Getting the girl
(Spikes' Pov)
I slept like a king last night...but you know what would make this better? Having my queen by my side. Yes, I’m talking about Rarity. Last Night I didn’t care about anything, the ponies giving me weird looks, or questioning how I was floating. Once I got back I opened the door, like everypony else Twilight who like the bookworm she was reading a book. I think it was plantire theories of Star Swirl. Anyway Twilight questioned the fact I was floating, but shrugged it off, seeing I was on cloud nine. Twilight greeted me and I went to bed. Oh tomorrow is going to be great. I finally get to ask the mare of my dreams out!
The Next Morning
I woke up even earlier than usual like an excited filly on Hearths Warming morning. Today was the day I’ll ask Rarity out. I rushed down stairs and began to clean, I mean perp the library. It was 6:45 in the morning and Twi wouldn't be up for at least another thirty minutes or so. It took me nearly twenty minutes to clean everything up, and get breakfast ready. Just in time to cause I heard Twi’s hoof steps. Guessing she smelled my pancakes. Anyway, I set up the table, with her four stacks of milk butter pancakes, with maple syrup.
“Morning, Spike.” Twilight said said walking over to the table so we can eat.
“Morning, Twi." I said putting my plate down. Immediately I begin to chow down. "Oh, by the way. Rarity asked me to go with her on a gem hunt. So can I go?” I ask with my mouth full of the soft firm breakfast pancake in my mouth.
“Ok, can you try asking again, without your mouth full of pancakes?”
I swallow the mouth full of pancakes and ask once more. “Can I go with Rarity on her gem hunt. Please please please?!” I pleaded. Twilight shrugged.
“Sure why not. Maybe you can ask her out.” She said with a wink. Well that was the plan.
“Thank you thank you thank you!” I leaped out of the chair and wrapped my claw around her neck.
“Ok ok ok casanova. Just go and get your mare.” Twilight giggled, as I let go. After finishing the dishes, I got my lucky red wagon, said my goodbyes to Twilight, who told me good luck. I ran as fast as my legs could carry me.
The sky was clear. Thank you Rainbow. Ponies were out and about. Mostly to buy goods for their homes. But I have someplace to go. And that place is Carousel Boutique.
Once I was by the door, I knocked on it. “Come in!” Said the angelic voice behind that door. My heart fluttered, I opened the door to see the mare of my dreams getting ready to go. Well, she was in her diva sunglasses and hat. I know it was sunny out, but it was to protect her fur, and the sun is strong enough to blind a pony. “Ok Spikey I’m ready. Rarity said singing in delight. I nodded and closed the door once my beloved trotted out. I turned my head to the bush and saw a multi-colored tail. I know who that tail belonged to, but the question is why she was following us. Anyway we walk to the spot where we usually find the gems, which was up a mountain which was a couple of minutes, ok an hour and forty-five minute walk from Ponyville. All in all, I was enjoying it, despite Rainbow failing in being a ninja pony. I mean seriously if you are going to hide use the clouds. Oh, wait. There are none. So she can’t fly without being spotted, so I guess hiding in the bushes in the next best thing, but if you're going to hide in the bushes then at least hide your tail, cause if I can spot it, then Rarity will most likely see it. After the hour mark Rainbow did something a ninja pony was not supposed to do. Rainbow stepped on a twig,the sound echoed causing me and Rarity to look back. Looks like she took my advice, because she was no where to be found.
“Must be a rabbit or something.”Rarity shrugged her shoulders, and we continued to our destination. For the next forty five minutes Rainbow was as quiet as the batmare, stalking its prey.
Quite.
Upon reaching the rocky plain, Rarity began to work her magic and began to locate, and mark all the gems within the area. I wish I was a teen who can smell gems. Wait can dragons do that? Smell gems? Anyway, while she's off relaxing I began to work my claws and start to dig.
{Rainbow P.O.V}
Ok what the buck is that primma donna doing? Resting her cute little flank while Spike does all the hard work? What kind of selfish bitch does that. Don’t answer because I know who it is. That bitch Rarity. Oh and if you're wondering, I’m hiding behind a bush on top of a hill, giving me the whole view in the large area therein. I wanted to chuckle...ok I softly chuckle seeing Spike coming out of the hole with...hard to see with how small the gems are. I should've brought binoculars with me. one...five...nine gems in his mouth. I was impress, also I can think of a few dirty jokes, but I’m not getting into that right now. Now I’m watching my favorite dragon dig for treasure. Also how awesome it would be to wear a rainbow dress covered in gems. I’m sure that would catch Spike’s eyes. Anyway after he spat out the gems, he went on to the next marked spot. I sigh making the most girlish goggle eyes, watching those razor sharp claws, the ones who nearly made me orgasom, digging through rock and stone like was wet paper. Is there anything hotter than the pony...will in this case dragon you like working a sweat. Well apparently there something hotter than that. I know dragons can’t be hot be at least Spike need water. Lucky that bitch didn’t hog it up, and pass it to Spike. And I don’t know if he was trying to be manly or what but he dumb the water right on his scales. Upon watching this I felt something that was slowly clawing down my chin. I was drooling. Yes me drooling over a now wet baby dragon. I know I’m a pervert so what?
“Oh Spikey you don’t have to look sexy.” Rarity said as she levitated her glasses off. “You're fine just the way you are darling.” True that. Also Spike cheeks change into the most cutest shade of pink I ever saw.
“Gezz thanks Rarity. Also I was wondering.” Please tell me. No no no no no no no no no no no She isn’t right for you. “Can we...you know go out?” He ask, I hope. No I pray to Celestia herself for Rarity to say no.
“Why sure Spikey. I would be happy to go out with the most gentlest dragon in all of Equestria.” My heart just sink hearing those four words. I don’t know why but I knew I was a fool. Thinking I could be with a awesome dragon like. I didn’t care if there heard me. I just shot out of the bushes, and fly back to ponyville.
{Spike P.O.V}
Yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes! I have done it. I asked Rarity out, and she said yes. But still why did Rainbow leave. Oh well, time for more digging. I said now digging even more faster. Hope Rainbow Dash will be fine. Anyway it been a long day and I’m bush. After trotting a three hundred pound cart of gems, I hoard them to the far corner in the room, Rarity rewarded me with two juicy rubies, and a quick kiss on the lips. I kiss back and wave back to my now new marefriend.
“Byebye Spiky, and thank you for your help.” Rarity said.
“Bye my beautiful mare.” I said skipping back to the library while at the same time making my marefriend blush.
{Rainbow Dash’s P.O.V}
I can’t believe it, Rarity said yes. She don't even deserve him. Heck she probably doesn't even like him the same way I like him. Wait I should tell him, that Rarity is using him. That it, tomorrow I when I see him, I tell him. As I lay there on my bed, I sigh, thinking of the most coolest dragon ever.
just drop rarity from a thousand feet in the sky
our problems will be fixed well at least till discord tries to take over........ well he can rule a kingdom pretty well so I'd be fine with discord ruling equestria as long as spike and rainbow have their relationship
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How the author handles this story reminds me of how Google handles Youtube: They're trying to fix something that's not broken, and as a result, makes it worse.
Kufufufufu~ Sorry Crisis, been tied up with family matters, but im back to help. Just ask for help when im on and i shall be at you beck and call. Ciao until then. Kufufufufu~
F1utt3rShI~
(Daemon Spade)
this story is awesome but their seems to be a few chapters missing
I am dyeing for the next chapter
It's fine everyone has writer's block sometime. I think it would be interesting if the next chap (or next few) had Dash trying to come to terms with "Thinking" Spike and Rar are dating. Where then Spike goes to see his "mare" as Dash is watching over him. But then he walks in and see Rar with a someone else getting hot and heavy. She then breaks his heart telling him all the "wrong" things lol. As he runs out crying Dash burst in and beat her ass for hurting him lol. How does that sound. Can't wait to see your next work Dude.
I know you canceled this storie but I was wondering if you could finish this storie please
I know this is a very stupid question and you probably get this question for this story but why did you cancel?
That is if you dont mind me ask...
So do you want me to continue after these two, or remake the chapters with the same kind of setup?
4635644 do what ever you want with it.
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ill keep it as is and continue it. Never done Dark. It'll be a new experience. Can you give me the idea you had for it and anything extra that you thought of?
4636758 Alright
4514534 you souned like fluttershy
Lance blazer
4978885 You know your the first person to say that about me...
4979105 Is that a good thing or a bad thing?
4979160 Thats actualy a good thing, its more of a compliment then anything else.
Before I was Big Macintosh one moment then King Sombra the next... Those were intresting times.
4979350 Cool how's my Spike impresin
"Green with envie or in this case pink with envie"
The grifun brush off episode
Sorry spell isn't so good
Lance blazer
4979727 I remember that scene that, it was funny...
That was actualy really good empression though
4980244 thank he is my favorite dragon alwase great with one liners
4980321 That Spike is, he is the only Dragon who has not tried to attack, bully, or cause harm to pony kind in anyway shape or form...
Except for that one instant when he became large do to a greed growth spurt but he did turn back and feel gulty about ever sense
4981628 thanks to rarity I'm not a Spike x rarity fan no evens bronys but there cute and I like there kids Kailala's Art work have you seen her work it pretty Cool and she has a fanfic group that right great storys
Lance blazer
4981881 That is true, even if you are not a fan of their pairing, they do have fan base that has made some really good fan fics for those 2.
I will go check her out in the future and see what she has made, thats for telling me
4985430 np
Lance blazer
I like it
While I am a fan of Sparity, I also love seeing him with each of the other girls. Rainbow is my second fave pairing with him.
Dear Geoice,
If you need an editor, I suggest you get a new one. I have read the 'edited' version of this story, and, no offence, but it has been done very badly. For example, use of 'their'(Possessive) Instead of 'there's'(There is). Also, the fact that you used the three full stops right after a question mark. Also, instead of capitals, try italics or bold. They work much better than capitals. In fact, I think it's an unwritten rule that you do not under any circumstance use capitalisation, even when shouting. It makes your works seem unprofessional and, I hate to say, 'stupid'.
The range of vocab is very limited, and even though writing for rainbow Dash, I'm pretty sure she'd use more words that she found fancy to make herself look good, like her egotistical self would. The comment about rubbing herself wasn't very discreet and looked out of place for a fanfic as such. Words such as 'wanna' don't work with this type either, neither will the use of 'yea'. I'm betting a ten year old could do better than this.
Please, for the sake of keeping readers, find a new editor or at least come to terms with grammar and punctuation yourself, because the story line seems decent and I would love to read something that isn't spoiled by incorrect wordings.
Sincerely,
Scarletthedarkwolf
P.S This isn't so much a request, this is a 'I'm doing this for your sake. I cringed so hard when I read this and I speak nothing but the truth. I know readers such as I that scowl upon such works. I can see the inner beauty of it. They simply cannot. I don't mind if you don't bother though, because I'm pretty sure you'll understand in the future.'
5618634 well those chapters are from the old Arthur I wrote a new on but unpublished it. If yyou want I can pm it to you so that you can see how I'm doing with it. Though it still need to be edited but I was told that ii got Rainbow better than the old author.