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This story is a sequel to Magnetism!


Rainbow Dash has been foalnapped by Fluttershy’s arch nemesis, and through a mystical portal, taken to another land. Can Fluttershy, with the help of her friends, save the pony she loves? How does this mysterious foe have a portal to another land? What is this mysterious new land? Most important of all though, why does Fluttershy have an arch nemesis?

This story follows on from the events of my story, Magnetism. Reading of the story Magnetism however is not needed to fully understand and enjoy this story.

The cover image for this story is the artwork 'To the rescue?' by Zackira.

This fanfic features FlutterDash and hints/mentions other pairings such as SpArity and TwiPie to a lesser degree.

I do not - nor do I claim to - own any characters or artwork I use in this story unless otherwise stated - they belong to their respective series and owners.

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Comments ( 75 )

I like the story fluttershy saving rainbow dash :rainbowdetermined2: and the picture is funny

You know that I have a weakness for… bunnies, and I don’t even know how you managed to convince Rainbow Dash to wear… that

Well, I can't blame you :rainbowkiss:
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...Angel is still an asshole. I've forseen it :trixieshiftleft:
(and I've always wanted to see how you write TwiPie, can't wait to read more:raritywink:)

“After all, what could possib—” A pink hoof rushed up against Fluttershy’s mouth, halting any further words.
Pinkie Pie looked to Fluttershy with utmost serious and whispered, “Whatever you do, don’t say that phrase.”

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This was an excellent beginning to the story. With this being being a supposed Romance/Adventure story, you kept it in a good pace and a decent balance between the two tags. It's really great to see this story finally submitted after so much anticipation from the fanfic progress info on your blogs :twilightsmile:

I apologize for not offering advice in the blog you made about the inclusion of romance in this fanfic, but my advice wouldn't have been any different from the ones you already received. :twilightblush:

What is it with you and posting these stories right when my mood heads to a low point? Not that I'm complaining (quite the opposite. It's a good way to keep myself at least in a good mood) but it's just weird. Anyway, I'll be rereading this tomorrow when I'm visiting my grandfather who is not doing well to at least keep my mood up

Also, a few things

Rainbow Dash then continued to look at the list but eventually conceited

conceded, you mean?


R u a bad enuff dude 2 resque ur luvur?

Moments like this are why I'm glad I discovered TV Tropes. Specifically the line "Are you a bad enough dude to rescue the President?" on the Bad Dudes article.


*notices even more shout-outs, starts making a list*

Giant crabs, Zelda style fairies... no others I recognize yet.


Anyway, I'm so looking forward to more of this. Already it's looking like hilariously good fun. Also, I'll not get lazy with the TV Tropes article for this story this time. Expect it in a few days.

The villian said not to tell the princesses cause they scare him? Stupidest villian ever. The solution is so obvious, upon reading that the first they should have done is sent a letter to the princess. His stupidity is topped only by the ponies who then run off to get this villian WITHOUT sending a letter to the princess.:facehoof::facehoof::facehoof::facehoof::facehoof:

Fluttershy! For the last time; you've got wings! Bucking use them!

Look who's talking, Mrs. 'Fastest flyer in all of Equestria'...
*rolls eyes*

3436206
Indeed, convenient protagonist ignorance is convenient.

I liked Magnetism, so I'll get around to this eventually...so many stories, so little time.

3436206 But it was imperative that they didn't lose track of the fairy! They didn't have time to write a letter.

3437006 Sure they could have, while running after the fairy Twilight just has to yell back to Spike "stay here and tell the princess what's going on". Simple.

3436206 3436832 3437441 This is explained in Souldin's blog post from last week (not this week's). The princess can't help because she's busy attending a diplomatic meeting well outside of Equestria.

3438123
My apologies, I haven't had time to read the story yet and was basing my observations on the details in the comment, such that I had believed that they had simply chosen not to send a magical, instantaneous letter because of the unsubstantiated threat, not due to the Princess somehow being unavailable do to <plot device>.

Love the FlutterDash and TwiPie... hate the Sparity.

3438123 I guess that makes sense, so long as Twilinght was aware of that fact, then she'd have known not to even bother trying. Fair enough, villian is still stupid though.

Im guessing that discord found fluttershys book and is doing this to bring them together. Made the world real and everything. :P

“Actually ah think ah’d like to hear tha’ there story, it’s unusual.”
“I-It is? Oh my, I’m sorry; I thought everypony had an arch-nemesis.”

Aaaand favorited.

Just saying the shy knight and the rainbow princess? Really? I think in my own opinion it should have been the shy princess and the rainbow knight cuase rainbow dosnet really look like a princess and fluttershy isnot cut out for a knight

3443654 i think that was kind of the joke, the roles reversed makes for a cute and funny story

Finally I have some time off from work... and are not being distracted by Super Smash Bros discussions on Miiverse. I don't even like Marth yet I'm constantly going there and arguing why he deserves his recently revealed inclusion and was never going to be replaced by recent Fire Emblem characters such as Chrom or Lucina... :twilightblush: Oh, supposed to be talking about ponies and fanfiction, right. Well then this fanfic has a rather contrasting 101 up votes yet only 24 comments but ah well, I appreciate them all and shall begin replying now! :rainbowdetermined2:

3433871 I'm glad to hear you like both the concept and cover picture. I hope my writing skills will be capable of giving you the full enjoyment that can be drawn from this story's concept. Thanks for commenting.

3434005 Nice picture, love the artist's work. The 'Rarity fighting crabs' meme is just hilarious, absurdly so, and so along with a shout-out to my proof-readers fanfic, World of Chaos, I decided to add a line involving the meme. Thanks for the picture.

3434010 That image contrasts quite a bit with the one Ugugg came up with when he looked up Rainbow Dash bunny; derpicdn.net/media/W1siZiIsIjIwMTMvMDYvMjAvMTNfMTNfMDZfMzQ1XzM1Mjk2MV9fc3VnZ2VzdGl2ZV9hcnRpc3RfY29sb25fb3plIl1d/352961__rainbow%2Bdash_solo_suggestive_solo%2Bfemale_socks_stockings_belly%2Bbutton_wide%2Bhips_bunny%2Bsuit_thigh%2Bhighs_artist-colon-oze.jpeg

:rainbowlaugh: Anyway, yes, Angel is still an ass-hole. A lot of his character and his unique sense of humour relies on this factor, though thanks to the events of Magnetism he at least has a level of respect for Rainbow Dash and hopefully I've conveyed reasons as to why he acts like a jerk through that story. More of Angel will be explored through the following two chapters of this fanfic, you'll see soon enough. As for TwiPie, I've written a little bit of it in Open to Interpretation so that gives you some idea of how I will be presenting the pairing but there is another side I'm also going to try and present to it, one that will be entertaining if I can pull off. Be aware though that the TwiPie is only hints and small mentions, try not to expect too much from it, but I hope for it to be there. Thanks for the comment Fernesh. :twilightsmile:

3434579 :eeyup: Pinkie stopped Fluttershy from saying those cursed words and yet things still went terribly wrong that day. Also, I love that motivational picture.

Thanks for the praise concerning my balancing of the two genres. I fear later on that may be harder to achieve, what with the main relationship of Fluttershy and Rainbow Dash being parted, but I shall strive to do so. I'm glad to see there has been anticipation for this story, sorry that it took so long and hit so many bumps along the way (blasted potholes, won't the councils ever get to repairing them). Thanks for commenting Funinightmare.

3434769 Yeah, I'm real sorry to hear about that. I was going to comment on your blog but I guess this comment could suffice (that and I'm not good with these sort of things, no idea what to say really). I hope things get better for both you and your grandfather. Also, I'm starting to think I'm cursed, along with your bad luck coinciding with my writing, I sent a letter to someone the other day and they've now come under severe depression. :twilightoops:

I include quite a few shout-outs in my stories. Magnetism has itself some G1 and G3 shout outs as well as a shout-out to Batman: Brave and the Bold. As for this chapter, the use of 'cray-cray' was inspired by Gravity Falls and Rarity using a diamond sword is a shout-out to Ugugg's fanfic, World of Chaos.

If, from the sound of your comment, you are making another TV Tropes page, I will look forward to it eagerly, I absolutely loved the TV Tropes you did for Magnetism it was a great honour and one of the best things someone has done for me in regards to my fanfiction. I'm glad you enjoyed this chapter, I hope things get better for you, and thanks for commenting Zyr.

3434791 ...I shall await a proper post my loyal proof-reader... unless this post is to signify you wore yourself out to exhaustion editing this chapter in which case... sorry. Thanks for proof-reading as always Ugugg,

3434962 It's Spike X Rari... oh, someone already pointed it out to you. Anyway, I hope that doesn't off-put you from this story and that you'll enjoy it all the same. Thanks for inquiring.

3435367 Thanks for informing Bloodsaber17 as to what SpArity is. I was going to comment earlier in order to inform him or her but you made it so I could wait a bit before commenting so thank you for that.

3435806 Well I'm glad to hear you do. I hope you'll continue to like this story as it progresses. Thanks for commenting.

3436206 With this reply, as all 3 of your comments concern the same point, I shall not need to reply to the comments. What you have raised is a fair and valid point, but one to which I'm aware of and my explanation is both what Zyr has already said and partly what Archimedes One points out. In the rush of things the characters did not have time to send the letter to the princesses, it didn't come to mind. Furthermore the princesses are unable to help them, which is something I have explained to my blog followers, and should be able to address within the first 4 chapters of this story.

That said, even if the princesses were contacted what would they have done? In the show Princess Celestia's answer for everything seems to be to just have the mane 6 solve it. :rainbowlaugh: But yes, valid point but one I'm aware of and do explain later. Thanks for boosting up this fanfic's comment amount through your multiple comments, I appreciate it.

3436723 Yeah, the picture works because, even though you cannot see who the damsel in distress is, the lines just suit Dash to a T. Her 'faster flyer in Equestria' title certainly didn't help her escape did it? Thank you for commenting.

3436838 Happy to see you once again Princess Cadance. In fact, I think you'll find this story will have a bit of treat in store for you. Of course, take your time getting around to reading this story, only do so if you want to and when you'll want to, I'll understand.

As for the seeming ignorance of the mane 6... :scootangel: yeah, the explanation doesn't come until a bit later but the princesses are uphold by other things as of the moment. I hope for this to not come across as a mere plot device and shall try to include why such an inconvenience is happening at the time of Dash's foalnapping. Thank you for your comments Princess Cadance. :twilightsmile:

3437006 That is not the only reason, at least in the case of Twilight, but it is a reason as to why they did not automatically write a letter to the princess. It's all well and good that we'd think of doing the logical thing when outside of the event but when inside of the event we sometimes get too caught up to think or act upon the most logical decision. Urgency and a rushed situation interfered with the group's ability to think of sending a letter to the princesses. Thanks for the comment.

3439685 Well then I'm pleased to hear you like both FlutterDash and TwiPie, not so much that you won't be enjoying the SpArity elements to this story but luckily for you it is only within hints and small mentions. The focused relationship is FlutterDash and while there will be TwiPie and SpArity in this story, and it will occasionally get greater attention depending on the chapter, ultimately there will be not be huge amounts of the SpArity that you dislike (and the TwiPie that you happen to like).

I hope your dislike of SpArity does not prevent you from enjoying this story and I thank you for commenting.

3440836 While I have not ultimately decided if this will be the exact date for this story, The Shy Knight and the Rainbow Princess, much like its predecessor Magnetism, is set between episodes of the show. The Shy Knight and the Rainbow Princess takes place a few episodes into season 3, probably a little bit after episode 4. This might change as a part of me wants to have it set after Dash has formed her sister-relationship with Scootaloo, but it is definitely set before Discord's redemption episode. As such, Discord is still stoned. Thanks for the comment.

3442385 :pinkiehappy: This comment has been my favourite on this fanfic so far, it just brought a huge grin to my face upon reading it. I always love to see what my readers quote from my stories, what lines and scenes stand out and end up being loved. Thanks for commenting.

3443654 BrinnytheBrave explains the reasoning well enough but it ultimately has to do with the plot. Rainbow Dash has been foalnapped, she is as such the damsel in distress in this circumstance, hence in the role of the typical fairy tale princess. Meanwhile Fluttershy is set up in the heroes' role, the one most motivated to rescue Dash (because she's in love with her) and having a connection with the antagonist, thus setting her up in the role of the typical fairy tale knight. Thus the title came to be, The Shy Knight and the Rainbow Princess. Thanks for commenting.

3454219 Thank you for explaining the joke of the funny concept and plot to Pickle721. I like to see readers helping out others in the comments. Thanks also for commenting on this story.

3460244 Then you can have a fave so I can follow the story :P

3460244 Haha no worries, FlutterDash is one of my favourites :yay:

3460244 I had a strong suspicion that the rush they were in may have been part of the reason that they didn't write a letter, but I could only be certain that they had to chase the fairy. :twilightsmile:

Hey, it’s good to have you back. And a Zelda-like fairy in the chapter – I already love the story :pinkiegasp:.
I’s a little bit hard the read the letter for a non natural speaker, but I guess I got the message. Until the next chapter! :-)

3454219 3460244 Thanks for helping both of you guys. I guess I kinda had a bad day and I sorta let it out on you. :facehoof: Sorry about that. anyhow sorry again and I love this story by the way. And... Liked! :pinkiehappy: Thanks for the tip and sorry one last time I'll keep reading too!:twilightblush:

3460244 That's too bad that this is before Fluttershy befriended Discord. I would love to see that spirit of chaos jump on the FlutterDash ship. Anyway, I think you made a couple mistakes. For one thing, that scene at the beginning with the three creatures, I think the lead creature meant to nod when he pointed at Rainbow Dash. Also, the part where Rarity mentioned Fluttershy being stuck to Rainbow Dash, I think she meant hoofcuffed instead of handcuffed. Still, the story is good. Though considering this story takes place in the middle of season three, I don't think Fluttershy and Rainbow Dash will become a couple just yet. Still, I do believe you're inching your way there. Also, I want to thank you for the inspiration. I've been trying to get attention with a MLP story of my own, but no one seems interested. So when I finally get back to it, I think I'm going to take a cue from the beginning n of your story. Thanks!

Glharganahrgh! It is too cute and hilarious!

Thanks, now I have Dawwabetes and need ponified insulin. More of this story should do.

I'm gonna follow this story like an entire legion of bloodhounds.

I just realized something: Angel was able to lift a mallet in Magnetism, but is unable to move a chainsaw now?

Comment posted by Eddy13 deleted Nov 16th, 2013

Now I want to see Fluttershy vs Shrek in a death battle. XP

Very nicely build up there. I can't wait for more.

Born from simple sparks, the crimson flame feasted upon a fuel source of leaves with an insatiable hunger. In doing so it rose with strength, its fires growing more and more intense. Its heat spread warmth to the chilled ponies huddled around it, the blaze’s presence bringing calm to their worried state of minds

:pinkiegasp: Such an amazing way to start the chapter.

Ooh, this is going to be fun

Also, a few mistakes I caught

You’re all extra’s father wanted to have come along

the apostrophe in extras doesn't belong, as extras should be plural not possessive


Stop that this instance!”

Instance? Or Instant?

I'm thinking either Throh or an overweight Conkeldurr.

Of course I could be completely wrong, and it's a Snorlax.

3503930 But... but... it SAYS what it is...

My best guess is Tyranitar also great chapter looking forward to next update

3504091>>3505179 Quote directly from the text...

…An Ogre.

3505325 You did read the author's note where he wants us to guess the Pokémon the ogre was based off of right? Cause while Drapion is called the Ogre Scorpion Pokémon, he does in no way match the description given to the ogre in the story.

So, was this a simple misunderstanding? :rainbowhuh:

3505435 WELL OBVIOUSLY I DON'T LOOK AT AUTHORS QUOTES!! WHY THE HELL WOULD I WANT TO READ ANYTHING THIS GUY WRITES ANYTIME SOON!?!?!?

:rainbowwild:

3505458 Sorry! I wasn't trying to come off as rude, I genuinely didn't know if you had read them or not. When it comes to Pokémon, I generally take pride in being able to place the names and faces.
I just thought that there might have been an error in communication. The internet doesn't bring across emotions and tone of voice too well.

An ogre, huh? I was thinking something crazy like a human. Still, how did an ogre get Discord-like powers? I also think I know who that rabbit is. I look forward to seeing the conclusion of Fluttershy's story.

R u a bad enuff dude 2 resque ur luvur?
Im bad!! :flutterrage: I..I think so :fluttershyouch:

Hmmm, I would say Slaking.

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