In the midst of a blackout, Discord decides to have some fun with his favorite six ponies. Little does he know their idea of a revenge may turn out to be a very ticklish situation indeed, revenge paid by scribbling hooves and fluffy feathers.
Disgruntled and humiliated, the Spirit Of Chaos is firmly set on taking a nice revenge on his favorite pony, and the mastermind behind the almighty torture:
Fluttershy.
(I do not own the preview image. It belongs to Mickeymonster on deviantart.com.)
COLLABORATED STORY WITH MY FRIEND MICCHA. She is Discord and at some points Rarity, Twilight, Applejack and Rainbow. I'm everyone else.
Chapters (3)
*Reads first author's note*
So wait... would I be missing anything if I started reading this right now? As of now, Broken Spirit is at five chapters (posted, I mean).
Should I wait to read this or...?
Cheers,
teraoptic
Screw it, I need to read this NOW! I have a craving for good writing that needs to be satisfied, hopefully there won't be too many spoilers in here XD. I'll be sure to edit my thoughts into this message after I read through the fic.
Cheers,
teraoptic
Edit:
Oh Celestia this is adorable. The style, the vocabulary, the humor and everything else was perfect. I'm astounded by your ability to capture the charcters' essences in your writing, and your ability to have perfect interactions between the cast.
I only remember two awkward errors in the entire fic.
The first was in the second chapter, where you wrote "barely incoherent" rather than 'barely coherant,' of course I may have just interpreted the scenario incorrectly.
The second was in the third chapter, in which you used "none the less." If I remember correctly, it's actually supposed to be one word, rather than an entire phrase (or is that just 'nevertheless?').
Of course though, these are extremely small errors, soupcon in fact; none of which detract from the reading experience.
Here's to another great fic, and (hopefully) to many more in the future.
Cheers,
teraoptic
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291875Ha, no, there are no spoilers at all. XD What I meant is people just need to read up to the point he's living with Fluttershy and forming a bond with her.
Well Well Well, what have we here.....
Miss me?
294601.....Uhm...probably if I know who you are!
Oh, just a friend and supporter from Deviantart. We've chatted before...maybe you'd know me better as NoctusKerobian.
I'm... Not sure what my reaction should be. But Jesus, I almost expect a god to be more resilient. Meh. I blame it on the feathers
777953 Tied up entirely, from your fingers, to toes, I don't think he has much choice but to lay and take it XD. Besides, he wouldn't hurt the girls
All i can say is....
D'AWWWwwwwwwwwwwww
I think this chapter ruined my teeth with sweet overload.
That was awesome, ravenous gummy bears, hungry baby bunnies, crazy dream duels and a mischievous Flutterbutter? Yes!
I had a really good laugh reading it, thanks for that.