i have read, seen, imagined and been told of some FUCKED UP SHIT!!.....
This takes the cake.
i have read foalcon
i have read futa
i have read marems threesomes, fillyfooling torture and tentacles...
in terms of WTF! This beats them all.

[Sigh] at least it didn't contain scat

I want to give constructive feedback... i really do... But the best i got is this.
Do some serious editing and turn this into a cliched HiE fic where he bangs the mane six the cutie mark crusaders WHOEVER YOU LIKE! ... Just.... no super sayan discord bukake.... please

Aaaaannndd I've had enough internet for today......

Now I've seen everything.

I laughed.

3435978 thank you so much!

Oh, and a spoiler for the next chap: 8===D~

Um...

That got really random. Not the direction I was hoping this story would go. I was hoping something a bit more serious and realistic.

Oh well. Not gonna unlike it, it's your story and your decision what to do with it.

3441342 eh, the third chapter will explore more of the pony and human relations, so don't worry.