Fate has a cruel way of playing with our lives. Daintily swinging the prospect of death right above our heads. In an istant that mysterious entity can decide whether you live or die, and for some the later is hard to accept. Contentment is a state well sought after, and the road to solace is paved with sorrow and despair. Only after we walk down that path of torment will we be free... be free to live on, if not physically... spiritually.
(A story inspired by the novel "The Five People You Meet In Heaven" by Mitch Albom, and the songs "Blowin' In The Wind" and "Don't Think Twice It's All Right." by Bob Dylan.)
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Thanks for pointing that out. I had to write the synopsis on my phone and I guess I spelt it wrong and it used autocorrect...
lol derpy died
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.. I bet the farther I read the sadder i'll get...
u monstar
Really well done... brought tears to my eyes...
Less sad then I had expected :/
Still awesome story though :3
Nevermind...
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I take it you just read the epilogue?
I'm not gonna lie, this one kinda tugged at my heartstrings. I haven't read the book this is based on, but several years ago there was a made-for-TV adaptation of it, and I distinctly remember watching it and getting the same sort of feelings I'm getting now. So if you were going for that, well, in my book, you found it.
Death isn't an easy thing. God, no. Especially for the survivors; I can attest to that. This hit home a lot closer than I'd like to admit, but I'm going to say it anyway because it matters. So the epilogue... well, the epilogue really hit me, right there, right in the heart, and while you could have just ended the story at the conclusion of the main body, you didn't; you did this, you showed the resolution, and I, speaking from similar experience, am very, very grateful.
That said, it's kind of obvious that you were rushing when you wrote this, or at least that your revisions didn't catch everything. Most obvious to me was the consistent misuse of "crash" where you should have used "crass," but there are others; also bear homophones in mind (their/they're/there, your/you're, and it's/its). Those are the most apparent flaws, and not something a once- or twice-over can't fix.
If the star system were still in place, this would earn a 4 from me. As it is, it still earns a thumbs up and a favorite. Well done, and thank you very much.
NOOOO DERPY!!!!
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Srsly? Why would you post that? Go sit in a corner and think about what you just did.
Oh sweet Celestia that was good prolouge! I already have chills! Must read more!
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Great story, really liked it!
Great story
and is it a bioshock reference i see there