Just north of Cloudsdale, isolated from the rest of the world, but attracting more attention than anything else for miles, a stadium holds all members and recruits of the Wonderbolts. Only a select few pegasi have trained for this event, spending almost three years with the honored Wonderbolt leader, Spitfire. Now, with the best of the best chosen, there can be only one victor to take on the responsibility that comes with becoming a true Wonderbolt member.
Will it be Rainbow Dash who comes out on top, or her most challenging competitor, Lightning Dust?
Chapters (5)
All at once?
Hm. Seems to be a theme lately.
~Skeeter The Lurker
This is going to be quite the interesting story. Especially considering it has my four favorite characters in it. Can't wait to give this a read.
~SolidFire
I was expecting Soarin to say "Rainbow Dash" at the end there instead of 'Lightning Dust' ah well great chapter can't wait to finish it!
Oh you are truly evil lol I can hardly stand the tension, Dash or Dust this is one heck of an awesome story
So did Rainbow win? Or not? Either way even though I'm trying to place who won this was such an amazing read I really enjoyed it
4084426 The winner never mattered, actually.
You can decide for yourself.
4085797 oh ok that means Rd totally won(for me ) lol
I gotta say, the writing is really turning me off. The prologue was nothing but telling, and wholly unnecessary. You've made a really intriguing dynamic between Spitfire and LD, but again the writing is telly, needs proofreading, and is overall clunky. I'm surprised; I know you can do better.
Writing aside, you built up all that interpersonal tension and then dropped it for a lengthy action sequence that doesn't reveal a whole lot more. I could have skipped the last two chapters and just looked ahead to see who won.
The winner wouldn't have mattered if less attention had been given to the race. I was very unsatisfied by this story. :/
4085797
I think im gonna say it was a TRUE tie