• Published 2nd Nov 2013
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Even If Your Sky Falls - A Fox in Equestria



Fluttershy comforts her friend after a terrible loss.

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Even If Your Sky Falls

Twenty-Four hours.

That's how long it's been since Rainbow last spoke.

Twenty-six hours since she got the letter. Twenty-four hours since she asked me to come with her. Sixteen since we arrived in the city. Thirteen since the service started. Eleven since they lit the pyre. Nine since she tossed the ashes to the wind. Three since we got back to Ponyville. One since we went to her house.

Silence.

She was sitting beside me looking at the floor. Her normally colorful appearance had taken on a more lifeless exterior; no longer shining with enthusiasm or joy. Her eyes seemed glazed over in a cross between depression and emptiness. Her breathing was quiet and slow; accentuating the aura of melancholy she was radiating.

Tentatively, I stretched a wing out and wrapped it around her. She showed no response to it, so I pulled her into me, wrapped my forelegs around her, and nuzzled my head into the crook of her neck.

"You're going to have to talk about this, Rainbow." I told her quietly.

She said nothing. Her eyes remained just as dull and desolate as the moment she got that letter.

"I know you're hurting, but bottling your feelings up inside will only make it worse."

Nothing.

We sat there for a while longer with only the constant drum of the rain outside the windows and our breathing breaking the peace. I had to do something. I knew I couldn't leave her like this: she would never be able to get back on her hooves without a little help. I needed an idea. Then, just as I prayed for, I thought of something.

"I remember the time he took us to get ice cream."

One of her ears perked.

I closed my eyes for a moment, trying to remember all the details, "It was right after flight camp was over. At the time we both had had our cutie marks for a while, but the parents couldn't come to camp until the halfway visiting day. Remember? My parents didn't come. When you told him that he brought me along to celebrate with you." I smiled as I recollected the event in my mind, "We went to that little ice cream stall near the rainbow fountains. I think... You got chocolate and I got vanilla. You were so energetic! You told him about all the races you won and records you beat. You told him all about me, your new best friend, even though I was sitting right next to you. And the whole time you had chocolate ice cream on your snout!"

Her mouth twitched upwards.

Spurred on by my slight success I continued, "I remember your first official race in flight school. You were the only freshmare on the varsity flight-team. I was up in the stands with him cheering you on. When the race started you were pretty far behind all the other racers, but he never gave up on you. Then you started to make up some lost ground. I swear that's the loudest I've ever heard anyone cheer in my life. I wish you could have seen the look of pride on his face when you pulled through in the last lap and got second! He was so happy for you, Rainbow. And when he saw that you were disappointed at second? He smiled even wider. Because he knew for certain that your disappointment would lead you to win the next year."

She smiled. It was a small one, but a smile none the less.

"And then there's the time he took our picture right before prom. Neither of us could find a date, and when we decided to go alone all he said was, 'Good, colts are trouble.'" I giggled, and looked at her again. I could see a light in her eyes, I just had to make it grow. "Then, when we came home together he made us s'mores in the fireplace and we spent the night in your living room making couch-forts like when we were fillies."

Her eyes were brimming with tears, but it was better than a hollow gaze at the ground. I had gotten through to her.

I squeezed her tight against me, "Rainbow Dash. I know what it's like to lose somepony important to you. I know how you feel right now; like there's some part of you that will never feel whole again, and you're right; you're not whole anymore, and it's going to hurt for a long time. But you need to know that it will get better." I heard her breath hitch, "He's not gone, Rainbow. He's out there somewhere watching you keep all your emotions inside and it's hurting him so please: just let it all out."

I heard a strangled sob, then Rainbow Dash quickly turned in my grasp and wrapped her forelegs tightly around me. I felt her tears stain my coat as she bawled into my chest. Her lungs heaved and shuddered as she wept into me, letting all her feelings pour out. I wrapped my other wing around her and covered us up like a big, feathery cocoon. I stroked her mane as she shed everything she had been feeling in the last forty-eight hours all at once.

After listening to her cry for a few of the most heart-wrenching minutes of my life she finally quieted down. For a while she simply laid in my lap and held me like I was the only thing keeping her from falling back into depression. I had started cooing into her ear, trying to calm her as much I could.

When her breathing returned to normal she buried her face even deeper into my coat and spoke, "Everything feels wrong... like the world is broken, or maybe I'm broken." she said shakily, "I feel like I'm falling and the sky is falling with me and we'll never hit the ground cuz it's falling too..."

I continued stroking through her mane, "The world isn't broken and you certainly aren't. You're just sad and confused; and you have the right to be, but everything will be fine. Just give it some time." Then I put a hoof to her chin and pulled her eyes up to meet mine, "And as for the sky falling?" I smiled at her, "Even if your sky falls, even if your ground crumbles, even if your world breaks, I will be there to catch you. Just like you always have been for me."

Author's Note:

Everyone line up in a nice, orderly fashion and leave comments on anything you want (about the story, of course). Grammar and punctuation criticisms are wanted. I've edited this myself many times over, but it's hard to catch my own mistakes and I'm too lazy to find a proof-reader (But I will edit whatever you find wrong. Weird, right?).

That's about it. This is also my first attempt at a primarily sad fic (Expandin' my horizons and all that). Hope you thought it was good. And, well, sad.

Comments ( 42 )

Watery smile! Loved it!

I had tears in my eyes. And whoever passed away in this fic, you made it ominous. Maybe u cud shed some light?

I LOVE THIS STORY!

Excellent. I began crying at the very end. I just have one nit-pick:

all he said was; 'Good, colts are trouble.'"

The semi-colon after the 'was' should actually be a comma. My only other problem was that this was too short. Very well done, regardless.

Who died? That was so sad, just please. I was just working on my own sadfic, this one is sadder,

Good story. All the emotion and interaction is well defined and engaging, nothing glossed over and no cheaping out. It may only be one short scene, but it's a good demo of the kind of thing sadfics should be made of!

3432262 Thank you, I will fix that now. The semicolon part at least. Writing a fic like this made me sad myself and I don't think I could do another thousand words, let alone multiple chapter. :fluttercry:

3432317 3432138>>3432154>>3432208>>3432278

Thank you all! I'm sorry I made you tear up. I actually intended for the mystery stallion to be anonymous. I don't know why, I guess I just feel that if you don't know who he is, more people will be able to connect with the story. Father, brother, grandfather, uncle, the list goes on. Everyone's lost somebody and I just wanted to get that connection. YouknowwhatImean?
:yay::heart:

3432385. Its ok:pinkiesmile: I'm saying it was her daddy.

Who was it???

You.

You!

No words only sadness great job.:fluttercry:

Very touching, and the little bit of ambiguity as to who died exactly was quite clever. I'm a real sucker for drawing large emotional meaning from small events, such as getting ice cream. And there was enough friendliness there, that I could imagine just a hint of flutterdash for myself. No criticisms, well writen enjoyable read. Great work, especially for your first hand at a sad fic.

3432486 99.99% chance it was her Father. Only a dad would say 'boys are trouble', but that's just my opinion.
Anyway, great story. I loved it, manly tears were shed my friend. :raritydespair: :pinkiesmile:

3432943 I was thinking that it was too, but I couldn't be so sure.

3432385 Was it Thunderlane? Uh, Soarin? That guy with the crate cutie mark? Snowflake?! I got it!! S02E22 Unnamed Pegasus Stallion #4?! :derpytongue2:

3432682 I ship Flutterdash myself, but I think putting a romance tag on a primarily sad story dissuades people from reading it. So I made it a friendship fic. I'm glad you liked it!

3432489 Thank you!

3433166>>3432943 It can be whoever you want, but yes: father is probably the smartest choice. Hope you liked the story!

3433338 It's whoever you want, as long as it makes you sad (can't believe I just said that) :pinkiecrazy:

But I don't know, do you really think Soarin was around when they were fillies? :ajbemused:

3433349 It was good. Would you like to join my brony forums? Mane 6 staff are needed.

3433360 He seems young enough. Not Spitfire, though.

3433370 I don't know what a forum is, so that's a no. (sorry)

3433377 I guess It could be him. Not what I was going for, but if you like it that's fine.

3433383 A forum is an online community where people post different things. Don't get it confused with a social network.

3433671 Sounds cool, but I'm not really interested. Sorry :fluttershysad:

3433761 Is that a good or bad opinion?

3433894 Both? Sorry I shoulda sen this coming from what happened. I seem attracted to stories that bring up old memories. I enjoyed it, well I liked it I should say.

3433899 I'm glad you enjoyed it! Or, didn't I guess.

3433998 It was a good story. Don't fret on that.

3432385 I feel that this actually tells the shock that I still feel from the losses that had happened this year, being that they were two months apart and both being people that I loved and cared for the most. I was struck with the news of my step fathers passing on short notice but once I found out, I was stunned for a second, then I broke into tears like never before. realizing that it was someone that had been there for me the longest in my life even though I was barely able to see him while he was working. I was still bothered by my grandfathers passing, which only made the pain worse. i still feel that pain today, but I press it back so as not to subdue myself and seclude myself, but when I do, I try to avoid contact when humanly possible.

3436980 I'm sorry for your loss and I'm glad you think I portrayed that feeling right. I lost my great grandfather not long ago and when I heard I didn't talk the entire car ride through three states and after the funeral. :pinkiesad2:

3438095 all I can say is that things happen whether we want them to or not.

''Even if your sky falls, even if your ground crumbles, even if your world breaks, I will be there to catch you. Just like you always have been for me.'' That did it for me :fluttercry: beautiful story

Here! Take my like! Take all my likes! :pinkiesad2:

Who..the buck..DISLIKED THIS?!

It was okay.

Just a little too quickly I would say.

Actually it was very minimal about the whole background with the story. Because I was always trying to figure out who was the stallion that died.


I knew it your intention to not let us know that much about it since it was a short story but seriously? I wish there was more to go on that's all.:applejackunsure:

Not so much bitter but definitely sweet.
Its a shame this is all there's going to be but I guess even a small shot of warmth is nothing to shout at. Keep this up, all that's letting you down are a few spelling mistakes and a couple grammar issues, which are easy enough to fix!
(like!):raritywink:

I don't know why, but I am always looking for sad fics. And I like this one.

S' good.

Nice job setting up the identity of her dad without right up saying it. Makes what Fluttershy is saying sound more intimate and authentic (imo).

Liked, faved.

that last paragraph so beautiful.

3922822

Thanks. Your profile picture is staring into my soul.

I know this late, but this was recommended by another user. I just wanted to say, that was beautiful, clap, clap, clap. :fluttercry: Amazing, just amazing.

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