Date Four - A Flight to Remember
Mrs. Cake leaned through the doorway that separated Sugarcube Corner’s kitchen and sales room as the bell above the bakery’s entrance rang merrily. “Oh, hello, Bon Bon!” the baker called, wiping her flour-dusted hooves on her apron. “You’re here for those petit fours, aren’t you?”
“Are they ready?” Bon Bon asked. “I know I’m a little early, but I was in the neighborhood, so I thought I’d pop in and see. I can come back…”
“Oh, heavens, no! Don’t do that!” Cup said, disappearing into the kitchen again. “I finished them a little earlier this morning.” As the sounds of clattering and loud banging emanated from the kitchen, Bon Bon stretched her neck over the counter, trying to get a peek at whatever it was the baker was doing in there.
Sweating lightly, Mrs. Cake finally returned. “Here you go!” she said, grinning.
“What was all that racket?” Bon Bon asked, loading the box into her saddlebags.
“Oh, well… We chain the storage areas now, you see,” Cup said, rolling her eyes.
“Pinkie?” Bon Bon said.
“Pinkie,” Cup answered with a sigh. “Honestly, she’s loads better than she used to be, but after that disaster with the Founder’s Day celebration, Carrot’s not taking any chances.”
Bon Bon leaned over the counter conspiratorially, cupping a hoof around the baker’s ear. “Speaking of disasters, did you hear about Cheerilee?”
Cup’s eyes dilated rapidly. “No!” she breathed. “What happened?!”
“More like ‘what didn’t happen’!” Bon Bon returned, covering her mouth to suppress the giggles.
“Well, come on!” Mrs. Cake said, stomping a hoof in mock irritation. “Don’t make me beg! I’ve been trapped in here all day on Pinkie duty!”
“She went out with Caramel for a late picnic lunch yesterday,” Bon Bon said, twisting her head left and right to scan the room for whatever eavesdroppers might be lurking there.
“And…” Cup prompted. Everypony knew Caramel was a little light upstairs, but just going out with him shouldn’t have facilitated a full-scale whisper conference from Bon Bon.
“Well, I bumped into Redheart earlier today and she told me the whole thing!” Bon Bon said, biting her lip to keep from laughing. “It seems that Caramel really pulled out all the stops. He had the baguettes, a wine and cheese platter, a little basket… the whole works!”
“Oh, that’s right!” Cup gasped, bringing a hoof to her mouth. “He stopped in here yesterday for a small coffee cake!”
“Anyway,” Bon Bon said, warming to the story-telling, “he’d apparently read The Big Book of Obscure Romantic Outings or something because he brought this huge kite along. He said that he thought it would be a real memory-maker if they flew it together.” Bon Bon paused to snigger. “Turns out he was right!”
“Oh, I remember!” Cup said, looking up and away as she cast her mind back in time. “His father used to make these wonderful kites! He was known all over Equestria for them! I think he even won a bunch of awards.”
“Caramel apparently brought the biggest, most impressive one, if Redheart’s word is to be trusted,” Bon Bon chuckled. “I guess he’s really had this thing for Cheerilee for a while, and he wanted to impress her!”
“So what happened?” Cup breathed, leaning in close.
“Well, Caramel was right about one thing: It took both of them to get it into the air!” Bon Bon said, her eyes sparkling. “Apparently, it was so big that they both had to run side by side to launch it. Then, they both had to keep their hooves on the spool to keep it on the ground.”
“Oh, dear! But it was so windy yesterday!” Cup said, involuntarily cringing.
“Yeah,” Bon Bon replied. “Redheart said that Caramel thought it would help out.”
“Oh, dear…” Cup said again, already way ahead of the story. “He never has been the brightest, has he? But why did Cheerilee go along with something like that? She’s always had such a good head on her shoulders.”
“Caramel told Redheart that when the wind really started to pick up, Cheerilee had tried to get him to let the kite go, but you know Caramel,” Bon Bon replied. “That was his father’s prized kite, and he wasn’t about to lose it.” Bon Bon leaned against the display stand, resting an elbow atop its glass countertop. “Then the wind pulled them off balance, and they tripped.”
“Ohhhhhh, dear.”
“So, they fell and the spool got away from them,” Bon Bon said with relish, “but I guess Caramel ended up throwing it backwards in the confusion and they got all tangled up in the line!”
“No!” Cup gasped, her eyes growing huge as she cupped her cheeks with her hooves.
“Yes!” Bon Bon replied, nodding. “Soon, they were both airborne, and the kite was pulling them directly into town! Applejack said they plowed right through her fruit stand, and I heard from the mayor that the kite dragged them through the wet cement foundation the city is laying down for that new community center!”
“Oh, no!” Cup moaned. “Are they okay?”
“Well, Cheerilee’s fine,” Bon Bon said, shrugging, “but poor Caramel is banged up pretty bad. Redheart said that he was lower to the ground than Cheerilee was, so he took the brunt of it. Nothing broken, but he’ll be in the hospital for a few days.”
“So what finally stopped them?” Cup asked.
“You know that huge pile of manure the Apples keep on the southern edge of Sweet Apple Acres?” Bon Bon returned, fighting to keep a straight face.
“NO!” Cup shouted, aghast.
Bon Bon just nodded, her snorting giggles making speech impossible for the moment.
“Ohhhhhhhh, dear!” Cup sighed. “I’d better whip up a Get Well basket for the two of them.”
“We’re planning a night out for Cheerilee once she’s released from the hospital,” Bon Bon said, shaking her head. “Redheart said that she’s fine, but they want to keep her there for observation for a bit, just to make sure.”
“Oh, the poor darling,” Cup said sadly. “She really has had a time of it, hasn’t she?”
“I’ve never seen anything like it!” Bon Bon replied as she opened the baker’s door and stepped out onto the busy street.
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This chapter reminds me of Winnie the Pooh and The Blustery Day in which Piglet's scarf unravels as he's being blown away by the wind and when Pooh grabs onto it he gets pulled along as if though Piglet were a kite and he crashes into Eeyore's house and Rabbit's carrot patch before he and Piglet land smack on the window of Owl's treehouse.
3501845 Holy crap, I haven't read that in so long! I'd totally forgotten about it. I gotta go back and read those stories again! A. A. Milne is a friggin' genius!
3501853 Well actually I was refering to the cartoon version of it.
You know compared to the rest Caramel might be a keeper.
At least he tried and meant well.
3501876 Maybe that's why I don't remember it. I think I've only seen the cartoon once, but I read the books who knows how many times as a kid. It might be in there, but it's been a long time.
3501892 Yeah, I wanted to put a chapter in where it's just bad judgement/luck, rather than the guy being a total moron. Well, the first chapter is kinda like that, but I wanted this chapter to be a little more… I don't know… well-meaning.
Lost it.
Totally lost it.
Also... Do I spy a Back to the Future reference in this?
~Skeeter The Lurker
3501993 Oh yeah.
"I hate manure!"
They plowed through a fruit stand, a fresh construction project and crashed into manure...
Did they, by any chance, also meet with a big pile of cardboard boxes and two stallions crossing the street with a big sheet of glass?
3502313 No, but that guy who runs the Quill and Sofa Store nearly lost a valuable piece of merchandise. Only the dexterity of two burly workers saved the couch as the kite-bound couple came whizzing by. They barely ducked in time, quickly, but safely, lowering the couch to the ground as Caramel flew overhead. The unloaders earned a brew that day, and the thanks of a relieved business owner.
3499722 That sounds like a sexier alternative to my story!
3501993>>3502078 You know, I've been sitting her wracking my brain trying to figure out what part of Back to the Future this corresponds with. I finally gave up and went to YouTube, and it looks like part of Back to the Future II. Am I right about that? I only saw the first one.
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All three, actually.
All three had a nod to someone falling face first into manure. Mostly Biff or one of his ancestors.
~Skeeter The Lurker
3502981 Huh. Well, it has been quite a while since I saw that film. Man, I gotta go re-watch that! I used to love Back to the Future!
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That movie trilogy is second only to Star Wars for me.
And in my eyes, the standard for how one should do a time travel scifi fic.
~Skeeter The Lurker
The next day in class...
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Love this-- I've been on some pretty awful dates, but volcanoes are new!
3502999 But Star Wars isn't a trilo--*is shot*
...I liked Revenge Of The Sith. #NerdConfessions.
I too have only ever seen the first Back To The Future, really should get around to others.
3503377 Those poor foals will never know the mental anguish Cheerilee suffers from their innocent questions about her love life.
I guess you could say this date...
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went to shit.
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I guess you could, but why would you?
Caramel get
2/5 derpy tungs!
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3*
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And even before that it...
... really blew.
Poor Caramel! That's a bust - the scent memory association will ensure that Cherilee will never be able to look at him without wrinkling her nose ever again!
Poor Caramel and Cheerilee! Being pulled into a giant pile of poop would so be really ick
Sounds like she had hella fun last night!
The change of perspective was really refreshing and made me enjoy the story even more. I really felt this was a creative change that added a lot to the story. We get only a basic idea of what happened, thus letting our imaginations run wild. You could have went the predicable route of telling the story from Cheerilee's perspective, but this choice shows me that you have a lot of creativity and I can hopefully expect more surprises in the future installments. I hope I'm not putting any pressure on you, but I just enjoyed this one so much. This is my favorite one so far, but that is like saying I like puppies more than kittens: both are awesome.
A disgusting end to her date.
I fell worse for Caramel than Cheerilee, poor guy just wanted to impress her and now he's in stitches...and manure.
Caramel seems like a winner so far! He's just a little stupid is all.
I really like the unique ways you present each date.
The chapter title was right: she won't be forgetting that one anytime soon. I imagine it looked something like this:
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5133990 I salute your profile image good sir.
Oh dear...