What happens when a god dies? Four ancient gods are trying not to find out. To do so they must hide, traveling to other dimensions and other worlds. In certain worlds the gods can remember everything that has happened and have complete control over their powers, in other worlds they must be reborn as an infant with no powers in order to survive. And in some very rare circumstances these gods lose some some of their memories, and retain some of their powers.
Twilight Sparkle, the faithful student of Princess Celestia, has been having strange dreams. In them there is nothing but darkness, and four glowing balls of light.
This is my first fanfic ever, so criticism, advice, and ideas will all be appreciated,
I AM IN NO AFFILIATED WITH MLP:FIM OR HASBRO
The plot is really good but you should probably explain parts of the stories a bit more. Like on the paragraph where there was a creature over Mat, you should explain what's going on in that part a bit more. And on the part where where all the new students show up, you should show them getting to know Mat later on after class. But besides that, the story is very good. I will be tracking.
289117 Agreed. Same for the tracking too
289117 Alright, thanks for the advice. I'll probably add some more of the back story in through dreams and flashbacks.
Is the reference to Wheel of Time intentional?
289450 Yes actually, I'm glad you caught that, in fact I'm planning on making a Wheel of Time crossover story later
Dovie'andi se tovya sagain
Looks promising, and I'll be tracking. As a note, though, you should shorten or remove the " ~~~~ " and " ---- " lines in the description, since they stretch the screen in an unpleasant manner.
289597Then im planning on reading it. Love Wheel of Time, and Mat just happens to be my favorite character from it.
Greatly enjoyed it. Don't have much in the way of critique, it was all very well done.
As if I wasn't tracking enough already...
good read though, I await more.
Unless you are intentionally keeping it vague, I would request that you also include their spheres of influence next to the key for which god uses which color of text.
293294 It is intentional, but I thought that I put in enough hints throughout that it should have been figured out
No matter. Their powers will be explained in the next chapter or two, and after it comes out in the open I'll add it to the key.
Interesting concept. The only thing I would say in the way of critique is to make your chapters longer, but that's more of a personal want.
Seriously though, I am greatly enjoying this story. Keep it up.
MOMMY!
hells yea awsome chapter glad it came out i am glad so you know what take 
all my staches.
^What he said.^
Also, it's spelled Rarity.
Now I will patiently wait for your next chapter. So. Very. Patiently.
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I knew I made a mistake somewhere!
Also the next chapter will hopefully be out later this week.
317232 and Spring Break just got that much better.
Really, really enjoying this story though. I love how you came up with a completely new concept instead of sticking to the overdone HiE or self-inserts.
Anyways, please continue writing.
Unexpected declarations of "MOMMY", always good for situational awkwardness and misunderstandings. I find it all the more amusing that it so closely follwoed your description of them where you chose to describe the coat of one as a cross between Twilight and Luna.
I look forward to the possibility of the question "And who is the father?" 
Ooh fast chapter update! And I'm going to guess Mat borrowed from Pinkie Pie.
MAT used twilight sparkle
i'm guessing
amiright? amiright?
also heres a few bricks.
BWAHAHAHAHA!
Alas, the evidence of Twilights nonexistant illicit affairs shall be revealed to the other elements. Now we can only wonder if one of the "fathers" will step forward to make an honest mare out of her. 
Paternity spells, or how to make a conversation even more awkward.
yay update
tis good chapter now i wonder how the princesses will deal with seeing new gods befor them?
CLIFFHANGER!
celestia and luna enter the dream scape and twilight joins them now how that plays out depends on how things play out between the groups hopefully twi goes godlike for this.
Boop!
I can barely fathom Celestias though process at that point
I was a bit disappointed at the lack of updates, but it's understandable.
Still an awesome story!
Excellent This Please Nightmare, Also Connor Stop Drinking Milk in front of the freaking pc.....
Lol.... i could go... troll with this.. but no... still great fic
Also Body steal ?
wohoo void party!
and another great update.
443674 Void parties are the best parties. Because they don't stop. EVER
Luna seems to be having a good time 
They seemed to accept what was going on a bit too quickly, so you might want to expand on their shock and freak outs 
Excellent chapter
Dude Happy Birthday!
Today happens to be one of my best friend's birthday as well. Weirrrd...
And come on man. PC? Really? 
443624 How did you find me here?
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Thanks,
also...You haven't seen the camera 
, Mii has one in his room 
Chapter 9 title is the same as chapter 8 :l
lol yay update lets see how it goes forth also twiluna ftw and watch aj explane the strange conception to rd.
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Thanks, fixed now.
Hey Eath: "Angel" I believe for the first section.
519077 Thanks, should be fixed now.
Well done! And I 've noticed a lot of writers have been delaying their updates due to end of year exams. I'm just happy because I'm expecting a huge boom during the summer.
cant wait for the next chapter!
MOMMY
you just had to boop her nose didn't you
587904 Of course.
is rainbow dating twi?
587996 lololololololololololololol no.
good
why di Rainbow say twi was having an affair behind he back
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1. Rainbow Dash isn't a thinker, she's a doer. She acts on intuition and is very impulsive.
2. She's very loyal to her friends, and expects the same loyalty from them.
3. She wasn't really paying attention during the earlier chapters when she first met the four, so she really has no knowlage of them.
4. She was just told that three of her friends have had children with a fourth. She had no prior knowlage of this and it came out as shock, and a betrayal.
Maybe affair wasn't the best choice of words for this situation, but I didn't really know what else to use.
I hope that this clears up any confusion on your part, and if you can suggest a better way of wording that section then I would gladly listen.
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I hope you have a great time in the Bahamas! I'm super jealous considering I have all sorts of exams and tests and other such nonsense this week, but it'll all be over in 2 weeks.
Oh, and nice chapter.
588336 Affair works, though its a lesser used meaning of the word, thus causing the confusion.
"Twilight set out to fin a spell'
Good choice of music for the crawling chaos there
it was okay still good cant wait for the next
This. This is a good story. Continue your awesome work. I'll just continue reading the rest of your works.