurts anyone further than a mite bit of annoyance, they're way too sensitive and shouldn't have been able to get that attached anyway.
Also Luna is just… lacking. She shouldn't feel anything for him so far as he's done nothing but grope her, whether or not on purpose. At the very least she should know to keep a wary distance from him and given his power test results some magic reducers on him, if he's under arrest. Which is another point, is he under arrest? They shouldn't even be able to keep such an eye on him as he has done nothing that would have been avoided if he were justly released. Of course he's dangerous, everyone is, monstrously so of course in this case, but all the more incentive to meet on good terms with him. That doesn't mean they go big brother systems on him, but on the flip they shouldn't roll over and welcome the oppressive rule of humanity, at least not these people. Just be as well prepared as they can be. He's done nothing but over powered good.
Again also, the dramatically convenient, inexplicably hostile, out of nowhere, instant bad guy, minotaur is only there it seems to speed along their nigh instantaneous friendship, also I'm guessing to blow his magic's cover.
Luna should know Latin given her parents' names, and the horribly obvious avoidance of using Celestia's name is… well it's obvious. I get it it's for dramatic purposes , but realistically, as realistic as one can hope in this instance, someone would have dropped her name to him by now, top of the list being Twilight.
There are other things, big and small, but eh.
All in all, seems like a long af and highly backed self insert where the op mc comes off as a regular, if not more emotional, guy with godly amounts of power with an alien yet so soon attractive body and personality that no woman is safe from. I'll happily call it first fic mistakes, if only to hope it gets better. I've looked over worse I suppose.
Edit: Nope, too much
But I'd be lying if I said I didn't need something to read, won't bitch on it anymore, until I get up to speed at least, (unless there are glaring offenses) need to get a clearer view of things here and I want something this extensive to be good, to me of course, 2000+ people would say it's already good/fantastic/awesome and what have you.
Another of the few that I'll down vote yet read. Oh well.
Edit: Fuck it, I'm out
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It's like one of those cheesy B-Team horror movies. Sure, its got a lot of glaring problems and could have been polished more, but it has a charm to it.
That or I don't know what the fuck I'm saying.
so he essentially E.M.P. bombed the paparazzi
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why u so bad awesome fic?
luna x miles is obvious. obviousness is obvious. but he just fecking destroyed their cameras and murdered gary. I'm sorry i cant take you seriously. FUCKING GARY!
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the minotaur is called GARY!
7367298 I don't think he destroyed them just drained their batteries
7564429 yeah, those things are powered by crystals and magic.
Seriously, batteries would be far more inconvenient.
But we have graphene that can power electric cars now, so I doubt small time batteries will be a long-time issue soon.
Look... it said, "kill and rape ONE" subject. Then it says it was going to Kill storm AND rape twilight. Are they both the same subject or is one of them not a subject of the princess?
Not that it's wrong or anything I just found it funny how it says one subject yet it was both of them.
Да неужели? Майлз наверно и сам не рад что он может так много! Что собственно не просит от читателя переживать за него. Однако мне все же интересно что будет дальше!