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A human wakes up in Equestria, but not in the time of the Mane 6. He struggles to come to terms with this new world, full of magic and strange creatures. Will he ever be able to live his life in this new place? Will he meet the Mane 6? Can he ever learn to walk on these darn hooves? Can he admit that he lo.... lo.... gah! You get the idea!
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I like it. The concept of hoof-gripping is odd in your explanation, but I enjoy your world-building.
3406248 What do you mean by hoof-gripping?
Pretty good so far. I suspect there will be some OC/Luna shipping.
3406380 Are you right? We shall soon see.
That has to be Twilight
3407325 Maybe.
And so it begins!
3407943 Yes. Yes it does. Hold on tight, this is going to be a very, VERY, long story. No, seriously.
3406266 How the ponies grab things with their hooves. I always just assumed they were good at balancing stuff on their hooves.
3409334 It seems to me that their hooves must be more flexible than normal ponies and horses.
Welp. Sucks to be him at the moment.
Don't know what would be worse though. Losing all of your memories and start anew or know that you have memories of a different life and being unable to remember them.
An interesting story, I'll keep an eye on it and see how it develops. Keep up the good work, and try to avoid common tropes.
3421164 I don't plan on leaving this character to his misery.
3407943 Indeed.
It's done. Chapter 3. I'm starting to build up towards the main story line. So far, it's mainly been resolving the conflict in the Main Character, introducing new characters, and preparing the base for the story. Onwards and Upwards!
Also, for you action lovers, don't worry. Fight scenes will commence....... eventually.
Feel free to comment. Just keep it civil.
Interesting start. There were a few mistakes, but nothing too horrible. I suggest giving it a once-over editing pass, and checking the formatting as well. There were a few missed spaces, and the indents as well. (I suggest not using indents at all--looks better on FimFic's formatting.)
Other than that, pretty good! I wish we'd seen a bit more of the protagonist, but I'm guessing that we'll learn more about him as the story goes on.
Another good chapter. We're getting to know a bit more of the protagonist, which is good.
Watch your dialogue punctuation and formatting.
Also:
I think there was an in-narrative "you" in the Prologue as well. I'm pretty sure you mean "I".
Could be a bit more fleshed-out, but you're still starting this. I shall read on!
Poor Polaris.
At first, I was wondering if this takes place before Luna turns into Nightmare Moon because Starswirl is alive. But I'm thinking this is just an AU where he was an immortal.
Another good chapter. Again, not too much I can suggest other than editing the chapters for a few mistakes. You might benefit from a proofreader/editor.
I like that you are taking your time with Polaris, slowly having him heal and adjust to being a pony. While the "human gets transported to Equestria and wakes up as a pony with amnesia" trope is pretty over-used, the way you are having Polaris adjust to his new body and learn about the new world around him is refreshing. Keep it up!
3441908 I have only just begun the true storyline. The things to come should be interesting. The main reason he was human was to assist in helping both me and the reader relate to him. Also, the video l posted will be important.
3441908 Also, I'm having someone go over it. It seems that I should take the time to look over it more closely. And that's why I asked you to take a look at it.
Important
3441883 No. It's pre-nightmare moon.
3441855 I'll probably start improving on that.
3441834 Indeed. (Insert Spock)
3442614
I understand.
I'm glad that you are taking your time with it.
3442619
Ah, I understand. Unfortunately, I don't really have much time for editing at the moment.
(Just finished up my last editing project for a while last night.) I can direct you towards several groups who might be able to help you if you like. 
3444810
Ah, okay.
3444817
No prob! Practice makes perfect.
3444823
Sounds good!
3444851 I didn't mean edit. I just thought you could watch it. Do you like it?
3444868
Oh! Yes, I have it faved and will be following. I do like it.
3444880 Thanks.
Oh snap!
Good update!
3459028 Thanks.
New Chapter! Its smaller, but its important.
I apologize in advance for the pain the character will experience.
I have never seen Doctor Who.
3467441 Okay.
Good chapter!
A little short, but still pretty good.
So Polaris is gonna be the Doctor's new companion, huh? This should get interesting.
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Very good start so far, this just graduated from my "Read later" list to "Fave'.
I combined chapters 5 and 6, I felt they made more sense together.