that about says it all

There were a number of errors, however, since this was a clop and I got the gist of everything, I'm not complaining. I loved the barn scene.

Love the new cover art!
Scootaloo's eyes are the wrong color, but other than that it is simply Magnificent!

Even though Rarity got her boyfriend in Thunderlane, she really missed out on the Adonis that is Spike. She said it herself, she was surprised by how much sex she got out of Thunderlane after the festival. I'm guessing roughly three shots from him (at least) and at least 6 from her. And apparently he's gotten experience (i.e., he's not a virgin, obviously)

Spike took care of business.....in a barn on the hay (as opposed to a mattress in her boutique), with 4 mares (as opposed to just one stallion, come on, Twilight has two, a guy and a girl), at roughly the same time (top that, Thunderlane!!), and got 16 shots of the baby stuff (4 per mare, no telling how many orgasms his mares had) Not to mention that whatever Rarity rejected, Sweetie Belle took full advantage of it.....

And Thunder even knows he's beat (...Lucky dragon...).......oh yeah, Spike was a VIRGIN dragon!!

All I have to say any further to this, Rarity, is..........................................HA HA!!!!

..........at least you and he are still friends..

Almost forgot---Sweetie Belle is alpha mare. She's the one with the most connection to Spike, and she's the "Rarity lite" of the crew. So Spike kinda got his dream with one of them. (Main diff: Sweetie Loves him, Rarity didn't)

Sweet Celestia, spike my man! 16 shots?! holy cow! Spike, you are just a boss, your boss levels are Over 90000!!!!

3802721 All very true. All I have to say to Rarity is BWAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA, YOUR LOSS BEEEEEEEAAAAAAACH!!

the number of grammar sins is too dang high, so says my inner grammar Nazi

You sir... need more editors. I would be happy to help you out also.

“And then we buck like bunnies in their mating season.”

"then we bucked like bunnies in mating season"
Never start a sentence with and even in dialog it makes you seem weaker as a writer. Bucked in past tense because it already happened and you don't need to state "their" bunnies in mating season is sounds better to the reader.
This is only one example of many I have noted. Overall it was still an amazing piece of work and i believe you can go far in your writing. You just need a bit of editing.

Please make an alternate ending or continuation to this I really want to know what happens next like, Is there going to be a one-on-one date and is Spike going to move in with the CMC inside his cave and much more. All I have to say is everything that I read down to the introductory and how you got the reader to want to know more also the Fanart you pick goes to go along with the store paints a vivid picture for the reader. This store is gold sir. Here's hoping you continue this store. Like Rainbow Dash and the Daring Do Story's I'll be wait for your next Chapter to come out.

Lol with everyone especially fluttershy

The End of the Chapter (3/4 of it):"And they all
fucked."

CUTIE MARK CRUSADERS VIRGINITY LOSERS YAY!!!!!
Very nice story anyway.

The story is good but you need to re edit this for grammar reasons, there are many misspells, typos and you sometimes write the same word twice. Get someone to fix those issues and you'll be get no more bad complains because as i said, the story is awesome but those typos can put off a lot of readers. I can lend you my help with it if you need it, just sent me a private message and I'll help you out anytime.

some of the editing wasint all that grate but good story tho

So those four weren't the only mares who had a good time. Unlike some others though, they probably have no regrets, judging by the screaming of the others.

4035804 normally I would agree with you on not starting a sentence with a conjunction. However, in this context I would disagree, as he is quoting the character. While true, that the writer is the one creating the dialogue, the character might not know, or care about some rules of gramma.

While I enjoy the story, the number errors made it almost unreadable for me. The biggest problem I saw in this chapter was a failure to remember the "There, Their and They're" rule, I recommend you back and read up on that, and read through what you have posted so far. You might also want to get an editor to help clean it all up.

I would SOO SO SO do Applebloom!