Hell. Yes. Good chapters so far; great work, interesting characters, and even more expansion on what's happened since Guise ended. So! Echo's got her first trophy and Rose is (hopefully) still alive. Which is good, because I'm really liking her personally. A little bit crazy, and very excited to have her sister...
I just hope that you're not teasing us about Ripple. I... honestly want to know what happened; did he win? Is Pandemonium still out there? While the ending of Guise seemed to make it clear, I've seen curve balls come flying back at readers... Regardless; keep up the good work.
Rose seems pretty cool. As the badass older sister type, she had an above average chance of snuffing it in order to kick off a revenge quest. Glad she made it through the end of the chapter, it means her chances of survival have risen astronomically. We already had an older guardian figure die recently though, so I guess Rose had pretty good odds after all.
I liked how the escape from Neighware was handled, though Echo seems to be making it a habit to get pierced by random rubble or rebar. She's no fluster, that's for sure. If she's like this with just environmental hazards, I can only imagine how she's going to fare against deliberate traps ;)
A wonderful chapter! With every new part it hits me how much I've missed Hornsmith And Echo... Sweat Luna on the Moon! On the one hand I'm really shocked and can only mutter "Damn, that mare has some unresolved issues...". On the other hand I'm just touched. Two Kick would have been SO proud of her The same goes for Rose! I can't wait untill the moment where everypony notices how unstable she is. Nobody sane grins ALL the time like that
Yay better ending. Echo is turning into a little Ripple ain't she? Great chapter mate didn't expect someone like Rose to show up. Also Crimson Knife shows up again which is cool. Shade didn't make herself look too bad anymore either. All in all great chapter.
3610823 She is a lot like her daddy. I'm looking forward to writing more of Rose.
3612401 Well, Ash has the PipBuck, not Shade. He uses it for his everyday duties. I can't remember what color her fur is, actually. I'll have to check my notes.
You know, I just realized that Fimfic isn't sending me email updates for this or I'd have read 3 almost a week ago... as it is this made me smile, a lot! Echo is going to be a scarred veteran of the wastes in no time flat if you keep it up though. Love Rose as a character and have to wonder, if Echo's following her old man's example will this mean that Rose is going to be the one for Echo?
3636084 Hopefully, I won't be beating on Echo quite as badly as I did on her dad. Rose is a fun character to write, and I look forward to telling more about her.
3636771 Yeah, Shade needed something to get her over that last bump. For how she'll react to Rose... well, that will be a fun encounter.
Loving the series so far (even if it has a few grammar mistakes that annoy me, being a grammar Nazi (tip: if you're going to use it's, with the apostrophy (it's) it means it is, and without, it shows that "it" owns something))! I've been on a 3-day reading marathon (taking breaks for eating, sleeping, and school, of course), starting with Guise of Chaos, just now finishing this chapter... It's so good, I finally forced myself to make a fimfiction account, just to post a comment on the story!
I love what I have read so far, can wait for more. Love to see how the finding a unknown sister will make this turn out, and also complications for the win!
Shade will find more things similar with Echo and Ripple once she hear the story, Getting knocked out, an unstable luck, and it looks like Echo traded being shot with being pierced by "randomly placed and not at all throwing themselves in the way" sharp objects.
As always it is a good chapter, however i miss the old Stats and Level up information in the bottom, they are perfect for little jokes. I wonder if Ripple had a perk like: "I had worse: no matter how bad wounded you are, your wounds won't cause disadvantages, you are already used to them"
Eedit: If Echo does get help from the NCR, what about some unicorns with combat magic? just a sugestion/idea, if you don't mind.
I wonder if her first kill being that particular guy will have lasting effects on her, and if his appearance, sex, voice, smell, etc will end up being a trigger or something.
“Yer a lucky fish. Princess doesn’t want ya killed, or even left alone with me an’ me friends. I’d like ta see the latter happen, yer a pretty thing”
Hot.
Oh wait he dies too. I've gotta wonder if the death of Revelry and hot-fantasies-guy are implying anything outside of the fic. Also, it would be nonconsentual if he did have his way, which would take away a lot of the fun and stuff. So uh. I guess un-hot.
Well, she made it back safely. I guess now they'll finally explain what raiders do to fillies when they get caught and she'll have to suffer knowledge. THE PainOWER OF KNOWLEDGE AND EXPERIENCE
And I guess Rose or whatever her name was is ded. Echo FISSION MAILED!
Is this the part where we find out about Ash's secret job as a sensual dancer and rave lightologyspeciologist? Or Gun Shooter Upper? Also, robots. Echo would probably totally robot.
4925570 Just wanted to say that your writing improved markedly during the course of Guise of Chaos. I haven't gotten started on Echoes because it's been looking uncertain if it's going to continue, but I've wanted to because of with how good your writing was by the end of Guise I can only imagine how good something completely new could be.
SNOOOOOOWWWWW!
Hell. Yes. Good chapters so far; great work, interesting characters, and even more expansion on what's happened since Guise ended. So! Echo's got her first trophy and Rose is (hopefully) still alive. Which is good, because I'm really liking her personally. A little bit crazy, and very excited to have her sister...
I just hope that you're not teasing us about Ripple. I... honestly want to know what happened; did he win? Is Pandemonium still out there? While the ending of Guise seemed to make it clear, I've seen curve balls come flying back at readers... Regardless; keep up the good work.
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Thanks, glad you liked it. I'm fond of Rose as well.
Also, I can't tell you any of that
Awesome! An Update!
Loved the way she escaped.
Rumors of Ripple? YES!
Well at least she didn't die, good chapter again
Rose seems pretty cool. As the badass older sister type, she had an above average chance of snuffing it in order to kick off a revenge quest. Glad she made it through the end of the chapter, it means her chances of survival have risen astronomically. We already had an older guardian figure die recently though, so I guess Rose had pretty good odds after all.
I liked how the escape from Neighware was handled, though Echo seems to be making it a habit to get pierced by random rubble or rebar. She's no fluster, that's for sure. If she's like this with just environmental hazards, I can only imagine how she's going to fare against deliberate traps ;)
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Indeed yay for rumors.
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I wasn't gonna kill her on the 3rd chapter
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I've always maintained that the Equestrian Wasteland is absolutely filled with pointy bits.
A wonderful chapter! With every new part it hits me how much I've missed Hornsmith And Echo... Sweat Luna on the Moon! On the one hand I'm really shocked and can only mutter "Damn, that mare has some unresolved issues...". On the other hand I'm just touched. Two Kick would have been SO proud of her The same goes for Rose! I can't wait untill the moment where everypony notices how unstable she is. Nobody sane grins ALL the time like that
Yay better ending. Echo is turning into a little Ripple ain't she?
Great chapter mate didn't expect someone like Rose to show up. Also Crimson Knife shows up again which is cool. Shade didn't make herself look too bad anymore either.
All in all great chapter.
~Reggie
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She is a lot like her daddy.
I'm looking forward to writing more of Rose.
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Well, Ash has the PipBuck, not Shade. He uses it for his everyday duties.
I can't remember what color her fur is, actually. I'll have to check my notes.
This was a fun chapter, it's going to be interesting to see how this all plays out, heh.
You know, I just realized that Fimfic isn't sending me email updates for this or I'd have read 3 almost a week ago... as it is this made me smile, a lot! Echo is going to be a scarred veteran of the wastes in no time flat if you keep it up though. Love Rose as a character and have to wonder, if Echo's following her old man's example will this mean that Rose is going to be the one for Echo?
Finally got the time to read through this, and I love it! really digging the whole "Yay, I got a raider sister!" vibe I got from the escape stuff
And Shade finally realized she can lose the last part she's got left of him. Well, it's about bloody time!
I wonder how she'll react to Rose Laurel, though
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Hopefully, I won't be beating on Echo quite as badly as I did on her dad. Rose is a fun character to write, and I look forward to telling more about her.
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Yeah, Shade needed something to get her over that last bump. For how she'll react to Rose... well, that will be a fun encounter.
Loving the series so far (even if it has a few grammar mistakes that annoy me, being a grammar Nazi (tip: if you're going to use it's, with the apostrophy (it's) it means it is, and without, it shows that "it" owns something))! I've been on a 3-day reading marathon (taking breaks for eating, sleeping, and school, of course), starting with Guise of Chaos, just now finishing this chapter... It's so good, I finally forced myself to make a fimfiction account, just to post a comment on the story!
Have fun writing,
-Gherfup
I'm interested in the dynamic that Ziel, Echo, and Rose are going to have. Great story so far!
Crimson Knife keeps being quite an oddball. I really enjoyed this chapter. Nice work, Snow, carry on!
I love what I have read so far, can wait for more. Love to see how the finding a unknown sister will make this turn out, and also complications for the win!
Shade will find more things similar with Echo and Ripple once she hear the story, Getting knocked out, an unstable luck, and it looks like Echo traded being shot with being pierced by "randomly placed and not at all throwing themselves in the way" sharp objects.
As always it is a good chapter, however i miss the old Stats and Level up information in the bottom, they are perfect for little jokes. I wonder if Ripple had a perk like: "I had worse: no matter how bad wounded you are, your wounds won't cause disadvantages, you are already used to them"
Eedit:
If Echo does get help from the NCR, what about some unicorns with combat magic? just a sugestion/idea, if you don't mind.
I am mildly disappointed that this is not titled "Srsly Guise of Chaos."
I'll leave...
Awww, too bad Revelry died. They had a fun name.
I wonder if her first kill being that particular guy will have lasting effects on her, and if his appearance, sex, voice, smell, etc will end up being a trigger or something.
Hot.
Oh wait he dies too. I've gotta wonder if the death of Revelry and hot-fantasies-guy are implying anything outside of the fic. Also, it would be nonconsentual if he did have his way, which would take away a lot of the fun and stuff. So uh. I guess un-hot.
Well, she made it back safely. I guess now they'll finally explain what raiders do to fillies when they get caught and she'll have to suffer knowledge. THE PainOWER OF KNOWLEDGE AND EXPERIENCE
And I guess Rose or whatever her name was is ded.
Echo FISSION MAILED!
Is this the part where we find out about Ash's secret job as a sensual dancer and rave lightologyspeciologist? Or Gun Shooter Upper? Also, robots. Echo would probably totally robot.
Damn it! Now I have to wait for more..... Not really a big deal, I don't want to come of as demanding.
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Nah, you're right to want more. My hiatus has gone on too long, and I'm doing my best to break out of it and get back to updating regularly.
4925570 Well it's been fun reading your work so far and I can't wait to read more.
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Just wanted to say that your writing improved markedly during the course of Guise of Chaos. I haven't gotten started on Echoes because it's been looking uncertain if it's going to continue, but I've wanted to because of with how good your writing was by the end of Guise I can only imagine how good something completely new could be.
Keep it up!
Then I ran practically ran into her.
Just a small error I found, love the development and character portrayals.
This is really excellent. I can just see threescary fillies hunting the waste for Ripple.
I hope you add more to this. Its a great start to the story.