The mane six are in a little need of fundraising, so the best idea is definitely to auction off a date with one of their members of course!
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I admit that I liked this despite being an avid SoarinJack shipper and it was pretty hilarious as well. Never thought Applejack would be up for auction.
However, you got the term wrong. "Filly" is a term that goes to young pony girls. The term you are looking for with Thorn Spark is actually "Colt." This is simple knowledge that virtually everyone who studied the ponies know.
Also, I can't help but feel that this needs the Anthro tag as we get very vague descriptions of everything. Arms for example and that lovely dress AJ wore for the date. Gave me the impression of Anthro ponies and the tag is missing which makes things confusing for an average reader.
I usually don't comment on stories except when things are bad or just something I really, really like. This is neither but I thought I'd give you a helping hand with this.
Cute Apple-Fire fic. I havent seen to many of those. I hope you keep writing more. Maybe a possible sequel. cant wait to see how things turn out for AJ and SpitFire
Cute concept, that Thorn Spark is a lucky sonova
Only had a few problems with this, and I'm not even sure if they're problems. The first is that you constantly refer to Thorn Spark as a filly, which I thought was the term for a young female pony. If it can be used in both cases, then just go ahead and ignore that one.
Second, I wish we could've seen some more scenes between Spitfire and AJ. Heck, I think it would've been great for Thorn Spark to break under the pressure at some point and tell AJ, so she could storm over to Fleetfoot's place and give the Wonderbolts a piece of her mind. It just seems like we missed out on getting to see some great interaction there.
And lastly, in the beginning when Twilight was listing why stallions voted for AJ rather than the other girls, there was nothing about why Twilight wasn't voted. Did she not put her name down for consideration? It's a small gripe, I was just curious.
Everything said, I enjoyed this story! Have a like!
3369337 Never thought fillies were only used to refer to females. I fixed it with a find/replace, but colt just doesn't seem right in some places....
"raised his hand" is this humanized or anthro all of a sudden? And id just like to reiterate what someone already said because I hate it but a filly is a female foal, a colt is a male foal.
The story was interesting so far... but the downside is the inconsistency of punctuations and between Ponies and Anthro Ponies.
If fim fiction is about those factors only, I'd have to down vote. But since you are able to stay 'on-the-ball' with the story progress, you just won a like by a landslide.
Remember to reread your fictions before submitting or ask around for a proofreader. All in all, it was entertaining while it lasted.
this fic has a lot of grammar mistakes.. but the whole story is amazing! i really liked this story! its my first time to read an apple-fire ship and this fic made me interested!
i'm thinking of a chapter two maybe? 
3382162 You are right on this one? Probably coming in a month
3382878 YAAAY!
I really liked this story for some reason I really enjoy applefire as a ship but this only the second time I've ever found a fic about them. There were a few grammatical errors but nothing that detracted from the story. Can't wait for the sequel.
Nice job