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CartsBeforeHorses
Put the cart before the horse, mix things up, and look at them in a different way.
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At first I was all like "what", but now...
That was surprisingly inspirational...
Epilogue is needed
This was quite impressive. All along I thought:
"Where is this going? Why am I following a bird flying?"
And at some point:
"But this has nothing to do with the introduction!"
And then you got me
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This is the best definition of freedom I've read since a long time. And it gives everything else all the sense needed. Well done.
I've got only one detail that bother me:
She seems to know how to open the lock, she seemed to be doing such fly around a lot when I read it, so why is it she suddenly feels more alive? This bothered me when reading.
This isn't a complaint, but it kind of bothered me on a conceptual level. It's true Celestia has Philomena into a cage (as seen in the episodes). But Celestia clearly isn't the kind of person who would refuse any living being its freedom. That's the first point, because by mentioning a cage, you almost say Celestia has taken that freedom away, consciously or unconsciously, which kind of goes against the character.
The second point would be the fact that a cage doesn't obligatory means a lack of freedom. By that I refer to the "golden cage" concept, or the fact we all live in some sort of cage, by choice or because of our own limitation, that cage being society, earth, etc...
Oh, and one last very minor detail that bothered me:
For a moment, I felt like I had left Equestria and come into the real world. This isn't bad in any way. In fact, this goes along with the idea of freedom, but I felt you just wanted to say how much New York seems to represent some form of freedom or something (I don't know, New York is pretty much nothing more than a name for me, living in Europe...).
But this really was a great read and a great concept, well executed.
3415571 Manehattan is supposed to represent a sort of systematic beauty, as opposed to the untamed wilds seen before. It's not, in the story at least, supposed to represent freedom.
Good point about Celestia. In my headcanon she would be sad about Philomena escaping for a bit, but then realize that it's what Philomena really wanted.
Nice little story from Philomena's perspective. Haven't seen one like this in a while! Good job.
3415571 Same. I just can't reconcile the idea that she would ever restrict Philomena's movement that much. I can imagine the cage during the episode being partly travel and because she is pretty ill.
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Was the story also about beauty? Re-reading it, it came several times into the vocabulary and expressions used. But I didn't really felt it.
But having the story also being about beauty would actually make sense. We tend to want to imprison beauty to keep it at our side (klavier from Rammstein as I interpret it, etc...). After all, we want to live in a beautiful world...
Still not sure how Manehattan is supposed to represent systematic beauty (maybe the systematic part seeing how the city is organized), but I guess I would have to go there to realize it.
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Funny thing, I had forgotten my own words and was about to say "but it was probably symbolic" and" she could not be aware of the burden she is putting on her pet" as we are not always aware of the burden we put on others. However, I realized that we are probably right to mention the fact, because it is how I felt when reading. So even if it can make sense on a conceptual level, it is still bothering when reading it (at least for the first time).
I guess it's because of the very sentence that makes the story truly beautiful for me:
More than the cage, more than the lock, it is the fact that Celestia wants Philomena to be at a certain place, a place where she, Celestia, has decided her pet should be that makes me interpret that the alicorn wanted or wants and has taken part or all of Philomena's freedom away.
But I confirm what I first said. This is an incredibly powerful description of freedom (without saying it's the only one, or the most true, but a very powerful one that really speaks to me on many levels).
how many times have you been requested to read this story live