Yay new chapter! anyways this chapter is looking great! keep up the good work

Good... but why does he have six wives? Is serial bigamy legal in this universe?
Not to mention that having six wives would create a whole host of other problems.

When did gods, and chaos magic come into play in the Harry Potter universe? I'm enjoying the story, but I'm afraid I can't draw parallels with the books and movies I know or I get confused.

Why in the nine circles of hell are you writing Harry with a harem? Jesus fucking christ almighty.

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Somewhat. I'm using the whole "line of succession" plot device-- noble lines need to be continued, and that's how harems start.

The problems that come of this arrangement... well, that's what the Soul Bond's for-- there won't ever be any miscommunications as they're inside each other's heads, and any actual problems are worked out at the speed of thought. It's a cop-out, yeah, but I'm no good with complicated, soap-opera-esque drama. Besides, it worked for selector, so why not me?

Or, if you were talking about how the ponies will fit into the harem... well, let's just say Luna is contagious. And horny. And I'm not quite sure which Luna I'm talking about, either...

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This isn't a canon!Harry universe. In fact, it stopped being canon after... OoP, I think. This is a Harry you might find in your average, somewhat-well-thought-out harem fic, after everything's been said and done... for the most part.

As for the Chaos Magic and gods, I'm working off of my own system, which will eventually be explained (because Twilight's going to ask, and we all know it). I can tell you it's a modified Ah! My Goddess! system, with a multi-tiered elemental twist.

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Two reasons:

1) I like haremfics, and think there should more of them out in the world. It's as simple as that.

2) To date I have never seen a MLP harem fic. The closests I've come across would be Memory Pending, where the male lead came very, very close to getting Twilight and Fluttershy to share him. The chance to be the first ever to succeed in such an endeavour is too good to pass up... especially if I can start the assimilation of the (former) ponies into the established harem before Memory Pending's sequel comes out.

And I'm glad this isn't as shitty as you thought it would be. I've come across too many horribly written haremfics to not know I walk a fine line between pure epicness and pure fail.

First off I'd like to say that your writing so far as grammar and spelling have been excellent. Though I am saddened that Harry already had a harem before the girls from Equestria showed up. I thought he was going the make a harem with the princess' and the mane six only and not involve any of the girls from the Potterverse. Now on to the griping.
Man I was really liking this story...but then I saw the words soul bond and that killed it for me. Why do authors of HP fanfiction always use the soul bond cliche, it really irks me and usually instantly turns me away from a fic. I have been in the HP fandom for years so this might have something to do with my intense dislike in anything soul bond related. I feel that soul bonds are use by authors that either don't want to or don't know how to write a good romance with a believable progression; not that I'm accusing you of either of those. I can't say I enjoy harems very much but I was willing to give this a chance but now I don't think I can continue with this story.

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I don't actually know where it is in equine anatomy terminology, only that mammals have the same overall skeleton configuration. It comes from being a fan of transformation stories, the "the knees reversed" is such a common mistake as to almost be cliche.

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Well damn, sorry to hear that. But can you at least hear me out before you completely give up on me?

The reason for the Soul Bond is: 1) I kinda need the Soul Bond for a plot point later, and I needed to establish its existence early on. Also, just because the Soul Bond exists doesn't mean the romance won't be good or the progression won't be believable-- this isn't the type where Harry looks at a girl and BAM! they get bonded. The Soul Bond in this case is more like a magic-enforced marriage: (Spoilers from this point out) it is either sometimes automatically induced during... *ahem* certain activities, or manually induced via a modded Pactio ritual (think Negima). Hence, Harry still has to work for the girl, its just that, afterwards, they won't be as liable to have a huge blowout due to some kind of miscommunication, since they'll be in each other's heads.

2) Comedic potential-- he's going to have both Luna Lovegood and, eventually, Pinkie-frik'n-Pie in his head. Can you imagine the conversations they will have? I'm not sure if I can dwelve that deeply into my inner insanity to do such a set-up justice, but I'm sure as hell going to try, and have fun doing so.

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Hmm interesting that's actually the only way I'll read a soul bond fic. I can very well see the hilarity that will ensue with Pinkie and Luna. I was actually bouncing around a story idea for a HP/MLP crossover where Luna does something that lands her and Harry in Equestria, ponyfied of course. I would be a comedy mainly but I fear my writing skills will not be up to the task.

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Have faith, my fellow Brony! Half of the time I'm sure my writing skills aren't up to the task, only to be told otherwise by helpful reviewers. Just keep at it, and you'll do your idea justice.

...Oh, and I want to read that fic when you upload it. It sounds hilarious.

"…Right, shutting up now. So, Twilight Sparkle? She wouldn't happen to be a fan of a certain literary abomination, would she?"

FUNNIEST... SENTENCE...EVER.

ok, before my mind gets turned to mush with all the wtf its getting...WHO ARE THOSE SIX WIVES???!!!!
someone PLEASE help out my poor confused brain here and throw me a bone or at least a link on where to read this story from!!!
just to help me reign in my poor confosed mind:

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It's not from any one fic-- this particular Harry Potter world is your average Harry/Harem verse, though the harem itself is far from average: Hermione, Luna, Susan, and one other that always ends up in Harry's harem, and two others that, to the best of my recollection, have almost never been paired with him... at least, in the forms they take in this fic. There's one fic out there for one of them, but the other I've never come across a fic for. The story behind it is more or less a gestalt of all the basics (start as friends, rescued from abusive family, need a way to continue their line, etc. etc.), and will be told as flashbacks later, because I didn't want to go through the trouble of writing a relatively generic Harry/Harem fic just so I can have a backstory to this one.

Besides, if this was a sequel to another fic, I would have told you. Seriously, not doing so would have just been dickish on my part.

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there's a generic Harry/Harem fan fic??? AND its GENERIC???
i have to say, THAT caught me by surprise
anywhooo thanks for enlightening me. it really helps to know the world of the fanfics is more vast than i evah thought

MoAr Plssss

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"if you were talking about how the ponies will fit into the harem... well, let's just say Luna is contagious. And horny. "

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Oh god... fuck no. Just no.

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Argh, no. This is Post-Hogwarts. Besides, almost nothing Hogwarts teaches would help them against Discord, so why bother?

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...Wow. On hindsight, it sounded like either Luna has a venereal disease, or something... God, I wish I was there to see the look on your face when you read that!

...There's no "LMAO" emoticon. Oh well. LMAO

312526 This was my face:
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...So... your "Oh God NO!!!" face is similar to Spongebob's "WHERE IS MY GOD NOW?!?" face? Ouch. Mother Nature was not kind to you, was she?

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ROFLMFAO

By the way... why do I keep getting notices that you replied, but only see one message? Kinda new to this site, so I'm still missing some of the nuances. Help?

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What in the--? I don't even--! So... RANDOM!!! *the sound of something in my head breaking*

314817 Ok, ok, I'll stop now. Right after this....
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Pfft.

...Why does that first RD emoticon have the label "rainbowkiss?" Isn't that the face she made when she was fangirling (fanmareing?) over AJ?

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Ah, the God!Harry thing... I was waiting for this.

Reasons for God!Harry:

1) Notice how he mentioned something took out two goddesses? Discord is a lot stronger in this fic than he is in canon. Hence, Harry may be a god (not GOD, but a god), but he won't be as overpowered as one might think, considering what he might or might not be going up against.

2) Maybe its just me, but I like it when the hero curbstomps everything. Of course, he has to look cool while doing it, but... yeah. Never been a big fan of the angsty hero who goes into battle reluctantly and pulls a win out of his ass. Anyways, while Harry won't be curbstomping Discord (if he even fights him), he'll be curbstomping everything else that decided to piss him off. Not sure if that'll help you or not.

3) God!Harry is more beleivable as a mentor figure to the (former) ponies than canon!angsty!whiney!emo!Harry who married a fangirl and named his children after his enemies...no, I'm not bitter about how Rowling ruined the series. What makes you think that?

Okay, personal preferences are an understandable reasoning. (I still would like to say that I think that dismissing the angst, no matter how annoying it may be *I fugging hate Sauske For example* is risk. It's still pretty damned impressive to have the angst, the sadness and the suffering, that's just what makes a character more human. What makes them heroic is dealing with their issues and kicking ass anyway. To bend but Never Break. Makes the struggle more meaningful.) I hope I'm not coming off as pushy, but I love hearing other peoples opinons on this stuff and the reasoning behind it. I'll give a last few warnings and then I'll try to stick to shredding your story based on grammar and literary stuff. (Though, I will warn you, "the author ruined the series" isn't a good thing to say if you're trying to write a belivable story.)

Argh, sorry, another problem.
The Harem.
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Putting aside your reinterpretation of Harry, (which you've explained, and I understand your reasons) Harem situations are usually blatantly out of character and cheapens all the characters involved.
Specifically, if you want this to be good, you have to put just as much work into Every Single One of the Girls in Harry's group as you do on harry himself, keeping them belivable and not flanderized.

I know you're making the ponies younger and more Naive (A really risky move), and that just makes me more worried. Even If you have harry as a mentor figure, I'm worried you're going to make all the Ponies completely and utterly helpless in the Potterverse. Making them rely on "The Great Harry" and completely ineffective. They have thier weaknesses, yes, but the ponies Also have thier Strengths. Emphasizing one over the other is a disservice to thier characters. Also, having them all fall for harry seems... annoyingly out of character for all of them. They might clash and they might be freinds, and they might respect each other, but if you're going for an action story, realistic romance usually falls by the wayside and becomes mediocre romance, which ruins the story.
The other concern with God!Harry is that he might overshadow allt the other characters. I'm afraid you might have him chewing out celestia and acting high and mighty all the time. Always being better than the ponies. I think it would be more realistic, and more fun, to have him share the spotlight with the ponies. Let the ponies kick ass as they are, they certainly can be awesome.
Balance, my friend. Be careful.

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So... many... words! Where do I begin?

I never said the girls were younger-- they're between late teens and early adult. And naive... that's actually the only way to go, considering how Equestria is-- can you really tell me that having them adapt instantly to our world is in character for any of them? Celestia, maybe, but no one else. And they won't be utterly helpless... they'll just take some time to learn that the guy asking you to go down a dark alley with him to help his friend might be up to something. Also, yes, they have weaknesses and strengths, and they will grow as characters, so you don't have to worry about that.

Romance wise... my plan is to have this progress like a slice-of-life eroge, only Harry has access to all the happy endings for all the love interest. Does that make sense to you?

God!Harry as mentor... it's not just him that will teaching the ponies-- the other girls will, too; my use of "God!Harry" includes all of them due to the Soul Bond (once again, I would like to point out selector's "Harry Potter and the Witches' Secret" trilogy, as the Soul Bond of this fic works like that one, just not established in the same way [seeking magic, magically induced lust, instant love]).

And, finally, the ponies will be kicking ass on their own. Read my blog for ideas on how.

Well... okay...
wait.
"So... Many... Words! Where do I begin?"

Eh-heh... eheheheheheheh, AHAHAHAHAHAHAAAAAA!!!
*DrillSargeant Voice*
Words?!? You scared of the WORDS, BOY?!? I'll TELL YOU about The WORDS!!!
A Picture is worth a thousand words! But You aren't making a picture ARE YOU!!!
YOu Aren't even making a clopping GALLERY!!!
YOu're making a STORY PUNK, a BUCKING FULL LENGTH MOTION FEATURE!!!
You don't got thousands of words, nooooo, you GOT BUCKING BILLIONS OF WORDS TO DEAL WITH NOW BOY!!!!!
DOES THAT SCARE YOU?!? GOOD! NOW SADDLE UP AND BUST YOUR FLANK!!!
Are You a Filly or a WRITER, BOY?!? IF YOU AREN"T BREAKING YOUR DAMN FINGERS OFF YOU"RE NOT DOING IT RIGHT!!!

Aheh, sorry. Just ah... try and take your story seriously, no offence intended. It's not supposed to be easy or simple, and shortcuts can ruin a story. The more effort you put in the better it should be.

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*Gulp* SIR! YES SIR!!!

...And to be fair, I was working off of 2 hours of sleep when I wrote that. Damn insomnia...

harrys English but not that english

And if his guess about her original form was correct, she would probably be sickened by the thought of eating meat.

Ironically, you found the one way I've never seen someone get this backwards before.

It's possible that Equestrian ponies could have "ovo-lacto vegetarian" diets... though Rarity's father has been seen fishing in canon and, unlike Fluttershy, he's probably not doing it to feed a pet... but Harry wouldn't know that.

What Harry knows are our horses... and they're most certainly not vegetarians. Our horses are opportunistic omnivores and anyone who has a farm with them knows to not have a barbecue near the fence because the horses will steal the burgers if they can. (Though, unlike us, they lack gallbladders, so their capacity to digest fat is lower than ours.)

I'll pre-emptively rule out another misconception.

Horses have canine teeth too.

https://imgur.com/a/biw89Yy

(Apparently, all stallions and about a third of mares, so it's still possible for an author to have one of the cast comment on gaining them as long as it's clear that the author knows this fact.)