Hi there! BothMyHearts here~ I'm new to writing fanfics and all so if you have any suggestions for me on improving in my writing just let me know. Check out my story(s) and tell me watcha think! <3
This is basically another Luna/Nightmare Moon stories. It's kind of short, but I hope you like it. It starts off with little Luna then as she gets older she begins to feel jealous of Celestia. She begins to practice magic until one day she finally decides to take revenge.
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Not bad. I give you a like for it but this kinda story it was too short. There was no meat to it just parts of the juicy bits. The story of Nightmare Moon/Luna and Celestia from the beginning is hard to do with a short story like this but you did a good job of doing it. It just not enough words I guess is what I am saying. Great job writing just the wrong kind of um theme I guess.
3357098 It's fine
I'd rather have honesty than just people saying they like my story. This is my first fanfic and I'm hoping to get better at it 
Anyways thanks again for the feedback! 
-BMH
3357162 Oh! your writing skills are good! I can't wait to read what you put out next. I like finding new writers on here. Ones with skills mind you and you have some so keep up the good work.
3357255 Thanks! I really appreciate it
-BMH
So this is your first story, eh? It seems that Luna's downfall is the most common choice among new authors - I've read quite a lot, but I honestly never get bored of them. Each author's unique take makes that well-known story feel different. In your case, short chunks of text made me fell almost as if I was watching photos, one by one, with pivotal events caught on them. That said, I really liked it and good job!
3426267 Thanks