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All Fluttershy needs is a little bit of help, and everything will be fine. She can always count on her friends to help her in her time of need. They're such good friends. But... where are they?



Fan Art by Madness-With-Reason (Spoilers!)

A special thanks to Breath of Plagues, Cola Bubble Gum, Death the Kid, and Jaestring.

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A Halloween story for you all to enjoy. :pinkiecrazy:

Jesus...

This was... Wow.

~Skeeter The Lurker

Sweet Jesus... That was scary! Also, Happy Halloween, Bitches!

:pinkiesick: Damn... just... damn.

You were going for horror, so, great job! :ajsmug:

Welp. I never really enjoyed sleeping anyway.

Well.
That was disturbing.

The fact that I was able to imagine how the scene looked while it unfolded, and when I reached the last lines, um, the imagined scene got a bit.. gory.
Yes, I know that was the intent, but, you put the mood there good.
Now I have a strange picture embedded in my imagination, of how she looked... I'll just go and quietly read something happier... Or I could read some of the other stories in your blog post, hmm.
:pinkiecrazy:

Oh well.
Have a like and fave!
:twilightsmile:

Welp! I guess I'll have to sleep with my neighbors now!:rainbowwild:

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Spooooooky? :raritywink:

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I'm glad! And same to you!

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Thanks! I'm glad it came out half-way decent.

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Sleeping is overrated! I haven't slept in months, and there is nothing wrong with meeeeee! :pinkiecrazy:

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Thanks! I'm glad it could draw y'all in like that and not come off as hokey or silly.

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I just hope you wear protection!

3427148 This much is obvious, yes. :rainbowlaugh:

It was the way you held off on so much of what was going on until the end that really did it. I kept wondering why the doctor was so scared of Fluttershy. Then I found out.

:twilightoops:

Wow, that's disturbing. Very atmospheric. Great job dude! Your attention to detail really shone through with this one.

This was a great story. The way you revealed Fluttershy's real form, and the descriptions were just goddamn horrifying. I love it! :pinkiecrazy:

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With music, mind you.

Will read later. Promise.

:derpyderp1::derpyderp1::derpyderp1::pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy::pinkiegasp::pinkiegasp::pinkiegasp::pinkiegasp::pinkiegasp::pinkiegasp::pinkiesick: Ok, mister. You had my Halloween now.

Oh god the fuck
just gonna go over here and
you know
cry
forever

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Perhaps he was just put off by her adorableness? :yay:

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Thanks! My first attempt at this was... less than spectacular, so much thanks go to my editors and friends who helped out!

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Oooo, I'm happy to hear it! :pinkiehappy:

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I'll hold you to that! :ajbemused:

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Happy to be of service! :pinkiehappy:

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MUAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!

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... That was very well-written...

I loved the subtlety at first. It doesn't exactly leap out at you. It gets the reader to really wonder what's going on.
Also:

She sighed

There's a period missing.
And:

“Oh. Um… it don't know when it all started.

...
That ending. I loved it.

...
I... I...
...
Teach me

You always impress, DoD! I really enjoyed the subtle buildup to her condition at the end - even though I was convinced fairly early that she in some form contracted the timberwolf's disease. However, I didn't expect that she assimilated every creature she came into contact with afterward. That imagery at the end....:pinkiesick: A really suspenseful and enjoyable read. :twilightsmile:

think this is the only halloween story of mlp i found good. it is subtle in its horror, revealing the strange creatures she has become who absorbed her pets and two of her friends....... most of me actually hope they were killed and they are not still alive in her, though considering she is sitll alive and concious......... shutters.

though it leads me to wonder why she become a everfree version of the Thing and not like a were timberwolf........... was expecting she contracted some kinda mystical rabies and hurt her friends by accident.

That was horrifying. 'Twas like the first Daemonette I hath slain. Mine eyes did feel as though they hads been wrenched most violently from their respective sockets.
Additionally:
Heretic/10, would purge with extreme prejudice.
HERETIC! DEATH TO THE DAEMON OF NURGLE!
-Edit-
Emperor-damn, I just re-read that knowing the ending. Everything makes sense now. It's all clear.

What just happened? I liked it and all and it definently was creepy. But what just happened?

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Well, Fluttershy was subsumed by some sort of plant/tendril-based parasite that aggressively absorbs hosts into its group conscious (think hive mind with a dominant creature) that parasitically drains and indoctrinates creatures that it finds. It found Fluttershy and her animal friends, subsumed them (making Flutters there the dominant creature) who in turn absorbed Rainbow Dash and Applejack into it before being contained.
Sooooooo yeah, that just happened.

3429005 Mother of Celestia... so Applejack and Rainbow Dash are a part of Flutters now? Jesus.

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They're all dead Dave.
The Tendril is all.
-Edit-
I just realised that your account is Twilight Mercer. That is ridiculously apt for this.

3429018 Really. Why- oh I get it.

Thought it was magical rabies, at first, or zombification. I suppose this would count as a zombie, wouldn't it?

Does this mean she can use Kindness, Honest and Loyalty? Is she the new Celestia?

All I can really think to say is

:moustache: dude that's creepy

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Blame this guy for any errors.

3429005 scariest part is that they well could still be alive in there. going through a whole i have no mouth and must scream thing, their souls and minds imprisoned as their bodies were consumed........ considering its magical nature that is probably yhe likely reasoning of thsi situation. what worth is flesh to a thing of magic? the soul has true sustenance to it.

........ not sure if this situation is a thing of hopelessness or not. normally these elements would mean there is no hope, but this is mlp after all. evil and sadsitic as this parasite is, there are more pwoerful an dangerous beings the have defeated. hell, discord could do something about this. pre reform or post reform, though if it is pre reform he would ahve been released by this set of events, even if all three of the element bearers sitll 'live' in that thing, and he would do something about this. he would not let this abomination bring harm to other ponies. more so, if this is post, he would do evyerhting in his great power to save fluttershy and her friends. no matter the personal cost.

I feel like this has something to do with Asylum...:pinkiecrazy:

Dang, kinda reminds me of that super Alicorn from FoE. Imagine the minds of Rainbow Dash and AJ trapped within.:pinkiesick:

For me it was all like " Hey! I've heard you were hoping for happy ending of Asylum. So, maybe you should look at this. Look at THIS. See? It's creepy? No? It's far beyond the creepy and disturbing levels? That's what I was hoping for! Now with your new knowledge about how twisted and horrifying stories I can create, you can forget about anything possibly positive and happy connected with Asylum."
It was well written though. Still, I'm actually regretting reading this before I've gone to sleep. It was that good. Congratulations DoD.
Ah, and btw, Fluttertree joke is now officialy one of the most disgusting things ever.

3433037 she not even really a tree too. just some plant mutant thing, poor fluttershy.......... i should be left thinking she is doomed, as is those two friends, but this is a world where they have the ability to clone themselves by looking into a pond. wouldn't be too much a stretch to recreate bodies for those poor three ponies, mentally scared though they would be.

i would not relate this to his asylum story though. these are two completely different themes, stories, and efforts. a horror story is often meant to either end badly in some way, or at least scar the protagonists if not also the reader.

asylum is an entirely different sort of beast. cause even IF it turns out tiwlight is isnane........... well she could sitll live with it. with friends at her side she could find the strength to make her life here. this is totally opposite to this sotry, where it is practically shouted in the background that there is not real hope for fluttershy. even in my own little theory of making clones and putting her soul into a clone of herself, the mental scars would practically destroy her i think.

basically it means he is a very flexible author. he can write comedic stories, dramatic psychological stories, and horror stories....... wonder if he can do a more traditional action adventure one.

Uh... oh. OH. OH GOD WHAT :applecry:
I sure am glad that I read this in the morning. :fluttershbad:

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I was reading this just before I went to sleep you lucky bastard :/

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That is a really terrifying concept to drag through to fruition, y'know. :fluttershysad:

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Thanks! Fix'd!

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Just keep writing. Honestly, the stuff I wrote in high school was crap. I still write crap, but I'm working on improving. Just read and write and write and read. And edit. That's the key: working at it.

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Thanks! I'm pleased with how it came out. I think it could have been paced a little better and some subtle cues might have been better woven into the narrative, but I'm happy people like it.

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Oh, you're too kind! :twilightblush:

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Well that's a good sign. Thanks!

Goes off to praise Grandfather Nurgle.

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Fluttershy just needs some help, that's all. She's a little sick. Won't you give her a hug?

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:rainbowderp:

All I can picture now is Fluttershy screaming "Love me!", only looking like she did at the end of the story.

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Thanks!

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I think people are gonna think everything I do will be associated with it. But then, this does have doctors, and scary things, so...

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I have no mouth, and I must scream.

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Or its an attempt to say "hey, here's a really sad story, so now I'm free to make Asylum happy". :trollestia:

Funnily enough, I didn't know about Fluttertree until after I started writing this.

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Thanks!

3437786

Good call! Don't want nightmares...

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... Like this guy. :rainbowlaugh:

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Was listening to this song just a while ago, actually.

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Yes, it is... Someone should write it! :pinkiegasp:

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:rainbowderp:

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Go right ahead, someone. :rainbowwild:

3440390 how odd, just a moment ago I was listening to this.

:rainbowlaugh:

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