"Time to awaken, Twilight Sparkle," a voice whispered in the purple Alicorn's ear. Twilight's ear twitched, and she groaned in her sleep.
"Five more minutes mom," Twilight replied sleepily. She rolled over to face the opposite direction of the voice. Luna grinned at the sleeping pony.
She flared her horn with a giant smile, "Thou hast asked for this punishment."
With a flash Luna had entered Twilight's dream state. It was plain and painfully so. It seemed Twilight's consciousness had not produced a dream this time. This dream if it could simply be called that was a restful one. It made it better for Luna as that would mean more room for her to work her prank.
Casting her magic Luna formed Twilight's subconscious into the library. The young Alicorn had formed to be sleeping on her bed. Luna let out a giggle and using her transformation magic formed herself into Nightmare Moon. She had seen this prank be done many times, and she doubted it had been performed in a dream.
She leaned into Twilight's ear and whispered, "We are going to kill you."
The effect was as desired and the mind Twilight jumped out of her bed screaming. The dream Twilight looked to see Nightmare Moon, and she began to panic. Her dream world crumbled apart forcing Luna to evacuate.
The real Twilight jumped out of her bed just as the dream Twilight had done, and it caused her to run into Luna who was grinning widely at her.
"Good Morrow," she said still smiling down at Twilight. Twilight's wings ruffled in embarrassment.
"Oh...um...Good Morrow," Twilight repeated, "I mean good morning! Hehe good morning." Luna couldn't help but giggle at Twilight's antics. Twilight's face turned bright red, and her wings ruffled.
Luna noticed the ruffle of Twilight's wings, and her face grew serious. Her eyes still held the joy of her prank, and when she spoke a hint of laughter was with it.
"Dost thou have an answer for Our request?" Luna asked leaning towards Twilight expectantly. Twilight cringed backward a little bit at the proximity, nervousness vibrated throughout her entire body.
"Um, I don't really know yet?" She sounded so unsure, and Luna took this moment to target the area of doubt.
"Twilight Sparkle," Luna began like a mother would a scolding or a lecture, "Thou must keep thine wings clean to fly properly, if thou has not asked thine friends for aid as of yet, tis only practical that We be of assistance?"
Twilight could only look away from the Lunar Princess. Everything she said was spot on. If she hadn't asked her friends to help with her problem that was now becoming dire, then it would be best that she accept Luna's request.
Luna let Twilight think about it for a few minutes. She could only wonder what it was like for Twilight. No doubt she was thinking along the lines of lovers, if the book Luna had caught her reading yesterday was proof of anything.
"I guess it would be alright Princess," Twilight answered. She was unable to look Luna in the eyes, and her face still held the blush from earlier.
Luna smiled reassuringly at the younger Alicorn. "Tis nothing to be afraid of," Luna said as she nudged Twilight back onto her bed. It would make it, so Luna would not have to bend over. "Think of Us as thine older sister," the Lunar Princess suggested, as she used her magic to gently unfold Twilight's left wing.
Twilight nodded and attempted to calm herself with Cadence's breathing exercise. Her eyes were closed, but her body was still tense.
"Calm, Twilight Sparkle, no harm shall be done," Luna whispered into her ear. Twilight began to physically relax. Luna began to whisper soothing phrases into her ear.
It was not long before she felt Luna's lips touch her feathers. For a moment, Twilight tensed back up, but Luna hummed a little tune. The vibration ran up through her feathers to her wing muscles, and Twilight relaxed again. The Lunar Princess resumed her preening of Twilight's wings.
"Princess, I've had something on my mind for a while," Twilight said. She might as well ask the Princess outright. Luna had finished her left wing, and Twilight was much more comfortable now, as Luna preened her right one.
"Proceed with thine question."
"I've been feeling some strange feelings," Twilight began, "Of you. I don't think I'm into mares."
Luna made no face and continued preening Twilight's wings. "We understand."
"Oh good! I was worried I would hurt your feelings!" Twilight exclaimed, her right wing accidentally slapping Luna in the face. "Sorry."
"No need for apologies, Twilight Sparkle, however we are confused by thine comment of Our feelings." Luna remarked as she lightly rubbed her snout before resuming preening Twilight's wing.
"Well, you have a crush on me don't you? Isn't that why you offered to preen my wings?"
Luna stopped her mid preening. Then her face broke into a smile. It was not long before that the Lunar Princess was laughing out loud.
"Thou art amusing Twilight Sparkle! To suggest that the embodiment of the moon to have a crush on thee!" Luna kept laughing as Twilight's face grew redder and redder. "We had offered simply for the reason that We are thine mother!"
Luna clasped a hoof over her mouth the moment she had spoken the last sentence. She was not to reveal that yet. Twilight was far from ready of learning the truth of her origins.
Twilight turned around to face the Lunar Princess, shock clearly drawn all over her face.
"That...That is scientifically impossible. There has been no record besides...my parents in Canterlot. Luna that is not funny!" Twilight growled her face now contorted to rage.
"How could you say my life is a lie?"
Luna looked away and whispered, "We are not saying false words."
"You are not are you!? You just accused that my life is a lie! I was born a unicorn and will always be a unicorn! My parents are Twilight Velvet and Night Light!" Twilight yelled now standing next to Luna. The Lunar Princess had risen and was staring with a neutral expression at the younger Alicorn.
"Twilight Sparkle! Thou art Our foal, whether you believe Our words is up to you. We will, however, not accept the tone of the voice thou has chosen to grace Us with. Thou art the result of a wish We had granted a millennium ago! Thus We are thine mother!"
Twilight looked taken aback. She was a product of a wish? She was born of magic? That would make sense since her special talent was magic. She couldn't believe this!
Twilight gave a glare to the Lunar Princess and teleported far away from the library.
Well, that escalated quickly.
shouldn't Twilight have been more over the top in her reactions? but you had her handling this MUCH batter than in some stories
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I don't know if I should take that as a compliment?
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Um? Is that a compliment or an observation?
3517003more of a compliment but still at the same time BOTH
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I think you did not insisted enough on Twilight's reaction: she jumps literally from a middle shock to blind anger! It's difficult for me to understand why she's so angry ( I mean, why do she immediately think that her entire life is a lie? Wouldn't she just push Luna's words appart, comforted as she is by her memories of her life with her family? ) because the scene is rushed and lack an important thing: the character's thoughts.
Let me explain. Here is the usual scheme of someone reacting to a improbable information (John just learned that his mother is not her biological parent):
"You're not my son"
1.Shock (1-5min of nothing, as a writer you would like to describe John's physical reactions to highlight the unlikelihood of the information)
2.Analyse (John process what he just heard and question himself: How is that possible? Why didn't she say it sooner? Who is my real mother? Is she dead? Is she abandoned me?)
3.Questions (John asks his questions to his mother, he wants answers. Once he got them, he deducts how he's going to take the information. This part depends of a lot of things: John's personnality, how he views his mother (badly or like a son), his life with her, how it's going to affect his life...)
4.Reaction (Bad: John don't wants to talk to his mother anymore and runs away in an attempt to discover his new identity along with traveling across the country. Good: John hugs his mother and conforts her, telling her that she will always be his mommy and that their relationship will never change. Together, they face the verity of John's true parent.)
The part 4 is cliché and stereotypical.
See? The revelation is THE most important part of the story and yours is too rushed, that's why I have this feeling of missing something in Twilight's behaviour. You certainly respected the scheme, but you didn't dig deep enough! Of course, since she teleported away from Luna, that's mean that she will have some times alone to think about the information (part2!), and bring us back to part 3!
Know that I added your story to my favourites, and that I don't regret it. Good luck.
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Thank you the information was invaluable! Of course I was planning on using her time alone to actually get proper thinking done.
To answer your question on why she thinks it is a lie is simple. She thinks she was born a unicorn but Luna comes and tells her she was actually born an alicorn (the change will be explained later)
After all I would think my life was a lie if my mother (imagine she is some alien in this example) came and said. Sugar, your not human in fact. Your a hutt and the reason I look human is because of some awesome technology. Does that make any sense at all?
Your opinion is still highly appreciated though ^_^ I'm sure I'll be using it soon.
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I think I got your point, but the lie thing still bother me: what she is really, does it affects her life (I mean by that all she goes through since her birth to now) to the point of considering it a lie? She's still Twilight, she still passed her exam in Celestia's school, and this word "lie" imply a double verity about her existence And that this false verity which is her life, is created and maintained by somepony,or someponies...how deep the revelation is going to affect her?
Maybe lie is a word too strong for this situation, but I'm sure it's just me being impatient because you certainly planned to answer to all of those questions in the next chapter.
(forgive me if there is gramatical mistakes, I'm still learning english)
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Forgive your grammar? There is no need to apologize to me for your bad grammar. I speak english as a first language and most of grammar still leaves much to be desired, so that is all good.
I think I see where your coming from and I'll attempt to perhaps work on that and develop more of it in the next chapter. (I don't want to spoil anything. That would be bad)
It's okay to be impatient. I know what that is like, trust me. (Waiting for episode 3 of season 4 *cough* cough*)
Luna, really? How could you slip that easily? Do you always say things you're meant to keep secret when you find something hilarious?
Luna let out a giggle and using her transformation magic formed herself into Nightmare Moon. She had seen this prank be done many times, and she doubted it had been performed in a dream.
She leaned into Twilight's ear and whispered, "We are going to kill you."
Would Luna really say that
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As a prank? Yes