I usually write on fanfiction.net, but honestly I've been overworked with mlp ideals, so I figured why not post 'em here? :)
I couldn't leave them behind. These unfamiliar faces were all I knew now, all I wanted to know...I couldn't let her ruin them further, I had to stop her. I had to regain the Element of Harmony, I had to save all of Equestria from this demon playing host in Sunset Shimmer's human body. She needed to be stopped, with, or without me returning home. A/N: AU, Twilight's POV
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I have a feeling I am going to need a new shipment of feels for this.
Edit: I think I will be keeping an eye on this...
Judging by the title I started singing a parady of "My Life as a Teenage Robot".... Then I saw the tags.
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I suppose you shall have to read and find outs!
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I'm glad to hear dat
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The only thing I didn't like so far was the fact:
Fluttershy's animals got killed.
I don't think that would ever happen anywhere
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Well weirder stuff has happen before, ie: a pony turning into a human to stop a pony-turned human-turned demon XD
Plus, such a thing did happen in my school. A boy brought his baby bird to school, and a small group of people got it from 'em, throwing it around, and one kid kinda...well, ya get the jest of it. Cruel peeps be cruel peeps :/
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That's just sickening though :/
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That's kinda da point in a story such as the one I'mma aiming for...but real life people are just cold >.> hence why I enjoy da interwebs
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Well I finished reading whats there so far, and from memory only one fic has made me stop reading part way through
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Hope I'mma not that one
lol
...to much jibber jabber...I feel like I review boosting .>. tata dear sir...and/or miss lady pants, I hope you read more *-if you like da sad, horror, heartbeark kinda stuffz ._O
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well im still here so that is in your favour
Great story so far! Teenagers sure can suck sometimes huh?
Well, it's a little rough along the edges. But you show a lot of promise. And you really captured a great range of Twilight's emotions in this last chapter. So, I think I'll stick around and find out what happens.
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Thank you
any advice on how to make it...not so rough is always welcomed 
Hope y'all likez it
3478246 Hmm, another look through and they seem mostly to be just personal nitpicks.
However, you sometimes just say "so and so said this" instead of actually typing what they said. I don't know if there's a rule on that, but I would type out all dialogue just so no one gets confused.
And after the fall formal kick off, I would just make it more clear that Twilight and them went back to a classroom. I got a little lost at there location at that point. And Applejack is one word.
Other than that, you're doing pretty good. I don't why this doesn't have that many upvotes.
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Not typing out all the dialoge is kinda a me thing. I can never break dat habbit, just kinda happens XD i didnt know aj was one word tho, im glad u pointed that out :) thanks for the tips ill try to put them in practice.
Why was I not notified that this updated? Oh, Fimfiction....
Yes, it is a little rough, mostly on punctuation, but some of that description in the beginning was great! Keep up the good work.
3581994 ty :) this chap was soooo hard for me. No clue why, just seemed everything i wrote just came out all wrong X.X but im glad it had some redeaming gleam ta it. Hope ya keepa readin :)
>finds awesome new story
>gleefully sucks it all up like a sponge when suddenly it stops right before the ending is about to begin
>sees that the last update was almost a year ago
Damn it, why do you torture me so!?
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I'm going to start it back up, and it's not even close to the end :D ! It shall have an update soon, just got a computer again <3
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Well that's good to hear.
This story made me want to find flash sentry and punch him. In the face. With a Train. never disliked him before now but when you hurt best ponies you deserve it!