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Crisis Novastar


Every thing that has a beginning has an end. I'm both the beginning and the end for I'm Ragnarok!

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why did you rewrite it?:applejackconfused:

3503568 I didn't. I just editing some parts

OMFG he told them 'Cupcakes' :pinkiegasp::pinkiecrazy::pinkiehappy: I certainly don't blame Scoots for making him stop.

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Should the first chap be called the Plain or the Plan?

Can't wait for the next chapter.

Celestia went into Mama Bear mode. lol.

What happened to chapter 3?

Spike inspected his card. An ace a five and a two...twenty one.

.... That's not twenty one...

An orange coated mare wearing a yellow short skirt saw the purple and green blur rushing to it destination. What followed was a strong gust of wind that lifted the back side of her skirt, showing the white thong and carrot cutie mark underneath.

Yes!

“Truth or dare?”

“Dare”

“I dare you to make out with Sweetie.”

-POOMF, wing boner-......This got interesting. :rainbowkiss:

that about says it all

There were a number of errors, however, since this was a clop and I got the gist of everything, I'm not complaining. I loved the barn scene.

Damn, Finally! I hated that thing (Blueblood) was wandering around the castle. Good thing it's taken care of.

Love the new cover art!:pinkiehappy:
Scootaloo's eyes are the wrong color, but other than that it is simply Magnificent!:raritystarry:

Even though Rarity got her boyfriend in Thunderlane, she really missed out on the Adonis that is Spike. She said it herself, she was surprised by how much sex she got out of Thunderlane after the festival. I'm guessing roughly three shots from him (at least) and at least 6 from her. And apparently he's gotten experience (i.e., he's not a virgin, obviously)

Spike took care of business.....in a barn on the hay (as opposed to a mattress in her boutique), with 4 mares (as opposed to just one stallion, come on, Twilight has two, a guy and a girl), at roughly the same time (top that, Thunderlane!!), and got 16 shots of the baby stuff (4 per mare, no telling how many orgasms his mares had) Not to mention that whatever Rarity rejected, Sweetie Belle took full advantage of it.....

And Thunder even knows he's beat (...Lucky dragon...).......oh yeah, Spike was a VIRGIN dragon!!:rainbowlaugh:

All I have to say any further to this, Rarity, is..........................................HA HA!!!!




..........at least you and he are still friends..:twilightblush:


Almost forgot---Sweetie Belle is alpha mare. She's the one with the most connection to Spike, and she's the "Rarity lite" of the crew. So Spike kinda got his dream with one of them. (Main diff: Sweetie Loves him, Rarity didn't)

Great peace of work. Can't wait to see what happens in the "Sequel"?:rainbowderp: Or are you just saying "Squeal" for no reason? Anyways great job.:twilightsmile:

:pinkiehappy: Sequel :pinkiehappy: you better not be lying :twilightsmile: or ELSE :flutterrage:
but really cant wait to see it :twilightsmile:

I definitely liked this story. Are there going to be any side stories to this? Like how Flash, Trixie and Twilight's relationship works out? Or any other relationships you brought up?

3806188 there may be. Most will be one shot clop.

"Spike’s earning boy" ??

First: Congrats on the sequel!! If it turns out at least half as good as Spike's Trick or Treat, it's gonna be a huge success!!

Second: I wonder who else got down other than that barn party!! Basically everyone else is there, and I did see having Discord and Celestia dancing, but it showed that he slept with Fluttershy on Nightmare Night. So, what happened, he dumped Fluttershy for Celestia? And I do wonder also, since it showed Thunderlane is Rarity's fiance' now. Is it safe to say that Spike is gonna be the best man when that wedding happens? Definitely also seeing him and his wife Sweetie Belle being the wedding entertainment when that happens. Kind of a "closing the loop" thing. Everyone stays good friends w/o the strain of crushes, affairs, or unrequited affection, because each of the four have their special somepony as their own and no conflict.

Sequel???? squeal!!!!

I'm commenting before I've actually read anything, but I just want to say I really like that picture of the group! Do you have a link to the source?

>> Crisis Nova
That's ok, I was just wondering.
And I just finished the story- I love it!! One of my new favorites!

What is the name of the sequel and is it out yet:duck:

3904113 the name is Kririn hearth warming eve and it 50% done

LOVED THIS 5/5 panzers

:heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart: could not stop reading i want to see the sequal.

Er....son?

:trollestia: laid :moustache: egg...how?

I mean, its not bad...just some exposition would be bice

This is quite the heart warming story, and if you now already on my watch list you are now.:twilightsmile:

3958324 I think she just found his egg somewhere and decided that what ever hatches, she will treat it as her adopted child
btw that Celestia rage mode:rainbowlaugh:

OMG this chapter was hilarious! :rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh:
Little help here please I'm dying of laughter!
well at least I'm going out with a smile :pinkiehappy:

Sweet Celestia, spike my man! 16 shots?! holy cow! Spike, you are just a boss, your boss levels are Over 90000!!!!:flutterrage::flutterrage:

3802721 All very true. All I have to say to Rarity is BWAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA, YOUR LOSS BEEEEEEEAAAAAAACH!!

the number of grammar sins is too dang high, so says my inner grammar Nazi

4030501 but did you enjoy the story?

You sir... need more editors. I would be happy to help you out also.

“And then we buck like bunnies in their mating season.”

"then we bucked like bunnies in mating season"
Never start a sentence with and even in dialog it makes you seem weaker as a writer. Bucked in past tense because it already happened and you don't need to state "their" bunnies in mating season is sounds better to the reader.
This is only one example of many I have noted. Overall it was still an amazing piece of work and i believe you can go far in your writing. You just need a bit of editing.

4035804 I know. Sadly some bitch took my wireless router so I can't get on the Internet with my desktop. But if you want to edit then pm you gmail.

Please make an alternate ending or continuation to this I really want to know what happens next like, Is there going to be a one-on-one date and is Spike going to move in with the CMC inside his cave and much more. All I have to say is everything that I read down to the introductory and how you got the reader to want to know more also the Fanart you pick goes to go along with the store paints a vivid picture for the reader. :twilightblush: This store is gold sir. Here's hoping you continue this store. Like Rainbow Dash and the Daring Do Story's I'll be wait for your next Chapter to come out. :rainbowkiss:

You are a true Artist of words my friend. I hope I see more of Babs seed in the future because I've notice only you do an awesome job with her charter and also with the rest of the CMC. Hope to see what your working on your Biggest fun Neon Lights :pinkiehappy:

4071691 glad you enjoy the story. The squel is out you know.

4030879 yes I did actually and I have read about 5 more times

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