• Published 7th Nov 2013
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The Wings of Lulamoon - Azusa



The Great and Powerful Trixie will stop at nothing to obtain a position royalty and the power that comes with it, even if it means courting the newest member of the royal family.

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The Bright and Sparkling Empire

Trixie pulled her cart a little faster as she charged forward. Her long and perilous trek to reunite with Equestria’s newest princess was complete. The shimmering magenta hue of the Crystal Empire gates stood up ahead.

As she approached the home of the crystal ponies, the castle at the center of the empire sprung into view. Even from a distance, the radiance of the tower shone brightly. Wisps of pastel aura ribboned out of its peak. Once she arrived at the gates, she paused.

High in the sky, between the ruby gates, there hovered a trio of gems: the two on the sides were lavender, the one in the center azure. The crystals slowly flittered in the air as the gravitational force of the towers held them above the grass below. Trixie eyed them with suspicion as she passed through.

The path connecting the border gate to the city stretched endlessly into the distance. Knowing how greatly the empire had expanded since it was freed, Trixie had no doubt as to the purpose of such a road. The ponies surrounding her were a mix of mostly of crystal, with a few solid ones here and there. Trixie marveled at the way their coats sparkled in the morning sun, radiating a sense of calm that seemed to permeate the entire kingdom.

The buildings that lined the street glimmered in the sunlight. With every step toward the castle, the colossal landmark seemed to grow ever taller, making Trixie feel like an ant before the mighty oak. The light from the tower felt warm on Trixie’s fur. She wondered whether it was only a reflection of the sun, or if the building itself actually glowed. A sudden thought made her lightly chuckle. It matches my coat.

Her gaze floated upward to see the princess of the Crystal Empire sitting on the balcony. Trixie had forgotten how pretty she was, even while doing something as simple as sorting paperwork.

“Hey, Twilight, how’s the weather up there?!” Trixie said, waving to her.

“Trixie! Is that you?!” Twilight stood and waved back, leaning over the railing. “Oh, I’m so happy to finally see a friendly face.”

Huh? Why’s she so eager to talk to me? Trixie thought. Sure, we aren’t mortal enemies anymore, but she’s acting like we’re best friends. She shrugged off the thought and called back to her: “So, are you going to show off those new wings of yours?”

“Sure, just let me—whoa!”

Trixie’s eyes went wide as Twilight lost her balance and tumbled over the balcony railing. “Fly, Twilight! Open your wings!”

“I’m… trying!” Twilight grunted as her wings unfurled, and she flew through the air towards her guest. Faster and faster she sped.

Trixie gasped as Twilight’s face connected with the pathway. The princess tumbled across the ground and stopped inches away from Trixie’s muzzle.

“Your Majesty!” Trixie said, quickly unhitching herself from the cart. Her heart skipped a beat. “A-are you all right?”

With her head wobbling side to side and her eyes not quite aligned, Twilight Sparkle let out a chuckle. “I guess I just haven’t got the hang of landing, yet.” She scratched the back of her mane with a hoof.

“Oh, you must be more careful, Twi—I mean, Your Highness. I hate to think what would happen to the Crystal Empire if you had gotten hurt.”

Twilight shook her head. “Sorry, I guess I couldn’t help myself. You’re my first visitor since Princess Cadance went back to Canterlot.”

A sly smile formed on Trixie’s face. Perfect. Without anypony else competing for her attention, I have Twilight Sparkle all to myself. She quickly hid her smugness before Twilight could notice. “What about your old friends from Ponyville? Haven’t they had a chance to drop by?”

“No, not yet...” Twilight’s face and ears drooped. “They haven’t been able to find the time. The train trip to get here is so long that they’d have to stay overnight for it to be worth it. But Spike stayed behind with Rarity, so we can still talk through letters...”

“Oh, Twilight.” Trixie shook her head, smiling. “You’re not alone now. I’m here with you, and I plan to stay for a while.”

“You do?” Twilight asked, looking up at her. Trixie nodded her head, smiling. “Oh, that would be fantastic! Finally, those long, lonely days are over.” Twilight leapt in the air and spread her wings wide. “Let me give you the royal tour.” Princess Twilight galloped off, dragging Trixie along behind her.

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The first things to pop out at Trixie were the twin griffon statues that guarded the library. Their heads stood proud as they gazed intently at the café across the street. Trixie ducked down as she passed under the right one’s claws and glared at it, idly wondering if they were secretly real griffons.

“You coming, Trixie?”

“Huh?” Trixie turned to see Twilight holding the library door open for her. She couldn't help but smirk at the sight. “Why, Your Highness, I’m supposed to do that for you.”

Twilight giggled. “Yeah, I know,” she said as Trixie followed her inside. “But I want my guests here at the Crystal Empire to feel at home.”

Oh, I definitely feel at home, Trixie thought.

The size of the Crystal Empire library easily dwarfed the one in Ponyville. Around them, the murmurs of voices and flipping of pages filled the air. The sapphire shelves shimmered brightly. Such a beautiful way to store books. This was clearly a society that valued knowledge greatly.

A couple of mares passed them. They avoided facing Twilight as she gazed longingly at them. Trixie ignored Twilight’s mumbles about how nice it is to have friends.

The two of them found the librarian reshelving a cart full of books. She bowed as she saw them approach. “Welcome back, Your Highness. Do you need any help finding anything?”

“Not today.” Twilight motioned in Trixie’s direction. “This is my good friend, Trixie. I’m just showing her around today.”

Trixie tilted her head to see the books behind the librarian. Her eyebrows shot up when she noticed the line of carts behind it. “My my, I knew the crystal ponies read a lot of books, but this...” She shook her head.

The old librarian laughed. “Oh, those aren’t returns. They’re the new books we acquired with the increased budget.”

Trixie raised an eyebrow at Twilight, smirking.

Twilight responded with a sheepish grin. “Well… yes. I thought it would help the crystal ponies to adapt to this new time period.” Her eyes darted between the two of them.

“Yes, of course…” The librarian sighed. “It’s just…”

“Something wrong?” Trixie asked.

“I’m not sure I completely understand these new books. They’re so much shorter than the ones I read in my youth.”

“Actually,” Twilight said, “they aren’t that much shorter. Look at the Daring Do books. They’re just one really long story that’s been divided up into smaller ones.”

As the two of them looked at the books, Trixie turned her attention to the shelf next to them and ran a hoof along the various tomes. Then, her jaw dropped.

ThatNo, it can’t be!

She slipped the book off of the shelf and into her hooves. Inscribed in gold print on the cover was a single word: Philonomicon. Trixie gazed at it, wide eyed. She had heard stories of a lost spell book written by Starswirl The Bearded, but she never thought she would be holding it in her hooves. Oh, the wonders that awaited her inside. She slowly peeled open the front cover and flipped through the first few crisp snow-white pages.

“Oh, horseapples!”

The passages were scribbled together with very jerky prose. All the letters ran into each other, too.

She rested her head on the tome, pouting. A collection of some of the greatest magic spells in all of Equestria sat in front of her—limitless power beyond the comprehension of mere mortals—and she could never know the secrets that lay within.

Twilight picked up the book to get a closer look. After skimming a few pages, she said, “Why are you complaining, Trixie. It’s just cursive. My letters from Celestia are written in it all the time.”

“Cursive!” Trixie huffed. “Archaic scribbling from a primitive time. It was antiquated from the moment the typewriter was invented.”

“Well, if you don’t want me to help you read it…” Twilight said, rolling her eyes.

“But I suppose I could endure the... flowing prose,” Trixie said, getting back on her hooves, “especially if it means spending time with you, Twilight.” She slipped a forehoof over Twilight’s back and pulled her close.

Maybe even a lifetime, if I play my cards right.

“Hmm, that does sound like fun.” Twilight turned back to the librarian. “I guess I just have one to check out for today,” she said as Trixie floated the book over to the elderly mare.

The librarian adjusted her spectacles to get a better look. “Oh, this is one of the older books that we’re throwing away to make room for the new ones.”

What?!” Twilight and Trixie said in unison. “You can’t!”

“Well, I had thought of putting them up for sale, but who would want to buy them? The other patrons seem more interested in catching up with the last thousand years of literature.”

“I’ll take them off your hooves,” Twilight said, rushing over to her.

“Oh, but I couldn’t ask you to do that, Your Majesty. You’ve done so much for us so much already.”

“What if I bought them? I’d even pay with my own personal slice of the royal budget.”

“Well, when you put it that way…”

“I’ll send Spike over to get them later.”

“Uh… Twilight?” Trixie asked.

“Yes, Trixie?”

Trixie stared at her. Slowly Twilight’s face turned into a frown.

“Oh, right…” Twilight shook her head, then turned back to the librarian. “I’ll send a member of the royal staff to retrieve them before the day ends.”

With that, Twilight and Trixie left the library.

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The racket of many ponies chatting away drifted through the air outside of the café, but all voices fell silent as Trixie and Twilight entered the establishment. Guess they’ve never seen a celebrity live before, Trixie thought, smiling.

Slowly, everypony stood and bowed to Princess Twilight.

Oh… right. Trixie bit her lip. Twilight’s eyes darted around the room and she let out a soft, sheepish chuckle. Trixie took the first step forward as they trotted to the counter.

“Oh, Y-Your Majesty!” the crystal pony mare behind the counter said. “C-can I get you anything? Coffee? Tea? A sandwich perhaps?”

Twilight pressed her lips together as she tried to decide on what to order. “Hmm…”

Trixie pushed past her. “I will have a toasted bagel with peanut butter and a black coffee.”

Shivering, the mare behind the counter raised an eyebrow at her, then glanced at Twilight. “Y-yes, ma’am. Will there be anything else?”

“Yes,” Twilight said, “I will have a daisy sandwich and a cup of green tea.” She nodded her head and smiled, proudly.

“C-coming right up.” She bowed to Twilight and went to work preparing their order.

Moments later the two friends were eating at what was once an empty table. Twilight chomped away at her sandwich with a hint of a smile on her face. Trixie lifted hers to take a bite.

A salty, slimy taste flooded her mouth, making her gag. Trixie spread the two halves of her sandwich apart, revealing a margarine spread mixed with goobers.

Peanut… butter? She glared back at the mare at the counter.

“Is something the matter?” The mare asked as she saw Trixie trotting towards her. “That is what you ordered, isn’t i—” She snapped her head back when Trixie got up in her face, frowning.

“This is an outrage! I asked for peanut butter, not this… perversion.”

The mare shifted her gaze to Twilight Sparkle, who still sat at the table, watching them as she munched on her lunch. “I’m so sorry! I thought that was what you wanted. P-please, don’t send me to the moon!” Tears started to well up in her eyes.

Trixie took a step back, placed a hoof to her mouth. “I, uh…”

“Knock it off, Trixie. You’re making a scene,” Twilight said, staring daggers at her as she trotted up.

Trixie glared at Twilight. “I don’t care who sees me. I demand justice!” She pounded a hoof on the counter.

“But it’s just a sandwich. It isn’t worth making a fuss over. Just ask her to make you another. She can even charge me for both.”

Trixie thought about it for a moment, and then grunted. “I guess…” she said, glancing up at Twilight.

Trixie watched as Twilight showed the mare how to make a paste by mixing ground peanuts and honey. It should’ve been obvious that the mare wouldn’t know what peanut butter was, seeing as it was invented after the Crystal Empire’s disappearance. After a few moments, Trixie finally got her bagel and thanked the mare on her way back to the table.

“Mmm!” Trixie said after taking a bite. A wide smile grew on her face. Wow, this is amazing! The ingredients must have been recently acquired, and of course Twilight’s instructions had to have helped greatly. She licked her lips after swallowing the last bite.

A few moments later, her chest felt a little sore, and she knew that it probably wasn’t heartburn. Her gaze fell upon the empty plate in front of her, frowning. Twilight’s sigh snapped Trixie back to reality. She looked up to see her staring at a group of ponies at the back of the café.

“Twilight? Is something the matter?” Trixie asked, eyebrow raised.

“Oh!” Twilight turned back to her, then let out a light chuckle. “I just wanted to know what book they were talking about.”

Trixie glanced in their direction to see that they did have a book open on the table. Occasionally, one of them pointed to it mid-sentence. “Would you like to go over and talk to them?” Trixie asked, shifting her gaze back down to her plate.

Twilight shook her head. "I can't. They don't see me as an equal anymore. I sometimes wonder what life would have been like if Luna had never been banished in the first place. Would our subjects be so fearful of us, then? Or is it inevitable that somepony in a higher power would be feared?”

Trixie sighed as she realized she didn’t have the answers Twilight sought. She wondered if it really mattered, though. Twilight wasn’t alone now that she was here, and she could stay for as long as Twilight needed her. Maybe Trixie would even get a pair of wings out of it. She licked her lips and rubbed her hooves together at the idea.

After chatting for a little while longer, Twilight finished her meal, paid, and left. Trixie followed her, pausing for a moment at the front counter. “Ma’am?”

The mare behind it turned to her. “Y-yes? Is s-something wrong?”

“I’m…” Trixie scratched the back of her mane. “I’m sorry about the way I acted before. I should’ve been more specific with my order. Your peanut butter was most delectable, and I will be sure to stop by to taste it again.”

The mare looked a little relieved. “Thank you, uh… I never got your name.”

“Trixie.” She tipped her hat to her. “The Great and Powerful. Yours?”

“Aurea,” she said.

“See you around, Aurea,” Trixie said, before leaving to chase after Twilight.

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The crystal leaves swam around Trixie as she trotted with Twilight through the park. Twilight ruffled her feathers as the hint of an autumn chill graced them. The sunlight bleed through the prismatic petals, creating a vibrant array of radiant colors.

They sped up to a canter when the castle came into view. Then, Trixie noticed the light shimmer off the Crystal Heart, and she slowed to a stop. The way it glowed as it hovered there under the tower made her eyes go wide. She couldn’t look away. Her hoof raised as if on its own to touch the opal gem. If she just touched it, could she gain even a small amount of its power?

“It’s beautiful, isn’t it?”

Trixie spun around to see Twilight standing next to her, smiling.

“This little jewel powers the whole Crystal Empire, and the crystal ponies in turn power it with the love they share.”

“Wow!” Trixie let out a whistle. “I wonder what would happen if I touched it?”

“Hmm...” Twilight tapped a hoof to her chin. “Well, I know one way to find out.”

“You mean I can…”

Twilight nodded in reply.

“O-okay…” Trixie gulped and, once again, raised a hoof to the Crystal Heart.

Trixie’s hoof felt toasty as she made contact with the gem. Surprised, she jerked her hoof away, sending the ornament revolving. As it whirled around in the anti-gravity hold of the altar, its vibrant light grew in intensity. The ribbons of aura swept over the stone path and enveloped Trixie, blinding her. When the luminescence cleared, Trixie found that her body sparkled in the sunlight. She found, when she tapped her hoof on the trotway, that her body was, quite literally, crystalline.

“Twilight? The crystal ponies… are actually made of crystal?!”

As she turned to face her, Trixie gasped as she noticed that Twilight’s body had also solidified. But Trixie noticed something else, then: she could see through Twilight Sparkle like a stained glass window.

Trixie pranced circles around Twilight, gleefully peeking through her at every angle. “This is amazing! I never knew such a place existed. I want to stay here forever!”

“Oh, yeah.” Twilight smirked at her. “I never did ask, where are you staying, Trixie?”

Trixie held a hoof to her chest, eyes closed and still grinning like a fool. “Well, as a traveling magician, I have a personal carriage where I will be staying. Do you think it would be out of the way if I parked it under the castle?”

Twilight whinnied. “Your carriage?! Trixie, it’s too cold to sleep outside in this weather. You’ll freeze! You must stay in the castle as my guest.”

“But I’ve been sleeping in that carriage since—” Trixie glanced at the castle steps, and then back at Twilight who was frowning at her. Why does she want me staying with her so badly? There’s no way she’d be this quick to trust me after…

Shaking her head, Trixie decided that it wasn’t worth worrying about. “Well… if you insist.”

With a winning smile upon her face, Twilight led Trixie up the steps and into the castle. The many sapphire pillars that lined the walls looked as if they had been grown out of the floor itself, sharp spikes protruding out of them. Trixie’s diamond-like tissue was the only thing keeping her from getting cut when she touched it.

It seemed like a long time, climbing staircase after staircase and trotting down hallway after hallway, before Twilight finally stopped at a door on the high indoor balcony that looped around in a ring. She let loose a knowing smirk as she opened the door. Inside was a royal bedroom. The sheets on the bed were a pale cornflower blue, the curtains a brilliant azure, and the bedside table and lamp magenta.

“This room…” Trixie said, mouth agape. “It looks just like me!” A grin grew on Trixie’s features as she scanned the room. “Oh, Twilight, how did you get this ready in such a short time? It must have taken the whole palace staff.”

Twilight giggled. “Oh, it’s always been like this. After my friends left, I got a little bored here all alone, so I explored the entire castle. I know the place top to bottom. When I saw this room, it immediately reminded me of you. After all, how could I forget The Great and Powerful Trixie?”

Trixie beamed at her friend as she said that last sentence. “You’re wonderful, Twilight. How can I ever repay you?”

“You don’t have to pay me back. Just being here as my friend means more to me than all the jewels of the Crystal Empire. As a princess, I’ve got everything… except somepony to share it all with.”

Wait a minute, that’s why Twilight’s been so friendly with me. Her friends have left her all alone. I’m the only one she has left… Caught up in her thoughts, Trixie didn’t notice Twilight trotting toward her until her friend’s forehooves were ribboned around her. Trixie felt a few burning embers in her chest as she returned the embrace, and the warmth stayed even after the two of them let go.

“Come on,” Twilight said, skipping towards the door. “Let me show you around the rest of the castle.”

Trixie nodded and dashed after her, but not before sparing a glance back at her new bedroom, one that she hoped would be a permanent one.

Author's Note:

Thanks to Garnot, Writer's Block, Josh Meihaus, Amacita, StapleCactus, and Mattricole for help editing this.

Comments ( 56 )

Great story, hope to see more of it in the future.

hmm...this is actually a very good beginning. The story is very different then the normal Twixie's I've seen and takes place in a location that asides from Cadence x Shining Armor fics isn't used alot. Quite happy to see how this goes between Twilight and Trixie. Trixie's personality is fairly accurate, seems like she mellowed out a little bit more around Twilight then we've seen in the past. But if she is trying to court Twilight and become an alicorn I guess it would make sense if she is faking it a little.
Looking forward to seeing how this continues, kinda annoyed that this has several dislikes but not a single explanation in the comments.

Sweet story. Is Trixie trying to schmooze her into luxury, or is she genuinely interested in the lonely princess? Don't tell, we'll find out. Either way, she makes Twilight happy. Much as I don't think canon Twilight would ever let her royalty come between her and her friends (we'll see in a few weeks how things turn out, yes?), it does provide a framework to set the whole situation up. Would be interesting if the friends do show up later, once Trixie's settled in properly.

The restaurant scene ending was nice. I've always believed in treating waiters and waitresses well, even with something as simple as a compliment; it encourages them to give you good service next time you visit. It wouldn't surprise me if Trixie's had to wait tables at some low point in her career, so she has some sympathy for the mare who's just trying to please a difficult customer.

And now we play the waiting game...

Not a bad start, I will be keeping an eye on this one.

Congratulations on the feature old friend, well deserved!

Enjoying this so far!

It's a Twixie? Drat, was hoping for something original involving Luna.:trixieshiftleft:

Whose cover art is that? It's very nice.

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Yeah...

Luna will be making a few appearances in this though.

Hrm. Twi must either be really lonely, or she's been harboring feelings for Trixie already. Aside from her over-eagerness, no complaints about the writing.

Interesting. I like that both ponies have a reason to grow together rather than secretly being in love the whole time. I would like a bit more detail/backstory on Trixie's decision to seduce Twilight and why Twilight is alone and in charge of the Crystal Empire, but those are minor complaints.

The idea is defenetly interesting, If you can reach least 50K words I´ll gladly read it.:pinkiecrazy:

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The Great and Powerful Trixie will stop at nothing to obtain a royal position and the power that comes with it, even if it means courting the newest member of the royal family.

Sorry, but how did you think this was about Luna? o.O It had Trixie right in the beginning of the summary. The only possible thing I can think of is people misreading the title and thinking it says 'Lunamoon' instead of "Lulamoon' or something. Just curious since it seems like you're not the only one who thought this.

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Yes, I am with you on this one, sire. How about we write a Lixie romance together, then? :trollestia:

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Hey, let me know if you do. I'd love to check it out. See if you can integrate Luna's fanon love of video games into it.

3457225 What, no Trilestia? :raritycry:

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inb4 someone suggests alicorn orgy on Trixie. (It's the only logical place this was going to end up at.)

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... Why is Twilight in charge of the Crystal Empire, anyway? I mean, Cadence's cutie mark is literally the crystal heart, so I'd assume she's the legitimate ruler.

Is Cadence on a vacation of sorts in Canterlot with Shining Armor, then? Is she pregnant, and unable to fulfill her duties until she comes to term?

Or is this a hazing ritual the other three princesses have decided to start?

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Because it's based on my season four predictions. And that's all I can say right now.

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That's a fine basis, but it would help if those predictions were spelled out in the world of the story.

Edit: Despite the unfortunate timing, I'm not the one who downvoted your comment.

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Don't worry, they will be. I can't reveal everything in chapter one.

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I think it starts as one and becomes the other.

I think my favorite two bits were the simultaneous 'you can't do that' reactions to throwing away books, and that Trixie went back to apologize for being so upset, which shows she really has changed in character.

Horses don't have fur, they have coats.

You need to work on describing surroundings; during Trixie and Twilight's meeting I had no idea what was going on (How many buildings are in the area? How populous is the city? Is Twilight working on a balcony or does the balcony have a view into her office? How tall is it, and how can she hear Trixie so clearly? What's the weather like? What is the road that Twilight smashes into like? Why isn't she hurt more?).

I also notice a lot of the same pacing problems from the first chapter. The dialogue in particular moves too quickly; Trixie and Twilight have a prolonged discussion as Twilight is falling off a castle. Twilight recovers from her injury instantly. The discussion with the librarian moves lightning-fast too, like all the characters know exactly what the other is about to say and have their responses planned ahead of time.

"Finally, those long, lonely days are over."

Trixie ignored Twilight’s mumbles about how nice it is to have friends.

More forced characterization. There are ways to show what characters are thinking and how they feel without piling it on like this. Trixie and Twilight's interactions in particular feel forced; they parted on good terms the last time they met, yes, but here they act like they saw each other just yesterday. There's no catch-up or awkward re-introduction and it doesn't feel realistic.

Overall I like the concept, but frankly I couldn't enjoy the story as-written; there's too many pacing errors and minimalistic description. I gave up right after the library sequence. It feels like you are trying to rush through the story to get to the good parts, but for a story that focuses on character interactions, moments like these are the good parts, and they deserve more attention to detail. It seems as though this only got featured because it centers on a popular ship (or the promise of an unorthodox one, if the comments are anything to go by).

Bico #25 · Nov 8th, 2013 · · 2 ·

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Horses don't have fur, they have coats.

Coats of fur.

3459785 Horses have coats of hair, not fur. The use of the word fur is mostly semantic, but there is a difference. Fur is (generally) a product of the fur industry.

Sources;
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Fur
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Coat_%28animal%29
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Horsehair

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First sentence of the article for fur you linked:

Fur is a synonym for hair, used in reference to non-human animals, usually mammals, particularly those with extensive body hair coverage. The term is sometimes used to refer to the body hair of an animal as a complete coat, also known as the "pelage".

(underline mine)

Fur and hair refer to exactly the same thing. Certain individuals may prefer one term over the other, but both are technically accurate, and common parlance doesn't make the distinction. Regardless, a coat is made up of fur/hair, so saying that a horse doesn't have fur/hair but instead has a coat (made up of what you just said they don't have) is silly.

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Now now, let's play nice here.

3459923 We'll have to agree to disagree then. Naturally, I'm still willing to discuss any of the other points I listed, all of which are much more important issues than the semantics of a single word.

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Well, thanks for reading as far as you had. Much of what you mentioned are things that I was worried about and thought I had fixed. Ah well, I'm determined to have this be the first story that I actually finish instead of just "ending" like the last two, so there's noting to do but keep moving forward.

The only part I'm really disagree with you on is what you said about Twilight falling out of the castle. I'm going to pull the "It's a cartoon" card on that.

Due to circumstances and characteristics (which cleverpun pointed out), this read like a fanfic written by Trixie.
3460022 Are you actually Great and Powerful Trixie? It would explain a lot. :trixieshiftright:

In any case, I'm curious to read more.

Okay, I've been captivated.

You have a like and a fav, now don't you dare slack off on this wonderful piece of work.

Btw, if the quality diminishes in any observable way, we'll be sure to scream lovingly harsh criticism at you.:rainbowwild:

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Yes, that's pretty much what I was going for with this. It's kinda how the third limited viewpoint works.

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Please do. This will be the first time I actually finish an ongoing story, so I don't have as much experience with endings as I have with openings.

I really like how this story is going, and I really look forward to the next chapter.

3456886 I would definitely latch on to a familiar face if I was all alone for an extended period of time...

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Please do. This will be the first time I actually finish an ongoing story, so I don't have as much experience with endings as I have with openings.

I do hope so :p

You got featured! :yay:

Way to go, broseph. :moustache:

the cover art is nice but is the thing pined by trixe's spear a banner with twi's cutie mark or is it..........OH GOD is it her mark and flesh pined by trixes spear:pinkiesick::fluttercry::pinkiesad2: that would be the cause of the blood on the spear I hope its not going to happen to twi?

3460022 Even in the show the characters still react when somepony gets injured. The fact that you describe her injury so vaguely, if at all, makes it even harder to accept as part of the story. It feels like it doesn't need to be there, which is a pretty severe contrast with the aforementioned lack of description.

Since I'm not the only person who noticed all the issues with it, hopefully you'll make an effort to address the problems in later chapters, even if you don't end up repairing the first ones.

Well....I LOVE it:pinkiehappy: :pinkiehappy: :pinkiehappy: :pinkiehappy: :pinkiehappy: :pinkiehappy:

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Fair enough. While no one may agree with me, I do believe that this is along the lines what will happen in season four.

I figured that they'd have half a season of Princess Maker, then there'd be a time-skip and the cutie mark crusaders would become the new mane six.

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Hey, couldn't do it without you. Thanks!:pinkiehappy:

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How did I not notice that 'til now.:facehoof:

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Will do. I would like to avoid "Special Edition"-ing the early chapters though.

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That was all I had to argue about. Gotta take what I can get, y'know?

And on my second read through, I realized what the Philonomicon was: The Book of Friendship. Like Necronomicon, but not evil (hopefully).

3463922 Um did you mean to reply to me. I don't quite get your comment in the context of mine. Especially the parts about metaphors and "a mess of journalism".

i've added this to my group X becomes an Alicorn hope you don't mind

This seems like it will be a pretty good read. I've recently realized I love reading about Trixie's character, and I think this story shows a lot of promise for problems involving her character, which would lead to personal development and realizations. I love stories where someone not totally above-bar realize their wrongdoings, whether intended or not, and rise above them for friendships and loves more valuable to them now than the original material goal ever was.

At least, I think that's where this story is going. I'm sort of sappy for that.

This is a really good story i cant wait to read the rest

Mmm I am really getting pulled into the scene you are making, it is able to place the scene in my head without going over board, and I await further chapters, you have me hooked

AZUUUUUUSSSAAAAA...I am speaking to you from BEYOND THE SKYPE CHAT! :derpyderp1: Post the next chapter soon, or all of your millions of fans will assume this story and you to be lost forever!! :pinkiecrazy:

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