Thank Lauren Faust I was going into withdrawal.

This story almost has more words in it then all of the Harry potter books combined and that 1,084,170 words

DAMN THATS ALOT OF CHAPTERS. Note to self Read all chapters.

ITS ALIVE!!! BWAHAHAHHAHAAA ALIVE! ALIVE I SAY, ALIVE!

yay

ah... good o'le fashion riots.

Jesus- last time I was reading this story, it was 850k words.

Some day I will finish reading this so I can actually express my thoughts on it properly.
They will not be kind words.

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Out of pure, innocent, non subjective, blind, curiosity, what is your honest opinion of the story?

I'm just gonna sit back get high and read

Jesus Christ on a pogostick, it took 207 Chapters for this to get featured?!
Now this I've got to see.

Nearly snapped my neck when I did a double take upon seeing this in my favorites. Thank God it's still kicking,

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Annoyed.
Due to its age and popularity, it probably helped make a lot of the tropes of HiE we have today, but they were still known even back then.
Anyways, the writing quality of the first 400k+ words of the story is less than... good... Lots of wonky everything, so-so style and rather lacking on grammar.

The plot is an interesting take on the HiE Story MK-1 MOD 0, and the author does play a lot of the more ball-stomping grievances of the story in a good way. However, they're still there and they're still pretty big plot points.

I do find the backstories interesting, and the cities, their government(s) and their technology to be some of the best parts of the story. That being said, there is a good bit of OOC, but at times it has good reasons, like the whole Celestia ordeal. The romance is forced IMO and the whole thing with Luna is a big part of the plot, but it still feels ridiculous and it's played with a straight face.

Out of everything, I don't like Miles at all, but Storm is actually a decent character.
After the first few stacks of books that this makes up, it stopped being very enjoyable. The plot can be OCD exept for a few overreaching points and it forgets what it's doing and switches to romance mode right after something important happens, forgetting the whole "possible end of the world" thing.

And on a personal preference, the clop scenes were gratuitous, far too close together and in far more quantity than they deserved to be.

And a lot of other things, but I haven't eaten today and dinner is calling.

Edit: Sweet baby James, the punctuation is painful and the phonetic accents are overdone and just shy of offensive.

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Hmm, no offence but it's quite the sight to see a semi intelligent opinion about this story, especially when it's a negative one. Most reviews I see are 'OMG DIS ES DEH BEST SORAH EVAH!'.

I have similar opinions, except I have an ungodly retarded reason for reading the story. Finding out what makes it so appealing, because I can't fucking figure out why it is that when I go on /mlp/, it considered one of the more popular stories.

Back on the critique, as I stated, we share similar opinions, except I take more issue with the Mane six, and the whole cringe aspect of the story, and by cringe I mean how badly the romance is written, and how the author shows a 'call of duty'-esk level of knowledge when it comes to the military, tactical strategy, firearms, and weapons.

On the other side, the way the Mane six act in the story, make me nauseous. What were once proud, and strong female characters, had been transformed into cookie cutter damsels in distress, almost. This applies to Luna, and Celestia. The two most powerful beings in the world, and yet Luna's been captured how many times, has been raped, and falls flat as a character, while Celestia can't seem to do anything rational, or can't use her powers without having to resort to calling upon Miles. And pretty much every Mare in the story, light as a feather, flat as a board.

And for some reason, Big Mac is a Chekhov's gun, that's been hanging on the wall for so long, that I'm beginning to question if it fires anymore, or is even loaded.

And responding to the personal note: Eh, no, god no.

tallestbrony grats on getting featured!

i wish you the best of luck in the future!
greetings sixkiller5

I get annoyed at the people complaining and causing extreme disquiet, because I know if I try and say anyting it will be totally the wrong thing, and the only thing to do then is vapourise everything and start all over again.

4182928 in comparison diaries of a madman IS longer at 1,545,643 words....

Good to see that you can still make content for the story, sorry to hear about you loosing alot of stuff though.

I really like the portrail of Miles, Storm and most of the other OC's, though I have to admit some of the canon pones seem abit OOC, I doubt I can make it better though and in all honesty I only notice it when I look back and reflect on the story, While I'm reading it I've been to captured by your imagining of Equestria and the other nations to find flaws in them.

I hope we will soon get back to abit more of the action we saw befor Miles' change however chapters like this last one is good and all but in a prolonged state they feel abit to slow pased, but I assume there is a point for them to be like that, can't wait for the next chapter keep up the good work

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Actually, I can really understand what you mean. I have no idea what's so popular about this story besides the fact that it's so fucking long. I really think that's the only good selling point. It's what got me to read any of it, I wanted to see if there was a reason why this story deserved to be taken so far.

I can see what you mean about the Mane Six, since this story kinda just took the Elements of Harmony and said, "you know what would be awesome? If the supah powerful OC made them and then took them back, because fuck you."
Of course, it didn't stop there, it went on to turn them into housewives or only existing for the sake of love interests or jokes for the OCs.

This story also seems lack any understanding on how introduce new legitimate characters for the story, and shoves existing OCs in place of them.

As for the whole Luna thing, it was wall-to-wall bullshit. She has been shown to be a determined, powerful character, the goddess of nightmares to many, and made her another weak plot device. Mostly just so the awesome McBadass can put devices into her plot.

That brings me to what I've just read- there were like, six clop scenes of different couples in the span of two chapters!
At that point, why isn't there just a side story thing to keep the hundreds of thousands of words of animal sex in? Does it really matter that much to the story? No. No it doesn't.

And yeah, the fight scenes are either plainly stupid or belong in a bad anime.

And after reading some more to have it fresh on mind, the grammar is really, really unpleasant. There are so many missing words, misspellings and wrong word choices like "know" vs "now". That doesn't even touch at the absolute convenience and improbable coincidences everywhere. Hell, Trixie is a relative of his friends? I don't even want to know how the rest of that works out, 'cause the stupidity of it hurts my brain.

I don't really know anything about Mac's later role, so I can't speak to it, which is why I wanted to finish reading the story before really getting into the meat of a review.
Give me a few years...

I might find this a little more bearable if the Mane Six and the princesses were in character.
Twilight turning invisible to sexually tease her stallion in an elevator next to a mother and child? Yeah, get out.

Honestly, I think this could have been a fucking awesome fic. If Awesome McCoolguy was a reasonable, balanced and interesting character, I could get behind a lot of the world building and side characters a lot more... And if it was properly edited, put into a sensible, acceptable style and maybe formatted into a proper POV...

...And if all the clop was just shoved aside. I'm fine with sex in stories, even some of the best books I've read had it, but don't put porn into a serious narrative.

Yay. Story's back now all we need is more from Miles's perspective

I would've never have pegged Rainbow Dash as a good mother. She's really grown into the role tho.
Have a stache

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I have to agree. The only thing I can really enjoy about the story, is the background/subplot with the downfall of humanity, but as of where I am, around chapter 130ish, it's becoming more and more irking. First Miles created the elements, fine, that's okay with me, it was his magnum opus, and what not. Destroying them, and using his uber supper powers which in no fucking way, are inconvenient for him, besides the bi yearly Deux Ex event where he gets more powerful, and acting like a total bad ass because fuck you, he just roles like that, had me slamming my head against my desk.

Even the Latin spirit thing, which I actually found kind of interesting at first, just annoys me because it's used as another way of making Luna and Miles seem more special, and emo, because 'NOBODY BUT US UNDERSTANDS THE PAIN WE'RE GOING THROUGH!' aspect. But nope, everything get's cliched as fuck, crawling in my skin starts blaring over the speakers, and the story tries to be ironic by coming up with stupid names for Miles' abilities, because 'LOL ORIGINAL JOKE!?!', only to realize that while seemingly kind of cool at first, hearing about how Miles' used Icy void, and soul flame doesn't make me feel like I'm back in Tengen Toppa, it just makes me wish I could copy the story into word, and filter delete the words into something far more bearable.

As for the clop shit, I've done some weird shit with my ex girlfriends, some of it was lewd and dangerous as hell, but fucking blowing a dude, in front of a mother and a child, is just so fucking far out there, and is so out of character for someone light Twilight, that my brain damn near melted down, taking lead over the scene luna gets raped, and beaten only by the one where apparently she's been faking her orgasms, and loses her virginity only after Miles gets an additional 12 inches bellow the belt. At that point, I gave up on the clop making sense, because it turned into blatant wish fulfillment.

And to wrap everything all up, this story is in desperate need of not just an editor, but a team of pre-readers. The plot and story can work, someone just needs to go in with a scalpel, cut out all the clop, blatant wish fulfillment, self insert bits, and about half of the exposition that ruins the characters and the story. Get someone else to edit the damn grammar and technicality errors. And get the last person to flesh out the bones they just cleaned, because once you're done removing all that's wrong with the story, there isn't much left. In the end, you would defiantly have a fantastic story, with an easy 2500+ likes.

4183872 I bet this will have more then that in time

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I'm at Ch-163, and I've seen some very disturbing spoilers that involve a certain human and wings... and a horn...

By this point, it gets rather grating.

"Icy Void" was a pretty big focus of the last chapter, and it freaking hurt. I think this story helped cement a lot of pony cliches, but it plays on a lot of normal ones... very poorly...
I keep coming back to Luna, it's so many "forbidden love" cliches rolled up into one big, OOC package.

I'm not even sure why the Mane Six are in this. Well... I suppose they aren't, come to think of it.
I think they're just other ponies with suspicious names.

Have you seen the word count on this? We don't need a scalpel, we need a chainsaw.
This story could easily be cut down to 350k at most.

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I already have a couple of ideas about what your talking about, and they all make me feel wrong.

To be honest, the whole void thing wouldn't bother me, if it didn't have such a stupid name, and was done right. Not in the 'UGH, YOU NEVER USE ME SO IMMA BROOD AND ANGST!' kind of way. More like an actual philosophical look at the abilities, like feeling a devoid sense of emotions, AKA Icyvoid, and swelling with passion, AKA soul fire. It would be immense share of character development, but nope, back to anime cliches 101.

And you know, I never understood the whole 'forbidden love' shtick. Yes, it's expected for Celestia to feel some motherly and protective instincts towards Luna. But going so far as to personally rule the life of your sister, who is, mind you, only about 6-8 years younger than you. And even in spite of the nightmare moon incident, why still control Luna's life? Wasn't it too much control in the first place, that drove her mad? Not just ponies ignoring her night, but a general lack of empathy from Celestia?

Are you referring to the obvious human equivalents? You know, the ones that Miles met who just happened to be near identical copies of the Mane six?

Ah but with a chainsaw, when you're cutting away the dead weight, you're just hacking, with a scalpel, you make four clean slices, and BAM, you cut off the dead arms and legs of the story at the joints It's like growing an Bonsai.

4184266 idk but i'm seriously questioning my sanity considering i've read both this and madman in about half a week each

4185535 ya maybe, Im still on like chapter 120 lol it's been like a month or 2

4185572 it sadly starts slowing down in the more recent chapters after the evil dudes decide its break time... thats about as little i can say without giving to much away.

miles sounds like spike from cowboy bebop to me any one think that 2?

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If u want to read an amazing story that's even longer than check out fallout equestria project horizons
It's by far my favorite story ever but man of war is definitely a strong 2nd
But seriously I recommend checking out that story

4185572 ya I don't know y I haven't read any in a while

4185955 ya and it going to take me a little while to catch up

When I read the title of this chapter I instantly though"okay who will die here" XDXD
it seemed that the situation is getting to a climax point where everything are going to hell

When I read the title of this chapter I instantly though"okay who will die here" XDXD
it seemed that the situation is getting to a climax point where everything are going to hell

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And it's only like halfway through ._.

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Ah! So nice to see a new chapter. I'm also excited for the next one, and the next one from that, and every chapter after that :D
Fuck yeah!

It's nice to see the action rising again. Although I do enjoy the slice of life bits.

Love this story so far, even if I have a few gripes about it...that just happens sometimes. It's still very enjoyable to read.

4192958 dose it good again because it's kinda slow now :(

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I like the small slow-down, it builds the world more, also it's fun and nice and so on :D

4177434 Urgh, now I have a legit reason for never wanting to grow up.

4195923 ill take ur word for it ill continue soon

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Let me have my joy...

Caught up! Now I have to wait for more chapters.

Holy cow, week and a half later, finally caught up, now the tediousness of waiting for new chapters

4248400 I realize that now, but assumed something was up since miles got offered the happy ending, I thought all of them did

4254661 Kind figured that out, the post was from 60 weeks ago... Just saying.

4214103 its suffices in a magical pony world

Caught up now. Can't complain anymore now TB

4257858 well I didn't say erase the bad, you can learn from the bad and then forget it, but that is a discussion for people smarter than us, let's stick to reading pony fan fiction.

4257549
its a startrek reference

4252262
Amen to that

*angel music* I finally caught up :D