(No connection to anime/manga of Pokemon)
Twilight and the rest of the Elements are getting real tired from the media budding in on their personal lives. It is putting a strain on the hard fought friendship between the six girls. As they struggle to maintain both their sanity and relationships, Princess Twilight is given a mission from Celestia.
Watch over the young visitor and keep a patient eye over the land for any others that may have followed him. When they confront these strange creatures, the girls will finally learn that even with all they have achieved being the close friends they are, you can never know everything about friendship. Friendship will always be magical.
Pokemon/MLP Crossover
Coverart made by Jayesixx
Chapters (7)
I have a great idea for a pokemon!
*Glues eyes to a muffin*
I call him muffinchew!
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What do you mean there is already a muffin pokemon?
Curse you generation 6!!!
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You and your muffins...
They are everywhere I look today..
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Really?
*Turns his head 360 degrees*
I dont see me anywhere.
Which is strange, because normally i am somewhere.
I would be happy to help you with your writing. What you proposed is exactly the kind of editing I would want to do.
Mew's in this story totally favoriting this story.
Damn dude, to think all those predators were bitch slapped by something so powerful is mind boggling. If it is a pokemon, I say that it is either a Croagunk or a Toxicroak due to the fact that they are Poison/Fighting type Pokemon, which means they can kick serious ass and be invulnerable to poison.
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Excellent, I am almost finished the next chapter, I will lock it up and give you the password once it is ready.
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How you figure?
3445066Somethong said Mew in the story.
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Great can't wait!
3445305 That was the Manticore it is part lion thus feline and thus it can mewl.
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Hat entire "mew" thing was over my head. Thanks for clearing it up.
Awesome idea and story, I'd love to be a pre reader for this! :o)
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Would you like to? Of I have two, more diverse feedback. So if interested let me know.
The wording here is a bit weird
Before this I had no clue it was in first person narrative, also without knowing what Pokemon they are it is hard for me to keep up with who is talking, but that may just be me. Edit: I did not see any other first person perspective thought the rest of the story
Should this be in quotes and/italics?
The ... should be in quotes. Also add "it" after about.
Specially made.
what?
Is Pinkie speaking?
I don't know if kinky is the word you want to use, also why is it capitalized?
Don't use "I" unless it is first person also if you are following Pinkie don't show thoughts other than hers.
you need to have some way to show that this is Pinkie's thought. I recommend italics and quotes "Like this"
Pinkies props do not magically appear, she pulls them out of nowhere, or somewhere very unconventional.
I thought that he thought they were pokemon, also colored is spelled wrong
Isn't Spikes smoke green?
I don't think Twilight told her friends about the mirror but I could be wrong also the whole letter just sounds weird, I don't know how to explain it but it just doesn't seem right.
It's not typical if it she doesn't do it often, but I don't know how long its been.
OK I know who this is but just put "Rainbow said as" before it. Also you should say IN a rainbow blur instead of AS.
The word enough is not in quotes unless it is physic if it is then you will need a way to differentiate between thoughts and physic speak.
Think
Well... longest comment I've ever done. It took me a while to decide if they were wild, trainer owned, or people turned into pokemon but I got it at the end. still confused on whose who and what they are but I am enjoying this so far, and as a final tip, look over the beginning again it was a bit hard to follow, but like I said I am not a grammatical or a sentence structure editor I am more of a idea bouncer.
Feel free to delete this comment if you do not want it on the publication.
3469386 Totally! I am very interested!
3469668thank you for the proofread, once the other fella is done I will get the nessary changes then open it up for the public.
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Will get those done, except for colour. Canadian spelling.
I think the quotation mark is supposed to be after the "..next".
Better wording would be "Terra inquired from her seated position on the ground" or wherever she is sitting.
How did Moriarty get from Sugarcube Corner to the library and back to the others?
If someone is saying that then use ' ' instead
3469884 btw I'm a girl :3
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He is a ghost.
And just like the universal writing law involving magic, there is no reasoning that I need to explain, therefore I am off the hook.
I like it, a few grammatical errors here and there, but it was very well done.
someone's gonna have a bad day!!!! *LIKE*
3407588 Try looking down and back at the same time. :P
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I thought it was Mew at first to and I nearly jumped up and down.... but that then it wasn't mew, and I had sads.
Great story regardless!
3782476 A bad day indeed.
I love peaceful solutions, but a breakout would be far more interesting a fic to read.
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Jailbreaks are always entertaining. Especially if done with the type of planning like Ocean's Eleven. Though the next chapter will be more like how Grundi might break Lex out of jail.
I suppose the proper reaction for the end of the chapter is... Well.. Um...
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Screw diplomats I'd go for breaking and entering
Overkill is best kill
If its worth doing its worth over doing
*Sees a pony stop a Hyper Beam with just its muscles*
....................WHAT IN THE ACTUAL FLYING FAGIGGLY F*** DID I JUST BEAR WITNESS TO????!!!!!!
There is no way a mere pony can withstand the strongest of Normal type moves from the Pokemon world. This is pure bullcrap right here dude. The scenario itself, not the story cause that is still interesting.
4252460 It can't be the end elements of harmony can only effect those who are evil the group is really not evil so elements of harmony have no effect they will not be turned into stone also I believe they can't be used to kill someone good or they will stop working when the ponies do it.
4252460 I think that was done for the sheer WHAT THE HECK factor.
Can't believe no one else thought this up yet.
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Those are some massive pecs.
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he right yous know. at the very least nothing would happen
or........
if at the last second Arceus interveined becuase he got bored, the guard would have to face the might of a deitiy creator god
i like how your doing the ANWANW side stories, but could u a least update this one to show us its not dead
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One day. Right now I writing non- pokemon related things. I ain't going to cancel it, so there will be a time I go back to it...eventually.
4252460 I saw something not die from a self destruct the highest power move and it wsnt a rock or steel type or had sturdy it was a bunch of su[er high health pokemon
so the fic is dead? I was going to know what happened to them!
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It is in the limbo of haitus. Don't want to cancel it, but have not really want to continue it.